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Dec 02 '04
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hmm dunno about the text. but then people might not get the lantern things. nice colors.
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The lanterns are nice, but the text needs to be placed differently...
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You mispelled "sole"... unless it's a play on the whole dance thing and you meant "soul." Oh, and "opportunity." There is no way I could buy a shirt with typos. I also think you should consider a different font -- the capitalized letters look kind of awkward in the one you've chosen.
I love the lanterns, though, and the colors you chose. WIth a bit more attention to detail, I could really end up liking this shirt. Revise it some more and I probably would buy it. |
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... and "their." You used the wrong kind of "their" too. (eek.)
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I like the lanterns and the chopper and of course the colours, but I don't like the text, even if you fixed the typos :) Of course I've never really been fond of big chunks of text on shirts.
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pay homage to the spell check gods...it might even look cooler with a little more detail as said above and maybe without the text block....more copter detail
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Sans serif uppercase + script = really freakin' wierd looking. Rethink that typography a LOT. It seems kind of awkward where it is placed, also. Maybe you can make that whole paragraph more concise, wrap it up into one or two sentences, and then rethink where you're placing it. I like the image.
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Just lose the text, then you don't have to worry about grammar. The design is fine without the text.
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aren't those disco balls? if so, i wouldn't get it. actually, kill the text too.
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Forget the text and just put some silhouettes of people looking towards the sky like they do for a copter that's dropping food, and some of them dancing.
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don't listen to them, keep the text. but different font, please, I have the hardest time reading it...or maybe it's just my contacts...
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"sole" is wrong. "there" should be "their."
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I wouldn't like to have a paragraph on my breast. The long reading periods would make me uncomfortable.
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awesome concept, but typography needs work. use the cool type as an accent, use a more legible typeface for the long copy. try to shorten copy. i'd dig it if you improved it.
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agree with jupiter "Forget the text and just put some silhouettes of people looking towards the sky like they do for a copter that's dropping food, and some of them dancing." then you'll have one DAMN FINE SHIRT, i'd buy.
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i like the idea. i'd wear it.
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I think you should drop the text. Whether people understand it or not the helicopter with the lanterns dragging along is a cool visual.
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i will fine tune this sweet piece off ass i hope you all like it when im done
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