Hi, this is my first design here on threadless and so while I'm still finding my way around, i have learned quite a lot in designing tees, please see my design

http://www.threadless.com/critique/42736/Death_for_now

also please forgive me if i am acting like a newbie but well that's what i am haha, anyway I would like to hear any comments on my design no matter how rude i would consider it a big help! thanks