It's alright Matt. Thanks for your support. There will be no more submission from olasnavigator, I have to concentrate on my daily job. I'll try to spend a few hours each day to score some designs, at least that's all i can do to help other designers. :)
You obviously have some skill in illustration, I think what you need to learn is the style that matches target audience here.
The audience here usually like funny stuffs with some good humor, or incredibly nice and detailed illustration but still based on a good idea.
Your style of a semi realistic photoshopped photo with high contrast and some sketchy shadow doesnt look quite good on tee, and particularly the layout on this design isnt quite good either, it's boxy, and sliced here and there. Maybe if it's only the 1st or the 3rd frame would look better.
But still, that's just a humble opinion from me :)
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