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Strange Neighbors

  • by bortwein
  • posted Sep 05, 2008
  • 40 Comments

I'm hoping to fine tune a lot of the design details so I'm looking for any feedback at this time.

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bortwein
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I'm hoping to fine tune a lot of the design details so I'm looking for any feedback at this time.

Mosquito88

I love how the two normal houses seem to have faces.
How about a grey-black&white color option?

Can you score and comment my design?

KDV

Awesome design! Looks pretty good as it is. Maybe you could play a bit more with the other two houses and try to make it look like they are really looking at their strange neighbor. I don't know, maybe the middle house could exhibit some alien features as well? :)

I'd appreciate a look at my design too:
Geek Chick

bortwein
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"I don't know, maybe the middle house could exhibit some alien features as well?" The fact that it has 3 window eyes and is on its side isn't enough. ;) Not sure what else I could add to the house part without over doing it. I'm thinking I need to make better tress and work on the background a bit.

aled
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Haha - nice. I like the muted tones, but I think it would be nice to see something popping. Perhaps the UFO in a futuristic silver foil if you could bear it?

bortwein
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yeah, I'm trying to figure out the best 8 colors to use to make this have the best contrast but still feel right. I like the idea of using a foil.

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I might try to update this later tonight, so any more feedback could still make it into version 2.

bortwein
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Added some more details for the fun of it and changed the UFO to a Silver Foil like fatheed suggested.

Batnap

Cool crop circles! Submit it.

bortwein
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I'd like to improve the mountain behind it. Any suggestions?

notkin

i think it would be better with no ufo. its not as obvious but i dont think it needs to be.

PuterBoy

Make it a pointing mountain landscape.

like this: ^^^^^^^^

element_101

lol. this shirt makes me laugh.

ecsu
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that girl is cute who is she? :p

the greatest part of it is that the houses are looking at the one in the middle.

nice man... do improve the mountain...

bobuchan

Cool concept and execution.

I like the ufo, but it is rather obvious. As cool as shiny foil is, maybe just a silhouette in the hill color?

Your mountain probably just needs more little ridges.

Ste7en
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oh much improved. I dig it, and think it is ready to submit.

bortwein
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v4 = glitch.

bortwein
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Ok, I feel like I improved the mountains. I made a Black and Grey option now shown on a guy model and I cleaned up a few things on the houses that were bugging me. I kept the foil because I really like how it works. How's it look?

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oh and version 3 is the same as version 5 and version 4 was a glitch because I didn't think version 3 went through. So ignore those 2 versions.

marrgalo

Mmmm when I looked your first version I really liked the UFO without the foil. I think it makes the shirt look a little tacky and that's definitely not the way I envision your design. It has a really cute, clever vibe! Just not feeling that tinfoil (on the green, mostly)

Please have a look at my design, it really needs some help:
http://www.threadless.com/critique/27918/Reef_Safari

Thank you!

willypiva

nice work!
the trees and the car on the right side could use some work

no_skunk

I just don't like the color for the spaceship...

bortwein
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good feed back. I'm going to work on the cars and trees now. I'm still torn by the use of the foil for the UFO, I kind of like it but I understand why it might be over the top for this design.

bobuchan

Just keeps getting better ^-^

Maybe limit the foil on the UFO and/or add it to the houses too? Your mountain tops could use a little variation on the top of the white caps instead of the same line width.

bortwein
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New cars, removed the foil from the green version but left it optional on the b lack option, and fixed a few other things.

iQuitt

the green one is awesome... the black is boring... great design though...

KDV

submit!

Fleck
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submit.

Syncos

Perfect as is. I'd wear it.

Raid71
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nice touch with the windows... sub it

VelociGent

It's clean, but I think you could make it better. It could be a lot funnier than it is.

growabrain

i think itd be better if the house was more like a trapdoor and less like a piece of lego on its side. i mean, i think its a great idea, its just that the house is kinda weird looking like that to me.

aled
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Some great touch's since the first crit. Love the window 'eyes' and the lawn/yard. Subiiiitt!

bortwein
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I think I'll submit this version. Thanks for all the help.

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Submitted.

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