I double checked before I had started and since they're not actual logos or icons and done in parody, they are covered under parody laws. I originally submitted it to threadless and wasn't warned about any issues so I imagine its fine-thanks for the concern though!
hmm, maybe have a few blood stains on the teeth? won't make sense if their mouths are smeared with blood but their teeth crystal clean? haha, but i like it overall :D
I prefer it with the text but just make the text smaller and put it under the heads. And I actually preferred it when the heads were all in a row rather than squared.
i agree with ladyfox, i think you'd have better luck here with the first design but what do i know. this is a great idea but i have to wonder if maybe people are getting tired of zombies. i love 'em, personally, but this latest zombie trend may be nearing it's end...
@ ladyflux,spiderflux yea i was a fan of the original but it seems the overall verdict is no text and box setup. I dunno. Spider, I know what you mean, the majorioty of my designs are stuff done for friends that I'm finally putting on here,so unfortunately I've got a few zombies,as much as I love them.
@chicochic-what do you suggest as far as background-I can't really see anything fitting. I thought about doing them more detailed, but didn't want too much going on and wanted to look more stencil like
The actual design is really cool. I don't like how it looks on the shirts, though. Just try dropping it on a gray shirt, and I think it might be ready to go!
Hope it helps!
-TJM
Please swing by mine, if you would!
http://www.threadless.com/critique/67698/King_of_the_Skies
The actual design is really cool. I don't like how it looks on the shirts, though. Just try dropping it on a gray shirt, and I think it might be ready to go!
Hope it helps!
-TJM
Please swing by mine, if you would!
http://www.threadless.com/critique/67698/King_of_the_Skies
I personally like version one much better cause its a play on words and the heads look better horizontally, you should also considering using a color for the eyes but thats your call.
i like v2 its more iconic and i dont mind the missing ear, because zombies fall apart right? i also like the clean teeth. if you do add text make it subtle.
great design!!
I think you need the "Let it Zombie" text or there isn't really a "joke." Maybe just make the text smaller and tuck it underneath the faces a little. Not such a prominent design feature. That way, it's more of a secondary punchline.
Changed the eye color-maybe glow ink for added effect too?
Add the text at the bottom much smaller. I tried the bloody teeth,but it caused them to fade into the rest too much. Same with the grey shirt, it fades too much into the facial colors. Thanks for all the great comments and help so far
Thanks for checking out my critiques, appreciate it. I really like this design, its well done. I do like it better without the text, I feel like something is missing, maybe shadows or dripping blood or something like that. try and play around with it. I really like where you are going. =D
@alismith85, thanks, thought abotu doing the hair but it seems like itd be more detail than the faith if that were done
@Ezahn-I know what you mean, just the boxes seem too formal to me for what it is, I could be wrong
@Phauxe-Yea I didnt want too many elements, everthings made to almost be stencil like since I make stenciled tshirts now and then, but more detail might help it
all i can say is it definitely doesnt need the text, thats a bigee here. maybe try orienting them differently so they arent right next to each other in a square, just to mess about with.
awww.. i love the beatles :( but the illustration is looking great! :) i definitely like it with the 4 stacked better than all 4 across. have you tried putting the type in the middle or above instead of below?
Without the text, it seems like the whole joke is lost-it just ends up being a buncha zombie beatles for no reason,rather than the wordplay being made visual. I'm probably going to switch the eyes back to matching the shirt color and changin the shirts to a green/blue setup. As much as I like the idea of it on grey, the grey washes the rest out too much
Definitely going to try adding a bit more detail though
Thans for the comments so far
thanks for the advice all-i know all about the text hate, but I just can't see how the shirt makes any sense without it-perhaps a text hater out there can explain it? Ha yea,they colors aren't my favorite, but in tryintg to find what goes with zombies,these seemed to fit, I'll be changin them tho to more a blue, a different green,and who knows
Grey just doesnt seem to work, but i'll post one up anyhow
Rebooted the whole project,based more on the actual cover, changed shirt colors and skin tone to fit shirt color(good call guys, doubted it but I love the change!) bloody teeth as suggested, along with more detail and color.Overall, glad I listened to you all. Thoughts?
good idea. works best on sand, but try on white too. Nudge john up a bit, and try putting the glasses on him again. (on this version). could be funny and more easy to get who they are
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ItsKeiser
All you need is braaaaains. Pretty straightforward-messing around with different figures as zombies and the title just worked
ItsKeiser
thanks for the comment-I threw it up on here since threadless rejected it as needing more work-I'll look into changing the text
digitalfelandjaruni
great design! I agree on making text a little less obvious!
V5 up!!
critique?
http://www.threadless.com/critique/68441/The_Music_Lounge
Hattara
You seemed to double post this design so I'll just comment on this too: :D
Help me with: Gale And Thunder
ItsKeiser
Yea,threadless didnt load the page orignally so i thought it messed up,double post deleted.Thanks for the comment!
Tyrant Art
Are there any copy right issues on the beatles heads....be careful w/ that
ItsKeiser
I double checked before I had started and since they're not actual logos or icons and done in parody, they are covered under parody laws. I originally submitted it to threadless and wasn't warned about any issues so I imagine its fine-thanks for the concern though!
dominoPingu
nice idea - i really like the heads...but (also) I'm not that big fan of text on tees...but i think you wont get rid off it...
maybe you could try to arrange it like the cover of a new album...so the text could fit more into the design?
please have a look at the new version if you have some time left
ItsKeiser
Won't or shouldn't? I'm going to do a text free version and a text version to compare.Thanks
ItsKeiser
Text free and more square album based
ItsKeiser
Agh! Just realized the ears on two are wrong-aside from that, comments welcome and appreciated!
roastyjack
hmm, maybe have a few blood stains on the teeth? won't make sense if their mouths are smeared with blood but their teeth crystal clean? haha, but i like it overall :D
and definitely on a real tee too!
ItsKeiser
thanks,i saw yours the other day,love the color scheme
ItsKeiser
@roastyjack, thanks,yea i thoght about that, just didnt want the teeth to be lost in the blood-I'll hopefully have a new version up in a bit
psykomakia
Why is Harry Potter hanging out with Dave Grohl?
ItsKeiser
ha grohl i could see, but since when did potter have a stache?
ladyfox14
I prefer it with the text but just make the text smaller and put it under the heads. And I actually preferred it when the heads were all in a row rather than squared.
Snack Attack!
spiderflux
i agree with ladyfox, i think you'd have better luck here with the first design but what do i know. this is a great idea but i have to wonder if maybe people are getting tired of zombies. i love 'em, personally, but this latest zombie trend may be nearing it's end...
chicochic
this is crazy..haha add a little details and backgrounds..
http://www.threadless.com/critique/67992/better_solution
ItsKeiser
@ ladyflux,spiderflux yea i was a fan of the original but it seems the overall verdict is no text and box setup. I dunno. Spider, I know what you mean, the majorioty of my designs are stuff done for friends that I'm finally putting on here,so unfortunately I've got a few zombies,as much as I love them.
@chicochic-what do you suggest as far as background-I can't really see anything fitting. I thought about doing them more detailed, but didn't want too much going on and wanted to look more stencil like
erelca
yark, yark, yark! I love it. What are you waiting to submit this greeat tee-shirt!
Please rate & comment the love story of my Zebra Zebra
TheJelloMaster
The actual design is really cool. I don't like how it looks on the shirts, though. Just try dropping it on a gray shirt, and I think it might be ready to go! Hope it helps! -TJM Please swing by mine, if you would! http://www.threadless.com/critique/67698/King_of_the_Skies
TheJelloMaster
The actual design is really cool. I don't like how it looks on the shirts, though. Just try dropping it on a gray shirt, and I think it might be ready to go! Hope it helps! -TJM Please swing by mine, if you would! http://www.threadless.com/critique/67698/King_of_the_Skies
anakarina
this is cool! i'd wear it! i like v2's layout but with the text. :)
if you're not busy, could you also comment here?
lwkeba
I personally like version one much better cause its a play on words and the heads look better horizontally, you should also considering using a color for the eyes but thats your call.
can you take a look at http://www.threadless.com/critique/68694/The_Inner_City and let me know what u think?
loo k ate me
i like v2 its more iconic and i dont mind the missing ear, because zombies fall apart right? i also like the clean teeth. if you do add text make it subtle. great design!!
traneman
I think you need the "Let it Zombie" text or there isn't really a "joke." Maybe just make the text smaller and tuck it underneath the faces a little. Not such a prominent design feature. That way, it's more of a secondary punchline.
ItsKeiser
Changed the eye color-maybe glow ink for added effect too? Add the text at the bottom much smaller. I tried the bloody teeth,but it caused them to fade into the rest too much. Same with the grey shirt, it fades too much into the facial colors. Thanks for all the great comments and help so far
traneman
Niiiiiiiice. I like it.
alismith85
I really like this actually, don't know what to add. Might be worth adding in some shading onto their heads, dunno. Thanks for the comment on mine ;)
Ezahn
nice!! I would put them in the boxes like the real album to create a better and quicker connection, and the text on the top..
Phauxe
Thanks for checking out my critiques, appreciate it. I really like this design, its well done. I do like it better without the text, I feel like something is missing, maybe shadows or dripping blood or something like that. try and play around with it. I really like where you are going. =D
ItsKeiser
@alismith85, thanks, thought abotu doing the hair but it seems like itd be more detail than the faith if that were done @Ezahn-I know what you mean, just the boxes seem too formal to me for what it is, I could be wrong @Phauxe-Yea I didnt want too many elements, everthings made to almost be stencil like since I make stenciled tshirts now and then, but more detail might help it
mytton
all i can say is it definitely doesnt need the text, thats a bigee here. maybe try orienting them differently so they arent right next to each other in a square, just to mess about with.
efreak
It really doesn't need the text, but if you're going to keep it, maybe let the letters 'zom' and 'i' be less defined somehow?
My first design needs comments, if you have time.
island
i would drop the text. love the imagery. try it on different tee colors, and maybe change the arrangement of which beatle is in which corner.
it would be great if you could take a look at my design and give me a critique.
Yuhki Demers Design
i would lose the text for sure and maybe try tilting their heads for more of a zombie feeling or maybe placing their heads horizontally across the T
jballeza
awww.. i love the beatles :( but the illustration is looking great! :) i definitely like it with the 4 stacked better than all 4 across. have you tried putting the type in the middle or above instead of below?
jholguin
I gree with the other comment, I would take the text, or maybe just make it smaller and move it to a side to make it less improtant. Good job!
Would anyone mind giving my design critique?
jennsky
It looks best on the olive shirt, maybe make the eye sockets transparent so they take on the olive color of the background
fuzzy-squirrel
Haha i like it. i kind of want to see more torn flesh, but it all depends on how recently they became zombies. :) cool concept
ItsKeiser
Without the text, it seems like the whole joke is lost-it just ends up being a buncha zombie beatles for no reason,rather than the wordplay being made visual. I'm probably going to switch the eyes back to matching the shirt color and changin the shirts to a green/blue setup. As much as I like the idea of it on grey, the grey washes the rest out too much Definitely going to try adding a bit more detail though Thans for the comments so far
zellmad
awesome, really! go with the yellow background.
What do you think of my latest?
IvanSaysOh
haha thats clever. i like it a lot, but the color of the shirt is kind of gross.
ItsKeiser
thanks for the advice all-i know all about the text hate, but I just can't see how the shirt makes any sense without it-perhaps a text hater out there can explain it? Ha yea,they colors aren't my favorite, but in tryintg to find what goes with zombies,these seemed to fit, I'll be changin them tho to more a blue, a different green,and who knows Grey just doesnt seem to work, but i'll post one up anyhow
ItsKeiser
Rebooted the whole project,based more on the actual cover, changed shirt colors and skin tone to fit shirt color(good call guys, doubted it but I love the change!) bloody teeth as suggested, along with more detail and color.Overall, glad I listened to you all. Thoughts?
Howzeitgowing
I like both versions of the faces. good work
Suntro
Having the two on the right a bit lower down kind of throws me off. Otherwise this design is phenomenal.
josethreadless
nice, i like ur design. i hope this gets printed.^^
if you have time please view and comment on my design tnx!
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Frosby
good idea. works best on sand, but try on white too. Nudge john up a bit, and try putting the glasses on him again. (on this version). could be funny and more easy to get who they are
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