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It's a Real Battle (Revised)

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Here is a revised version. I hope you can tell it's a cigarette now.
picturesonmyeyes
picturesonmyeyes on Aug 10 '05
cigarettes 1 - internal organs 0



is that a kidney or what?
Not a Surfer Rosa
Not a Surfer Rosa on Aug 10 '05
I think it's a lung, picturesonmyeyes.



The only thing I'd say is that the cig's fist looks like the lung/kidney's nose rather than a fist. Is the dot lower down a mouth or a belly button?
jamina
jamina on Aug 10 '05
i agree with not a surfer rosa. make the fist look fistier so it doesnt get confused with the nose.
sailonsilvergirl
sailonsilvergirl on Aug 11 '05
and make the lung look lungier. perhaps the set of lungs would be more recognizable. that looks like a stomach to me.
Denpatou
Denpatou on Aug 11 '05
...it's good now <3



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cperky04
cperky04 on Aug 11 '05
I definitely agree that there should be a set of lungs.
quoperate
quoperate on Aug 11 '05
I thought the lung was a sausage.
herswansong
herswansong on Aug 11 '05
the lung totally looks like a fat pink banana. great idea though!
plastic taxi cab
plastic taxi cab on Aug 11 '05
any suggestions that i could get past the 4 color rule?
Asrai
Asrai on Aug 11 '05
Very good. I'm with the set of lungs people, but I would buy it as is.
ForgottenAura
ForgottenAura on Aug 11 '05
That fist should be the mouth, remove the belly-button-mouth thing, and make another fist on the side of that lungs head. Also, use the cigarette color to put a little detail on the filter. 3. Fix it up and it's a 4+.
oh astronaut
oh astronaut on Aug 11 '05
you should have done a lung or somthing.
Kashi
Kashi on Aug 11 '05
I like this one better than the other, but the lungs still looks like a... not- lung. :(

keep tinkering, is all I can say.
richgama
richgama on Aug 11 '05
Is that a cigarette fighting a testicle?
glamour
glamour on Aug 12 '05
I agree, make the lung actually look like a lung.
plastic taxi cab
plastic taxi cab on Aug 12 '05
It may not look like a lung that much, but it definately does not look like a testicle.
deadsumo
deadsumo on Aug 12 '05
thats a big ciggie
RaeKuusou
RaeKuusou on Aug 12 '05
good idea....but to me it looked like a glue stick punching a pink bananna.
677
677 on Aug 12 '05
At first I thought it was a human hot dog haha get it....



but then I realized and I think it's cute :)
Nina Elizabeth
Nina Elizabeth on Aug 12 '05
I thought it was a weird pear. But yeah. I like it. I just wouldn't wear it.
Baylee
Baylee on Aug 12 '05
i like the idea, but the lung does need to be lung-ier.



slender fungus
slender fungus on Aug 13 '05
cigarettes vs. whoopie cushions?
Voltaire
Voltaire on Aug 13 '05
Voltaire
Voltaire on Aug 13 '05
I LOVE your anti smoking propaganda. NOT
BigRedRod
BigRedRod on Aug 13 '05
Make the lung look less sausage-like and it'd be a winner.
plastic taxi cab
plastic taxi cab on Aug 13 '05
HAHAHAHAHA Voltaire! .........NOT
deadpanfool
deadpanfool on Aug 13 '05
Fistier fist, lungier lung, and I'd buy it in a heartbeat! $5
snowboard22
snowboard22 on Aug 13 '05
great message no smoking!
sharakirsten
sharakirsten on Aug 13 '05
I agree with deadpanfool. 4.
angelaobscura
angelaobscura on Aug 14 '05
i'd buy it if i was a smoker but since i'm not i wouldn't, i really LOVE the idea though!
plastic taxi cab
plastic taxi cab on Aug 14 '05
angelaobscura, this is an anti-smoking shirt showing that cigarettes will kill your lungs.
Mrweh
Mrweh on Aug 14 '05
Yeah, this is really really good. A lot of your work is very good actually.



This design could be improved though.



The main problem is that the lung doesn't look much like a lung; it could be just about any internal organ. Make another lung, so that there are two, and just make them both more...... lung-shaped. Look at pictures of lungs.



I havent bought a threadless tshirt for about 6 months; I havent seen any that have really grabbed me. If this one is made, it will end the 6 month-long drought. SO IT HAD BETTER BE MADE!



Keep up the good designs.
11eleven
11eleven on Aug 14 '05
I agree with Mrweh, I'd die to have this shirt if the lung were fixed. I give it a 4, for now.
Ghost in the Gears
Ghost in the Gears on Aug 14 '05
I think that you have a good concept here on your hands, but I would have to say that it needs some fine polishing. Put a little more detail in both of the objects. The top of the Cig could use a contour line and some dark specks on the butt. I'd say change the lung's shape and add some lung-like veins in it.
plastic taxi cab
plastic taxi cab on Aug 14 '05
Well good news for those who like it. I will be making some touch ups on it and resubmitting it so thanks for all of the comments. For those who don't like it, you can give it another chance or just ignore, but thanks again for the comments.
jobydick
jobydick on Aug 16 '05
i didn't bother to read the comments, but it would be so cute if they had boxing gloves.
rhoadeecha
rhoadeecha on Aug 16 '05
i like it. i think its cute.
thenomadway
thenomadway on Aug 16 '05
i really like this. i'd buy it.
beautifulmind
beautifulmind on Aug 17 '05
i thought it was a kidney or liver *duh*
kemii
kemii on Aug 17 '05
I would buy this for my son to wear around his grandparents. He's 11, and we both love it. $5. We both think the lung looks like stomach. Maybe the Cig should have boxing gloves, but the lung or lungs should remain defenseless. Such a great shirt for old or young.
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