Hey guys, so I'm applying for an assistant manager position at a bookstore in canada and I need help with the covering letter, is there any chance any of you can look over it and make some suggestions for improving it?

thanks

Phil

I'd really like to offer you guys something in return but the very best I could do is buy a tee shirt and I can only really afford one and I dont know what a fair way of deciding would be.

p.s.s this is the position I am applying for, I dont think I'll get it but its worth a shot

The deadlines tommorow, but the entire weekend has been a disaster because of a power cut and power surge.

any help would be appricated

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Dear

I am a recent graduate of York St John University and have attained a B.A Hon’s 2:1 undergraduate degree in film and television production. I now wish to further myself and gain new skills in a retail environment.

I read the posting for the position of customer service Coordinator with great interest because I have extensive experience within the industry and it would be a chance to take on new challenges.

I have over four years of experience working in a retail environment, most significantly WH Smiths PLC, one of the largest retailers of books, magazines and stationary in the UK. As such I am highly familiar with the daily runnings of a bookstore and am able to identify the needs of the customers.

As an employee of Tescos PLC, the biggest grocery chain in the UK I have shown my ability to achieve a high visual standard within the store and was able to further develop my time management skills.

Finally as a Sales assistant at Jessops PLC, a camera and photography equipment retailer I have demonstrated my ability to work with customers, advising them on purchase by attempting to meet their needs whilst staying within their budget.

In my free time I take part in several activities including rowing, where I was a coxswain. As a coxswain I am responsible: for keeping the boat and rowers safe by steering the boat safely, keeping the crew rowing in time, motivating the crew and providing tactical decisions when required.

As part of my degree and in my free time I have worked on several short films working primarily as a cameraman. Fulfilling this role meant I had to help the director achieve his vision by providing a variety of ways to shoot a scene.
Throughout this collaboration we produced several pieces including a film called living’la vida longboard.

http://www.vimeo.com/2520618

As a British citizen I will be required to apply for a work visa, I plan on applying for a working holiday visa through BUNAC http://www.bunac.org/ which takes several months to complete, however it requires no paper work from you the employers.

Yours

Sincerely


Phillip Johnson