Profile for Tess Fondie - SuperTessRyan Critique!

Tess Fondie aka Frigid Fondie is a 23.98 year old girl, has been a member since January 11, 2007, has scored 964 submissions, giving an average score of 2.61, helping 45 designs get printed.

URL: http://tessarifkin.deviantart.com

Aug 17 '10 by Tess Fondie
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SuperTessRyan Critique!

We were way excited to see the comic deadline extend! Can we get some critiques from you guys?

I am thinking about making the smoke almost like a monster with a giant evil face in it. Is it missing something? Could something look better? Please give us your thoughts!

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martiandrivein on Aug 17 '10 at 11:36am

image is private

Tess Fondie on Aug 17 '10 at 11:45am

okay fixed it! just a habit of mine

martiandrivein on Aug 17 '10 at 11:47am

the top left guy could use some heavier line weights (hand etc) I think the bottom frame is the best by far.

Tess Fondie on Aug 17 '10 at 2:09pm

yeah i dunno if it'd be too over the top if we did the whole thing like that though

tracerbullet on Aug 17 '10 at 2:11pm

i think the text definitely needs to be bigger. even on the large version it's hard to read.

SuperRyan on Aug 17 '10 at 9:53pm

good suggestions :^)

SuperRyan on Aug 19 '10 at 9:11am

bigger text

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Tess Fondie on Aug 22 '10 at 2:44pm

Okay, so I changed a few things:

I still need to shade the second box like i did the first, but I think I am going to keep it completely grey scale. Any other critiques you can give before we send it off tonight would be great

Tess Fondie on Aug 22 '10 at 2:45pm