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 What happens when you go home at night?
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cute
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cute yes, but kind of hard to see. I didn't quite get the suitcase at first, so all I saw where two sad paperclips. Also, I feel like your paper airplane could use darker shadowing... I barely noticed it until I tilted my screen up.
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i love that song. and this is really cute!
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Funny
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jillustration on Jun 25 '07 i love the concept but the execution leaves somthing to be desired. It's hard to tell what's going on here - it needs to be drawn a little better, somehow.
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i agree with jillustration, it took me a bit to catch what was goin on. good idea, just good use better execution
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could use better execution*
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wotto on Jun 25 '07 like the paperclips but they could have been chunkier.
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mmmmmhmm I don't like the poistion of the back P: $4
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yeah, it's hard to follow.
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I like it, but maybe like a duffel bag instead of a briefcase-style suitcase. It's cute though, but needs a little more work.
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love the idea, but it took me forever to see that they were supposed to be people. Maybe work on humanizing them a bit. And I agree, a duffel bag would be great.
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timadd's comment covers my concerns about the
suitcase and shadow. The paper plane looks too crisp and sterile. How about some structures made of office supplies that act as steps into the plane while others hold the plane upright ? |
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Shouldn't a paperclip be on the plane?
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Critiques would've helped this one out immeasurably. I'm in love with the concept, I just wish you would've done more with it.
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Add a little bit more shadowing to the airplane.
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I didn't see the suticase until it was pointed out to me. This could be due to my computer screen but i think it's just too small and vauge. Once I did see it though I really liked the idea and all it will take is a little bit more detail for this to be a winner.
Solid work. |
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i love both the diea and the drawing but i like mjoo's idea of the paperclip actually being on the plane.
nice work! |
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Love the concept, but it needs some help.
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ditto most people. I didn't really get it, one of the problems is the perspective, the clip leaving looks initially like it is just smaller rather than further way. The details that make it, the suitcase and the hanky are just too difficult to make out. I think you also need to show the plane is on the ground and not in the air. (Otherwise the clip can't get on it unless they are all flying in which case they don't need a plane...)
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yeah, i thought the plane was in the air, which confused me
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Jareth
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Okay, I just posted more than my name, but why did nothing else come up?
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Looks good :)
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ahhhh hahah
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Monkey III on Jun 28 '07 Awesome!
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LOVE the concept, but it took me a while to get it. Needs to be a little crisper
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Wholy man that took me awhile to understand, there's no way I'd get this at first glance, even though it's a neat idea.
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It makes me smile!
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I like it, the paper plane could use some more shadowing for definition and teh message could be a little more clear...
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tesco on Jun 29 '07 the paperclips have Beaker mouths! I like that but not much else.
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haha I get it, like after half an hour maybe make it abit.. more clearer... I dunno how, but I'd so but it if you made it easier to get
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Took me a few seconds to get but I love the concept!
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An anthropomorphised paper clip that doesn't irritate me. I like it alo'.
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ahahahah!! thats so awesome and creative!! i luvluvluv it :) $$$$5
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nice $5
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