I just submitted a critique and would love criticism!

I want to eventually submit something... if not this design, something else. But before I do that, I want to be able to get it right! So, if you would, please go check out my design for critique - Peace On Earth.

Thanks so much, my fellow peoples of Threadless! Y'all are the best.

-Ivy

PS! I JUST EDITED AND REVISED Peace On Earth... check it:

http://www.threadless.com/critique/20913/Peace_On_Earth#v2