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Laurent2025

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by Laurent2025   
ProtegeINC
ProtegeINC on Mar 14 '08
Nice
ash24cr
ash24cr on Mar 14 '08
i really like it, but think the design would be much stronger without the pen and cap.
flammenstrahl
flammenstrahl on Mar 14 '08
remove the pen and the cap and this would be much better
blackstreak
blackstreak on Mar 14 '08
Ditto.. be better without the pen.
Chengui
   Chengui on Mar 14 '08
It would also help the composition.
starr226
   starr226 on Mar 14 '08
I'm going to, sadly, echo that the pen and cap aren't required and drag the whole thing down. the main image is wonderful, though.
ginetteginette
   ginetteginette on Mar 14 '08
same as all above.



the image of the bird and plane are really strong and the marker steals their limelight
samedamnstory
samedamnstory on Mar 15 '08
somethings wrong with the airplane

ChrisDANGEROUS
ChrisDANGEROUS on Mar 15 '08
I know this is simple repitition; but I do agree the marker isnt necessary!
Merzi
Merzi on Mar 15 '08
hmmm, i like the marker! Just not the cap, i thought it was chalk! I think without it it doesn't make as much of an impact; it shows you can color outside the lines.
jcoddington
jcoddington on Mar 15 '08
take out the maker and the cap and its a 5
Monkey III
   Monkey III on Mar 15 '08
Good stuff!
stopper111
stopper111 on Mar 15 '08
I say leave the marker IN, just not the cap (it does look like chalk and is unnecessary...)

My reason is this: The marker being there conveys the image that that the bird was just actually drawn there. So one failed miserably at coloring by numbers and within the lines yet still managed to create something beautiful that flies (more so, in fact) in there own context. If you get rid of the marker, that image gets a bit lost and becomes a bit random.
L.T.
L.T. on Mar 15 '08
if you could make it look like someone drew the bird without the pen, thatd be cool. but w/o it, i wouldnt have understood
htzpah
htzpah on Mar 15 '08
take out the pen and cap and I'd buy it in a heartbeat
starshouting
starshouting on Mar 15 '08
I have to agree with the "no pen" idea.
Cableridge
Cableridge on Mar 16 '08
I'd love it if you worked on the size and placement.
bassooner
bassooner on Mar 16 '08
smaller pen and no cap, and think about the pens osition relative to the drawing, otherwise LOVE the concept
goofydoodler
goofydoodler on Mar 16 '08
I think that if you removed the cap, it'd be a lovely tee, and I'd totally buy it!
EmoWriterGirl
EmoWriterGirl on Mar 16 '08
I like it. Leave the pen and cap, I think it give it some depth.
Blue_Eyed_Girl
Blue_Eyed_Girl on Mar 16 '08
yeah i think the marker needs to be there....not giving in and coloring teh plane like you were suppose to and drawing the free flying bird makes it alot better for me anyway
anela
anela on Mar 16 '08
I agree with smaller pen and no cap - then I'd buy it.
Merzi
Merzi on Mar 16 '08
chlobo107 "outside the lines" ?



like thinking outside the box, you don't have to stay within certain limitations, ya know, be a little creative!
Furoyu
Furoyu on Mar 16 '08
Could look a bit more polished and professional, but that's a great concept. Definitely keep improving it.
podunk42
podunk42 on Mar 17 '08
Yeah, I also like a smaller but present pen. Also, it bugs me a bit that the airplane and the bird aren't oriented--like the wings don't match up with the wings--but the concept is brilliant. 4 for now.
Gantrof
Gantrof on Mar 17 '08
I like it, keep the pen, get rid of the cap though and I'd give it a 5
Zind
Zind on Mar 18 '08
No pen and jet looks like idea taken from Questionable Content.
Laurent2025
   Laurent2025 on Mar 19 '08
Thanks for your comments :-)

I'll try an other version with smaller pen and no cap.

Without pen, I think it's hard to understand the message...

Thanks again !
dQuarters
dQuarters on Mar 19 '08
I think that's the way to go Lauren (your last message). It would lose the meaning with no pen. I don't even think removing the cap is needed. But I'm sure you'll figure it all out. GREAT concept and illustration. Looking forward to seeing what you do.
denzi
denzi on Mar 19 '08
I still say no pen. The message gets across anyway.
liam2317
liam2317 on Mar 19 '08
Oh man you fail at coloring soooo bad! JK ;)



Very cool concept and well executed!
Pankakes101
Pankakes101 on Mar 20 '08
Very cool! Love it! You are very creative! Nice idea! that is a lot of !'s! But anyways, keep up the good work!
ivywillow
ivywillow on Mar 21 '08
maybe move the pen further down on the shirt?
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