and i will clean it up a little, but i dont want to dothat until its ready, cuz then itll jsut happen again.

anyyoneeee

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It kinda looks less like a dead body outline now.

Also, if I were you, I'd try to widen the concept a lot more. Instead of giving a direct birds-eye shot of it, maybe pan out at a more oblique angle? And it'd be cool if there were policemen investigating the scene or something. Or at least some police tape around it. Basically, I think it needs to be more of a scene.

the body looks awkward

umm, in all honesty i'd have to say scrap this and try something else

you're not really 28 are you?

Hmm, I liked the simplicity of the original sub. If you do this, try maybe putting his left arm under the body on a yellow circle, the head tucked under the body and the right arm reaching back to a green circle (instead of forward) and the legs are just awkward. I like this idea a lot though :-)

hmmmmm
ok, ill do the tape....and i had it at an angle...but no one seemed to like it

and spom, thats what i was thinking

I think its a good idea that doesnt translate well into print.

staffel - no im 16 lol

barrie- yea, thats why i didnt have it twited to begin with, it becomes un recognizeable....

what stubby said completely

hmmm iwonder if i jsut put the arm on a green circle...

mmaybe if i bent one of the kneessss.....

nothing else?

I think people didn't like it because it was at an odd angle. It needs to look more like a human eye-level view, with the twister board looking more realistic (maybe crumpled and perhaps with some bloodstains or something?), and with the lines NOT parallel with the t-shirt hem, if you see what I mean. It needs to look like a scene that you've just walked into, rather than a flat picture of a twister board.

I'm sure someone like Glennz or Fatheed could take this and make it easily printable. That means the idea has a lot of potential, you just need to work it right.

haha yea i thought that as it was being scored
lol
alrite,thanks vindemiatrix,ill try messing with it a little....
im jsut not the greatest artist, which is what scares me from drawing a whole scene, complete with a policeman, crowd.....(the tape i can do...

Hmm, if you really don't think your art skills are up to it, you could always collab with an artist? I'd be happy to do this with you at some point, it's something I'd enjoy drawing.

you can do that????
hmmm
ill try it one or ttwo more times, if not ill see if a collab is possible,
good idea, thanks!

Lots of people do collabs. :)

You're welcome!

with police tape
=)

I'll clean it up a LOT, it you guys think this version is an improvement

so....any comments?

heeelllloooooo

no comments

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needs the CAUTION words on it and stuff

Twisted?

No.

I hate twister.

I always end up into someone's anus.

Jonathan come on AIM .. i gotta talk to u .

Definitely looks better. It could still look a lot more naturalistic, but it's a start. I'd rotate it a bit though, so the closest line isn't parallel with the bottom of the image.

sure bhoomika,ill try and be on later today

and vindemiarix, im thinkning of redoing the posts completley, as well as the tape, but it does look really nice with it (the caution tape)

sure bhoomika,ill try and be on later today

and vindemiarix, im thinkning of redoing the posts completley, as well as the tape, but it does look really nice with it (the caution tape)

Haha, that does look funnier with the police tape. But, as someone else said, it needs the words on it. Just google up police tape and add whatever text they use.