Thanks for the comment Menace, but don't you think it would be unbalanced without the bigger Demon? I did wonder myself whether two was over doing it but it just hangs better like that I think.... Alternatively I would just have one Demon and that's it lose everything else... thoughts?
Interesting illustration and this is a wonderful concept. Very strong. However, it's not reading strong. The above mentioned problems with the composition (having one demon, but I think maybe more demons or in an interesting composition could still work) are helpful. I think also the typography is weak. It looks too playful for something sinister. The half circle to me reads as a rainbow, which maybe it's supposed to be I don't know, but if so I don't understand it. Anyway that doesn't bother me so much, what really does is the type. I think the words "demoncracy" and "democracy" are so great to play with. I think you can play around with the typography in an interesting way to make the connection between the two. You have the "n" a little bit smaller, that's good but maybe only have that letter only scaled smaller, and get rid of the weird wave composition of the letters. It would make that message stronger, or maybe you'll want just the "n" outlined or another color. Maybe you don't even need any special treatment to the "n" I don't know, it's up to you. I think right now everything is thinking politics so it might not be needed. How the letters hide one another also sends off a distinct message, but again your placement of the letters in that wavy layout is distracting from that meaning. The only good thing about that type is its matching colors. I think it's great that you played around with the type, but just some refinding to it would make it pop. As stated above, I'd reconsider those drips, but of course "blood" (since it's red) also can tie in with your message. So explore it! Don't ditch it just because someone tells you "it's been done" of course it has, everything practically has, but if it can further your message, by all means use it. The last thing I'd have to comment on is the item in the bottom right. It's hard to read and it won't be easily visible. Interesting idea to put as a "tag" or something, in fact Nautica did that with some of their shirts, but you can never see it. It also acts as an extra element when all you need is one. The way you have all the pieces above touching each other and interacting with each other is GREAT composition skills and I think this bottom tag thing might distract from it. Good stuff, keep it coming.
As said above (in ConceptHue's "essay", lol), work on the typography. And someone stated that the curved lines look like a rainbow. Perhaps you could replace it with some allusion to the American flag, and also apply the dripping to it.
Man.. I think it's wicked that no one can agree on this design but every one's feeling it in some way or the other... If i applied all the changes above they'd be nothing left.
As for the rainbow and type.. it is supposed to be a rainbow symbolising the bright futures promised by politicans. The type is worked out like that so as to deliberatley be comic book like so the whole thing doesn't end up too scary looking.. it is a joke after all.
As for the colours.. I'm colour blind and see in tone (seriously) I thought that was brown.. ha ha!
I think Bloo's got the right idea... one demon on a shirt would rock... and be less confusing.
drink, I really like this shirt. I like your type, but would loose the outline where the type meets. It's kind of distracting. I think it would look cool if you just had one demon on the side that fades into stripes with your colors and then the drips.
HeadOrange
lose the drips.
xiks
love the idea, i liked it a lot better in the thumbnail preview. I think the typo needs work.
Menace
I think it's a great design, but (argh) one demon to many, I'd lose the big one.
drink
Thanks for the comment Menace, but don't you think it would be unbalanced without the bigger Demon? I did wonder myself whether two was over doing it but it just hangs better like that I think.... Alternatively I would just have one Demon and that's it lose everything else... thoughts?
bloo
just put one demon on the whole shirt...nothing else....now that would rok.
ConceptHue
Interesting illustration and this is a wonderful concept. Very strong. However, it's not reading strong. The above mentioned problems with the composition (having one demon, but I think maybe more demons or in an interesting composition could still work) are helpful. I think also the typography is weak. It looks too playful for something sinister. The half circle to me reads as a rainbow, which maybe it's supposed to be I don't know, but if so I don't understand it. Anyway that doesn't bother me so much, what really does is the type. I think the words "demoncracy" and "democracy" are so great to play with. I think you can play around with the typography in an interesting way to make the connection between the two. You have the "n" a little bit smaller, that's good but maybe only have that letter only scaled smaller, and get rid of the weird wave composition of the letters. It would make that message stronger, or maybe you'll want just the "n" outlined or another color. Maybe you don't even need any special treatment to the "n" I don't know, it's up to you. I think right now everything is thinking politics so it might not be needed. How the letters hide one another also sends off a distinct message, but again your placement of the letters in that wavy layout is distracting from that meaning. The only good thing about that type is its matching colors. I think it's great that you played around with the type, but just some refinding to it would make it pop. As stated above, I'd reconsider those drips, but of course "blood" (since it's red) also can tie in with your message. So explore it! Don't ditch it just because someone tells you "it's been done" of course it has, everything practically has, but if it can further your message, by all means use it. The last thing I'd have to comment on is the item in the bottom right. It's hard to read and it won't be easily visible. Interesting idea to put as a "tag" or something, in fact Nautica did that with some of their shirts, but you can never see it. It also acts as an extra element when all you need is one. The way you have all the pieces above touching each other and interacting with each other is GREAT composition skills and I think this bottom tag thing might distract from it. Good stuff, keep it coming.
mindkillaz
Man....I hope I am not seeming too cruel, but
ConceptHue.....ARE YOU ON SPEED? Damn! that's WORDY!
benjka
what concept? - the only thing fresh about this one is the color scheme - you most def have a good sense of color
Haranator
Hmm...the color is actually getting to me.
kau
As said above (in ConceptHue's "essay", lol), work on the typography. And someone stated that the curved lines look like a rainbow. Perhaps you could replace it with some allusion to the American flag, and also apply the dripping to it.
drink
Man.. I think it's wicked that no one can agree on this design but every one's feeling it in some way or the other... If i applied all the changes above they'd be nothing left.
As for the rainbow and type.. it is supposed to be a rainbow symbolising the bright futures promised by politicans. The type is worked out like that so as to deliberatley be comic book like so the whole thing doesn't end up too scary looking.. it is a joke after all.
As for the colours.. I'm colour blind and see in tone (seriously) I thought that was brown.. ha ha!
I think Bloo's got the right idea... one demon on a shirt would rock... and be less confusing.
haircut
i like the 3 colored rainbow . mad shots ! bow bow
russian robot
Great idea!
mindkillaz
drink, I really like this shirt. I like your type, but would loose the outline where the type meets. It's kind of distracting. I think it would look cool if you just had one demon on the side that fades into stripes with your colors and then the drips.
HMRgraphics
I'm liking your design exept for the title. Great characters though. Good looking out on your comment.
-|qUoZZel|-
cool, I like this a lot!
Sonny Crockett
i'd just simplify the type. doesn't need any extra treatment. otherwise excellent
cintrao
I like it!
Blast Beat
I checked this out a while ago and I decided to look back through, I really think would buy this shirt, I like the guys.
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