As a general pointer, I'd say avoid those squared-off edges on your strokes because they look lazy. Sometimes they work, when intentional, but they don't look good here.



Overall I can't really tell what's going on. The text isn't very clear and therefore the overall concept gets lost a bit. I think you've got a decent general idea of what good t-design composition looks like and how to make designs technically, but this probably could use a lot of work.

The text is a bit difficult to read... :/

yeah its just something i drew out...

didnt think of submitting it as a t-shirt just needed some advice on what i should do with it



thanks for the pointers though...i know theres something that makes it look messy and stuff cuz when i sketched it it looked a lot better than what i did on the comp...



keep it commin