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I think it should be more "twisted". it looks like he just collapsed there but if he died playing twister it would look different.
I don't know about perspective, but maybe you can make it look more like a mat? I know when I played twister the mat would get crumpled up a bit... maybe you could have a couple folds or something. |
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perhaps put the design on a white shirt, with no perspective? Try to achieve some balance of a twisted chalk outline, while still making the figure recognizable. Isn't the point of the shirt that the man died from a freak twister accident?
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ninja.
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no ninja...?
Where did andorra come from. |
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lol!
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i think the outline should look more um twisted! haha
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I definitely think a leg or something should be bent and spiraled completely out of shape, to get a twisted effect. Or something.
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There should be a crowd or police around him
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i agree that it should be a white shirt. or the mat should be white and not transparent. it would be more a little more clear if the outline were twisted, but i honestly have no idea how you'd do that. :)/:(
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yeah a crowd around him = PRINT.
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i'd like to see the hands actually centered on the green and red dots, and the feet actually on the yellow and blue
though then he would have had to have been laying rather than holding himself up... hmm... |
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oh, and black shirt, white mat
don't know what color for the chalk outline, as i imagine they are usually white, which wouldn't work on a white mat |
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I love this! So unique...I think maybe the arms more "twisted" would be a good idea although I like the simplicity of the design. $5! And I would deff. buy it :)
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LOL I like it
I think it needs to be touched up a little though I don't know how I really like it though |
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Also I second black shirt, white mat.
Always white mat if on another color shirt |
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ok listen up No body inside the chalk line only a chakline but make the chalk line much more twisted and maybe some police and a crowd of ppl b-hind him and it would probaly look better in a whole diffrent color i dont really like it on niether black or white o and the mat needs to look more real like maybe a liuttle wrinkled o and parts of it folded so it look like it was a hard and serious game but ur idea was FANTASTIC i love it sooo much and i would definetly buy it if u follow my tips
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o on second thought black shirt white mat and maybe but those caution ropes around the area
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I love the idea, but I'm not convinced by the shape of its arms. One looks like it's a bit too bulky at the hand...
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nooo..... not working....
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http://img213.imageshack.us/img213/2548/picture2eu8.png
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Hi! I love this idea. Very original. With all due respect, I prefer the design you show in the above link though, the one without perspective. A white colour t shirt would work better IMO... but I see people seem to agree about black. :). Anyway I really like it.
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gah....doesnt work when i paste animage url thing
heres for flikr (more twisted) http://farm1.static.flickr.com/199/535588190_ea5d66a2c9_o.png |
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You should have put this through the critique section because it is a great and printable idea. but just not developed enough
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FRICKINAWESOME on Jun 08 '07 ineo2.....regarding your more updated design...still needs to be more twisted...just get CRAZY with the idea and make it nearly impossible to get as twisted as the chalk line implies. The overkill and impossibility of doing such a position would make it funnier!
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The Twister mat should definitely be white on the black t-shirt with a black outline. I like the image on the white shirt better, though. I also think the limbs could be more all over the place, maybe his right arm a little more raised and the right leg bent outward. Make it look like a real awkward Twister accident.
Good idea, I like it! |
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maybe make the body twisted itself...like have one leg on right red but have the leg sprial looking reaching for that spot, and then same for the arms...
just an idea. |
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Definitely crumple the mat up a little, and definitely white mat on black shirt.
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i think there should be police tape "do not enter" surrounding it so there wouldn't be any misconception about the design.
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I'm not fond of the angle of the Twister mat, just because it looks like the man is going to slide right off. And I agree with Addaone--there should definitely be some crumpling of the mat.
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I agree with Muffbox, put some police tape around it, I think a crowd would make the shirt too busy. I think the reason perspective is not working, is that the view is normal to one side, if you had the mat viewed from a corner I think the perspective would work better. Crumpling of mat good too, as has been suggested. Nice idea.
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ok....
i'll see how this scores, and then do like... acomplete overhaul in critiques with, so far: more twisted police tape crumples (if i have enough colors....i cant use anymore than what you see.... so no shading (which is how youmake crumples...no?)' perspective/no perspective I am very glad that you guys like the concept though! thank you very much for the compliments, and if there's anything else to change....i'll try to get to it! |
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i just imagined this in a skit show or something
with people off crying to one side, and news reporters on the other. i don't want any of those things on a shirt. i'm of the opinion that the only thing that would make it better would be if the chalk outline was more bent and twisted so the cause of death is more obvious hehe :) good luck $5 |
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haha, this is funny... it needs some more content, but the main idea is cool ^^ 5!
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I like the design, especially the idea of a crowd, but if there is a crowd, then it needs perspective(sp?), maybe with some police tape.
As far as twisted goes... I think you should just have the joints basically bent backwards, or in some crazy direction... just my two cents.... |
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One word: shading
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i deffinitely lol'ed at this. $5
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Oh man that's so cute! $0
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The guy needs to be waaaaay more twisted, but I really love the concept.
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wow i'm glad so many of you like it!
Im gonna resub it after i twist him a litle more, but thanks again! |
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I agree with 12monkeys, he needs to actually have his hands and feet in twister positions on the dots in some precarious position that lead to his demise.
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he's not so twisted for a guy that died playing twister. but i love the concept
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SWEET! 2.2!
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Jemae on Jun 15 '07 :D
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anyways, i have gotten mixed reactions on this. Should I have perspective, or no? should a person be lying in the chalk outline? Should it be more "twisted" (like hands way off), or would that be un recognizable as a person? etc.
Tell me what ya think
thanks!