cleaned up, simplified, border like rectangularity and flag with busy text removed.

There are also two different ways of viewing the face

sorry, i just dont understand.

i don't know, the second i saw it i had a brain freeze, your presentation is just so busy- that i was like AHHH SHIRT!

but, your actual design is really different and i like it, but don't understand o11?

would people who hadn't seen the original idea understand this?

I think it says Oil.
it's about the war?
but it's not making a point about anything.
the image you have in the background looks more interesting.

im lost.

the excerpt for the shirt isn't as good as the background, agreed.

the shapes or blobs are not working well at all.

wait... so my clever design is ass and this is acceptable... learn how to design beardo.

Becuase you need everything spelled out for you and the fact you have no education on how to interpret abstraction is no fault of mine. The fact you, Boston, have a lame font and a squiggle line with a lame joke does much less in the form of leaving things to the persons imagination.

oh wait, today no one is allowed to have an imagination because ppl don't read books anymore, they take their fully formed definitions of reality from television. I totally forgot that for a moment.

haha kallen you are funny... maybe you should read a book... those sat prep classes you took sure gave you the confidance to talk down to people, but just like kids who have yet to learn how to read shouldnt critique the reading of those who know how, you should never give advice about design, asthetics, or art in generall. seeing as you are obviously incapable of creating anything anyone gives a shit about, and all.

the only abstraction i see in this is the one in your brain where you decided that making a shitty, horizontally stretched mess of ugly colors thrown onto a shirt was a good idea. thinking you've got even one ounce of knowledge of what would actually constitute a well done piece of abstract art is laughable at best . kandinsky is rolling in his grave.

Oooh a war/oil tshirt!!!! HOW FRESH! PSSSSSSSSSSSSH SIKE

Here's something fresh, go fuck yourself

its really funny ppl want to sit in their chairs and criticize when they themselves have no designs here and keep themselves anonymous.

I actually think this is a decent redesign considering i'm not a fucking professional graphic designer like some people.

End of the day i really don't give a fuck, i hope ppl like it but if not don't bother saying anything.

Good karma to you. looks like you need it now

robotpirate you seriously seem to like to get off all over your pants by telling other people how much they dont know. This while you yourself show you have no skills in positive communication.

Sounds like a typical academic know-nothing to me. Humility goes a far way, just a tip because clearly you know jack shit yourself.