Words have a life of their own, they just come to life the second they come out of your mouth.

rectangular edges are not good. try to do without them next time.

Too Boxy, buddy.

No boxy edges, man. The design needs color too.

It took me a while to understand what's going on then, and I needed to read the explanation for that.

Next time, try inking more - i.e. choose the right line width for each part of the pic. And as others said, drop the rectangle there, it looks as if it's supposed to mean something. And people don't want to feel like they hung a flyer on their shirts.

Interesting