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I'll connect the way I want! (v2)

  • by ltdan1504
  • posted Jul 21, 2007
  • 120 Comments

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ltdan1504

this works an just about all colors especially dark

everygirl

:D that looks great..

everygirl

you should show it on a shirt... maybe black

ltdan1504

i think dark green is nice... I'll put it on a shirt after i get some feedback in the final version

ltdan1504

just for reference, the original critique is here

ltdan1504

people please check one of the boxes. If you do i'll mail you a kiss

ltdan1504

and tell me WHY you checked it!

everygirl

i checked submit because i can't think of anything else you can do to it...

everygirl

i suppose you could do something to his tail.

ashleynicolee

i think it would look better on a black t with white as the origional lines.

justabean

I agree with ashleynicolee. Good job though, pretty creative.

redoom

looks good man

redoom

I like black but that is almost the only color tshirt I wear so totally biased but still looks good

ltdan1504

from what I hear this doesn't sound like it has a chance at being printed. what would give it that one variable?

ltdan1504

what bout... thicker crayon lines?

redoom

I think if you made it an actual opened coloring book with some crayons nearby ( mabye some short and broken ones ) drawn simply of course and mabye on a natural color shirt for that manila paper feel

everygirl

on black it's harder to see the dots for me..

redoom

if you drew this badboy in marker pen for the lines and then drew the crayon in actual crayon and scanned it in that would be mad authentic

redoom

the texture would add a lot of character.

redoom

don't give up on it. it's got potential

ltdan1504

i think a scanned image would come out nasty

ashleynicolee

i know what you mean about the dots. i like the idea of crayons. but i don't think you need to show it in a coloring book. deff more detail.

ltdan1504

more detail on what

redoom

character my friend, character

just scanning the crayon strokes only and vectorizing them

ltdan1504

my scanner is teh broken :( i gave some blank elephant copies to a little girl and she turned it into an elephant it's awesome! I wish i could mail it to a designer and they do it lol

redoom

DUDE!!!!!

redoom

I just got a scanner today!!!! Five bucks

juaniki

use my scanner

ltdan1504

this is the least constructive balance of votes lol
please everyone, TELL me why you choose what you chose

condescend

might be cute for a kids shirt, but its lacking something, feels too empty to me. Maybe adding a crayon off to the side or something as stated above.

ltdan1504

what color does everyone think is best

ltdan1504

ok so everyone agrees it needs work. all i can think of is connecting the dots in different ways. so far, people have showed me how it looks ...
with a top hat, bowtie, and monacle
dressed up as a lion with "roar" coming outta the trunk
and more variations of punk style
so please please give me ANY feedback that comes to mind.
no matter how stupid or even harsh it may be

timadd

I think adding more complexity will help... perhaps a crayon or two (stated), scanned crayon (stated), or even maybe a jungle of animals in their natural habitat.... but then there's the crazy punk connected lines!

ltdan1504

ahem. that means YOU.
yeah. especially you.
leave any comment. any criticism. AnYtHiNg

ltdan1504

what about a jungle of animals connected conventionally, and the one punkyphant

ltdan1504

scanned crayon doesn't look too good. i tried it.

ltdan1504

well I'm going to colorado til wednesday so please keep this critique active while i'm gone :)
I'm very interested in what OTHER PEOPLE think

ltdan1504

ok bye now. read other people's comments and my suggestions and tell me what works best in your mind

SourBitch

This would be an awesome sticker or button, but I can't see it as a shirt.

ltdan1504

here's what I'm thinking: a whole jungle of dots. the background (trees) are connected like they should be, and the animals are embellished. for example, a giraffe with a top hat.
I'm also thinking of removing the flames

SourBitch

Whatever you want. I'd suggest you go on to some other idea though.

ltdan1504

I don't wanna give up on my baby :(

ltdan1504

unless.... there's.... no hope... :-(

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