Hey y'all, I'm just lookin' for some advice/tips, a slap in the face etc. what have you.

mb I'm just not getting the vibe right here, but I thought I'd do okay w/ some decent drawing skills...

what's missing here?

presentation?
cleaner imagery/graphical quality?
snarky jokes?
better attitude?

any and all advice would be appreciated...
so, go ahead, tear me a new one!

;P