I think I addressed all the criticisms from my first entry. It's a different piece in the same series, so I got rid of the background on this one, and it's smaller on the shirt. It's less complex and busy than the other one, but still has a lot of meaning. (At least to me!)

awesome design. the only thing i'm thinking is that the eye sockets should be clear like the heart is. other than that, it's really awesome.

smaller pupils on the eyes will make viewer see that they are eyeballs quicker... so that's a minor comment. and is that 2 conjoined circles that the crack on stone is splitting? may be redundant to have that since the hand-holding couple is already split by the split. i love your style and really like this shirt, even as is.

nice design,

but i would never wear this

it's just not for me

i like this a lot. i like both of your designs. you have a unique style.

5$.

i like it on black. good design

thats how i feel... boo hoo

I agree, I like both of your designs that I have seen.

i've got someplace you can put those... ;)

http://www.threadless.com/submission/44748/here's_looking...



seriously, though, this is a sweet design. maybe make the crack in the headstone not go all the way through. i dunno, that's may be sort of an artistic decision, it seems, because it may detract from the message.



i'd wear it either way.

How nice

I love both of your designs, but I think the white coloring makes it look funny on a tee shirt. Maybe if you made the illustration colors compliment the shirt color.



Can I buy a poster?

very emo...

strong message!

it would be so much better as a poster or an album cover

i'm "digging" it.

haha

i love my irony.



so basically, nothing fixed i'd say to improve on,

just toy around with it till you find something deffinite.

position should stay.

don't put it on black,

not because i don't like black

but the lines will look stupid.

i like it. it's pretty powerful.

saves the day?

Have you read anything about Edgar Allen Poe's life? For some reason when I saw this I though "damn this should be an Edgar Allen Poe poem."



His mother died of tuberculosis, and his wife, and some other woman he loved and looked up too. Plus he wrote that poem about sleeping by his love's grave.

"And so, all the night-tide, I lie down by the side

Of my darling- my darling- my life and my bride,

In the sepulchre there by the sea,

In her tomb by the sounding sea."



That's from "Annabel Lee." Google it or something. If the poem were illustrated I think it would be that picture.

wonderfull design. alot of deep meaning. i reccomend putting the design on a darker shirt. seeing as how it is a sulky image. i would definatly buy this. 5

You're an amazingly talented artist and i think you're colour choice was perfect. I would certainly buy this t-shirt although i almost feel it would be a shame to wear it it feels very much like it should be hung on a wall..

hearty goes to heartless? whateva.. fine design! 5!

make the pupils smaller, it took me a while to relize they were eyes. love it!

Thanks for all you kind words and feedback everyone! Here are a few responses...



64Crayola: I tried making the eye sockets go all the way through, but it looked really weird for whatever reason.



Skipcronin: You're right. I should have made the pupils smaller. And the wedding rings are probably redundant. I erased what was over them, (My ex-wife and my initials and the date of our marriage, then divorce, since that stuff made it too personal for anyone to wear.) and replaced it with the hand holding people. I see now the rings arn't centered. Weird.



Essie. F: I liked the white because it makes it look like a paper cut-out. Also, you can't see it due to those stupid .gif dots, but there is a fiberous texture to it.



nightspin: I don't care for emo. Maybe goth?



xdork: The back tshirt is dark brown, but it looks black there for some reason. You're right about the lines.



Thanks again everyone.

It's interesting and a good design, but I wouldn't wear it. I guess it doesn't apply to me, and if it did, I wouldn't want to wear it on a shirt, you know?

The design is great, I just think you made the message too strong you know? You need to leave something to the imagination, that way the shirt can take on a more personal meaning to the wearer.



I like the shirt on the green the best. It gives your illustration a more earthy feeling. I really love the design though.

oh so sad but i like it, great illustration

thanx for atleast trying to draw..but no

did someone really put the eye sockets should be clear? yeah...if you scraped a hole through the back of your head...*pft*

i think this shirt is beautiful. i want to wear it.