Profile for KEMMLER - WIP design, any comments = luuuv

KEMMLER aka Alex Kemmler is a 27.11 year old boy, has been a member since January 24, 2005, has scored 2,616 submissions, giving an average score of 2.00, helping 11 designs get printed.

URL: http://www.kemmleraudio.com
AIM: Doctorkemmler

Jul 13 '05 by KEMMLER
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WIP design, any comments = luuuv

Please see my previous posts about this for comparison- but how does this one work? (on maroon this time, for fun.) I might need to adjust the head, but what I'm worried about is : does anything look worse than it could, does anything look "off", is anything unclear, or weird-looking?

Any comments are REALLY appreciated.

KEMMLER on Jul 14 '05 at 12:16am

no seriously, I need comments on this. Help me out dudes.

tyrannosarahus on Jul 14 '05 at 12:16am

Puppets make me so angry.

Agency26 on Jul 14 '05 at 12:47am

there are no motion lines conveyed, for one ... you've done a pretty nice job with the string ... the puppet, you should either give him a nose, or not . right now, it's just like a bump. The hand needs more contour lines and the position of the hand doesn't seem right ... I mean, it doesn't appear that the puppet just ripped the handle from the dude's hand ...

Agency26 on Jul 14 '05 at 12:48am

i don't know, seems like it needs more wit or irony or something ... hmmm. wish i could be more help.

arzie13 on Jul 14 '05 at 12:54am

Give that puppet some character. Right now its just so plain. Also I know you've changed up the puppets pose, but it still needs a little bit of work, google search tug a war or take a picture of one of your buddies pulling on a tree branch or an elephants trunk. Also the fingernails kinda bug me for some reason. Good concept just keep tweaking it until your satisfied.

Economos on Jul 14 '05 at 7:39am

i actually like the puppet's positioning on the khaki version below the latest version. this is a good design.

blucow on Jul 14 '05 at 7:48am

Try it with the... cross thing still in the hand. From the looks of the string and how far the cross thing has fallen, the scene looks like it's taken place maybe 2 seconds after the thing's been dropped. The puppet would probably be a little closer to the ground by now, not still standing. I don't know if that makes any sense, but it just looks like the physics are a little off.

M Malloy on Jul 14 '05 at 10:31am

Hmm. It's good.

However I really liked your drawing style in I'm So Wasted and the monster ones.

Robsoul on Jul 14 '05 at 11:04am

lose the nails on the hand (don't even think you need the hand though) and the nose (?) on the puppet, just an oval head would suffice.

the puppet is supposed to be pulling on the lines but the lines are slack... is that what you are implying, the puppets fight is futile? mmm... it works for me and I don't think I'd like to see the lines taut, I like the curved/u-shaped design.

KEMMLER on Jul 14 '05 at 5:22pm

thanks for everything so far, I might put another version up tonight or this weekend.

Pifman on Jul 14 '05 at 5:26pm

Sorry I didn't read ANYTHING in this post so take that in consideration (I have to go like right now) but since he's pulling it, and the hands not holding it, it EXTREMELEY looks like the handle thingy is floating in mid-air. If anything they should be straight and the hand could still be holding it, would still get the point across. If you really don't want the hand holding it, figure it out. Cuz right now there's so much slack in the strings, but the little dude is REALLY pullin. You know what I mean. later

KEMMLER on Jul 15 '05 at 4:55pm

ok, I've decided that I'm going to just finish up the dropping handle version as I see fit, then make a hand holding the crossbar version, because I've had this same 'floating in midair' comment about a million times and there isn't a good way to fix it, as I can see... if I think of one I'll do it.

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