the graphic is nice. but those spaces in between the hair don't look right. it makes her head look weird. and i would change the postion.

at first i thought she was blowing a bubble, but i like the hair

i like this, exept the whole tongue thing isn't really working, maybe she'd look better with a closed mouth.?

Yeh, the whole tongue thing isn't too readable. Maybe show her teeth biting down on her (still whole) tongue, with perhaps some blood running down the edge of her mouth.

I agree there's no blood, but did it occur to you that she already bit it off and was now spitting it out? No, probably not because you were all too busy trying desperately to find something wrong with it instead of enjoying art for the sake of art and trying to see some good in it. For example, I used the right amount of colors, there isn't too much detail, there's nothing in it you could find as a cliche, it's an original idea, it isn't perfectly centered, I got the proportions more correct than any of my other entries. Even if you all still dismiss this one at least I am doing better and that's all I care about. I probably have years and years to go to get to the standards everyone around here wants, maybe after I start or finish college I might be good enough. But I probably won't care because I will be too busy with more important things. This was just a was for me to learn how others felt about my work anyway. Now, after a few tries, I see. Sort of.

And I do agree the hair is weird because of the blank spots, bu there wasn't much I could do. If anyone actually likes it I might think about resubmitting it, but why bother if it will just get dragged down with the others again.

centrefuge....i like it, and i think that other people do too. they were just following the guidelines about constructive criticism! they want you to improve in your art. notice that above the space provided to comment it says "if you're going to CRITICIZE, be constructive and respectful about it.", that's what people were doing...

ok. well done kid, it looks cool, but the hair definitely is an issue and what is happening is unreadable. Your design skills are progressing well and i like the simplicity and curves , i couldnt understand what was happening in the picture. i think thats what everyone is trying to say.

Its also kind of cut off at the bottom.



personally i wish that the hair had the same kind of detail and care given to it that the face had.



hehe its funny when guys get angry about crits.

centrefuge, face it your art is not perfect. as wonderful as you see it to be, this is an opinionated forum, the idea is that people share their views and offer advice to improve your techniques for future designs. sure your work may be fresh, stick to the submission guidelines and contain nice design elements such as lovely line work, but if people don't like the design are they likely to buy it? even if it contains all the right things, if the item is not something that the consumer enjoy, are you likely able to sell the product?

i like it alot, but the overlapping of the hair is wrong and it's throwing the design off. sorry.

oh, yeah-and calm down. people take this shit too seriously...you do realize that most of the people who make comments on here are people whose opinions you wouldn't ask for if you saw them on the street, right? it's threadless, not t-shirt idol.

nice illus, on pink

please chill out centrefuge, i was trying to point out that to the casual observer who hadnt read the title, it probably would not make much sense to them what is happening in the picture.

hahahahahahahaha. centrifuge dude got paid and then got angry. ahhahahha, what a little tosser. kid. ahhahhahahhaha



zero respect for you, or your "talent" why the ehll put it up. it is not that good mate. sorry

a. you are taking these comments too personally i think.

b. i like the hair with the blank spots it looks cool.

c. i do think it's kind of hard to tell it's a tongue, i wouldn't have known without the title. if there were teeth showing, like bit down on the tongue or something... ? that might help.



i think this is cool and a cool idea. i couldn't do it any better. it's just hard to tell that's a tongue.

Centrefuge, art doesnt exist without the others. A Monet wouldnt be a piece of art without an audience. Your art needs an audience, you need us. If you understand that, you will be able to accept constructive criticism. And by the way, i think your t shirt needs a bit more work but you are doing a great job. honestly.

This illustration is good, but the tongue didn't clearly translate...i thought it was an small egg or something. My favorite part is the hair, because of the curvy lines...i like the image only on pink the because it blend nicely with the colors of your image. One darker more vibrant shirts the "holes" in the hair look odd.

Luv it- I'm very partial to designs with people involved. I like the blank spots in the hair, it pulls it further into the actual color of the shirt.

because her head is tilted up it looks like the focus is on her spitting something out. i dont think the position conveys the emotion attached to biting your tongue. listen to the song "blood on the ground" by incubus. it'll provide fantastic imagery for an illustration of this sort.

move graphic to the left maybe. and some blood perhaps? -kuiama

perhaps you should just lose the whole tongue idea...it seems like it's not catching very well. I think the shirt would be just fine without any tongue. close the mouth and keep the same pose and I think it's good

The tongue thing doesn't really do it for me. I think it's just a personal preference in the type of attitude you like shirts to have. I personally like cute little bunnies. I really dig the style though and I think the spaces in the hair are nice. They make it more interesting than if it was the same style as the face and neck.

"The tongue thing doesn't really do it for me" - OK+.

Ha, wow, this guy is a little touchy. Tell me, when you spit, do you stick your tongue out? I certainly don't, and I've never seen anyone do it, so why would the girl do it, even if she had just bitten off part of her tongue.

Wow, I was an idiot. I understand constructive criticism, but I think I was really moody that day and took it out on here. Sorry. As for the changes, I made a new one with a different idea. I didn't change much of her cause I like her, but I added something that more people might get. And as to my art not being perfect, alot of things that have passed on here were not perfect, but some people like that sort of thing.