The Fountain of Youth has finally been discovered, and business is booming! Not surprisingly, the modern world has found a way to make a profit out of this eternally sought-after destination. Look for one of its many franchise off-shoots in a mall food court super soon! A iknowverylittleaboutart and Frickinawesome dramasubzation.

whoa, your other designs are way better! sorry this is not good

i love in memory of antlers

The font and text on the signs do not look so good but I like the concept very much.

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Excellent work on the details- but the typography need a little work

so nice work, but Im agree with SEVEN-HUNDRED, about the typo detail.

Agree with above, and still it looks awesome on a shirt. I'm giving it a 4 and hoping to see it again.

AHHHHH 4?

Typography needs a lot of work...and nymeria...no offense, but to me the biggest issue here is that it doesn't look good on a shirt. The thumbnail in the upper right verifies this.

fountain of youth...they'll be one on every corner before you know it. I think the concept is great, but the execution needs a little more refinement. I agree the typography needs some work, font choices, layout...but the idea is solid and you've got some nice illustrative work.

Gotcha peeps, appreciate the feedback. I agree the typography needs some work, as well as a few small other details.



Also, I gotta disagree with 4 fives...I think it looks quite smashing on the tee. lol.

Gotta be wary of how litigious Starbucks is. I think the composition needs a lot of work. I get the concept, but if I look at it really closely, there are a lot of things that could be improved and cleaned up. The 2 kids with the computer, briefcase, etc., they've obviously something to drink. The kid with the shirt that's way too big, okay, he drank something and is now a child again. So maybe a cup should be down by his feet? And showing a baby in a stroller is just confusing. Anyway, too jumbled.

I agree with the issues addressed previously. I also thing the blank yellow storefront really clashes with the detailed work, but hat it wouldn't if there was texture or something.

plastic atomic, she's actually pushing her husband in a stroller hence while she's near that store. I suggested we might wanna have her coming out of the stroller shop, and that's what we'll probably do if i know very little about art wants to re-sub this with me again! I think people get the concept by the time their eyes hit the little "boy" in all the oversize clothes, I really don't think that needs to be re-iterated by that time.



Pizazz, I also agree about the storefront needing some kind of texture on it, and maybe separating the stores so people would understand the concept better.



Thanks for all your feedback once again folks, most appreciated.

is it supposed to look like Starbucks?

i am not sure about the blue color, it bothers me.

+ i don't like the fountains and don't know why you have the angels and all that stuff. i feel that you are putting too many messages at the same time. he concept might come out better if you concentrate on one idea. but i like that you are trying to tell a story, and that it makes me think.

There's perspective in the foreground (stroller, computer, people, etc), but none in the shop... just makes it look like a cardboard cut-out.

Alonsky, it's supposed to "remind" you of Starbucks, but not imitate it. As for the angels, well, it's the fountain of youth silly! Of course there would be doves and magical elements flying around! hehehe. You might be right about to much stuff in there tho. We just wanted to cram it full of ideas.



Framzilla, good point.

I think you get the point now, but it's just too bad about the text. I checked out your designs and I agree with the first post...you're other designs are executed much more effectively. You've got a good thing going though.

interesting idea, but it's a little messy for me.

Yeah, the text looks like something out of MS Paint, it drags the whole design down significantly, which is a shame. The concept, and all of the art aside from the storefront/text works beautifully.

^ i agree with twentysiix and shakethesheets



clean it up, especially the fonts and the building, then it would be a winner (:

I think this is a great idea but the design just feels too busy. I like your work though!

I actually like the busy look of this. But I agree with everyone else, the fonts don't look too good. Everything else does, though :)

i love it.

ok i guess...

Way too busy. Tone down a bit, especially with the text, and you might e on to something.

too busy.

i really would prefer it if the sign was bigger and much less going on, definitly without the two places on either side.

I work at Starbucks and find this hilarious!

Nice design!

I used to work at Starbucks and to this day, my body emits angels, doves and waterfalls when I get a latte fix. How nice that FOY generates the same response!

great concept, but i think it needs to be more refined, cleaned up abit, its very busy, but not neccacarly in a good way



daper diper tehe..cute

There's perspective in the foreground (stroller, computer, people, etc), but none in the shop... just makes it look like a cardboard cut-out.



Yeah, that's it in a nutshell. The really flat signage accentuates this.



Aside from that, the concept and composition is excellent!

I Agree with the whole "cardboard cut-out" vibe. I would also work on the signs as well. Just to give it more "pop" I guess. Love the angels and heavenly bodies though. I know I hear that music going through my head whenever I see A Starbucks!