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This is my design of a bread relaxing on a sauna while it gets toasted. Thank you all for the time it takes you to critique my design, I appretiate all comments.
I'm not sure I like the placement on the shirt. Although maybe if you added some steam rising up from the top it would add to the placement and the idea of a sauna?
I'd also like to see the toast with a more bread-like shape.
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i agree with sneaky you could make good use of the upper part of the tee if not raise the design other wise it'll be a bit strange. but other wise i like the concept very cute.
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Thanks for your comments. Now That you say it, it makes sense that the design should be at chest level. Any other suggestions?
Beautiful design. But it should be more on top.
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As usual, i have to agree with fox. :P
Right now the bread just looks like.. well im not sure exactly. Try giving it a more natural color too, the white is just too white, especially if hes being toasted.
Last day in the running! Vote if you get a chance guys. Thanks
also, move the toaster switch lower. in the position its at now, it seems like it wouldnt be on
Creo que tienen razÃ³n en los comentarios.
1) bajar la manija del tostador.
2) poner un poco de vapor saliendo de la estufa.
3) algÃºn color de los que tienes te dÃ¡ para tostar un poco el pan?
tambiÃ©n creo que convendrÃa subir todo el diseÃ±o un poco en la playera
I agree with what has been said. Particularly the placement of the design. I think steam coming out of the shirt could be a great addition. Also maybe adding a cord to the toaster could be a nice touch
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Hehe, I like the expression. I would remove the second towel rack and make the bread larger - he is the star of the show after all! I agree with the others. Raise the placement or add steam,although with the little sweat drops I expect soggy bread, not toast. ;)
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Like everyone else said- higher placement, some steam from the toaster, and lowering the switch would really help you out. However, the towel is sort of floating because it's not wrapping around the bar.
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I agree with adding steam, and you should also make the bread a little bit darker because it is being toasted.
Such a cute idea! With some of the adjustments mentioned above, such as adding dark marks on the bread so it looks toasted and lowering the toaster lever, etc... It will be great!
this is nice.. i think you should add more sweat and im not about the placement.. it's a lil bit awkward placement for me..
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Hi, this is V2 of my design, I have worked on some of the critiques you gave me, that include de placement, the steam, the towel error, lowered the leaver and the toast color. I have also added some whater to the sauna heater, heating wires like in a toaster that generates the heat and changed the leaver design.
Please let me know your opinion on these changes, I would love to know your opinion to see if I am moving on the right track.
Thank you all for your time and honest comments.
love it. submit
hi, i looks really cool now, however, I would change the colour of the toasts border, I would make it a bit lighter.
If you have time check out my WIP
I agree with zerbatosamuel.
I like the concept. But the scale on the tee seems off to me - too large. But the changes you made add great details.
If you would help, I would appreciate it!
Thanks for the comments on the lumberjacks! Really great concept! I think the toast could be bigger and still be impactful. How about toast tattoos? Great work!
cool design for sure! I would also think about resizing it a little.. Make it a bit smaller and move it up on the t.... still, nice work. Keep it up!
I agree scale it down a little bit and move it higher on the shirt again. I also think it would be nice to see a cord coming out of the toaster. You are heading in the right direction great work.
I like the slider button in version 1 better. Great concept. Needs shadows and highlights
I like the second version, good job. The only suggestion that I have is to wider a little bit the table legs. Keep it up!
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Yup submit it!
Correction, I had the button sliders mixed up, I like the thin button slider best.
Overall Aweosme cute design, but i would like to make it smaller around chest. in my opinion it will be great.
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Very cool design. I'd try to get the steam a little bit more natural.
If you have some time, please take a look at my wip.
wonderful concept. While the image inside the toaster is awesome. The toaster is not blending well with it. I also feel that the perspective of the toaster is a bit off. And i agree with most of the comments above. as far as the toaster is concerned. None the less it is an awesome design.
Could you score this and leave a comment as what you feel about the design?
Really good and funny. I would suggest changing the smoke/steam coming out of the toaster and adding some shadows, for example a shadow of the toast into the bench, from the bench into the ground etc, but not too much, you should still keep it simple.
Great idea, very funny haha. I dont like the placement so much, I think the smoke lines are taking to much space and the drawing should be little more up
Check out mines if you have the time:
Fly To Your heart
Hi, thank you all for you comments, they have been very helpful. Based on that, I have made new changes to hopefully improve my design. I have added a base to the toaster, made the bread bigger, made the toaster smaller and raised the placement. Also and probably the main change is that I have changed the steam coming out of the toaster for a steam cloud that surrounds the toaster to better blend the design with the T. Please let me know what you think of these changes.
I appreciate your time and comments.
By the way, you can see the placement by clicking on the image.
Hey, I think this one is definitely the best version so far... the steam cloud is a nice touch! Keep up the good work...
Maybe just the steam coming out the top. Nice work.
and critique mine if you get a minute please
I can't think of much to change, it looks really good. Maybe the dots on the toast could be the same colour as the bench so they look more like sesames (not sure if they are white or not, it's hard to tell?)
Haha, this one is nice. Maybe adding a texture for a vintage effect would complete the picture!
You did a great job!! The only remark I have is that the steam is supposed to be inside the toaster, since the bread is in a sauna session! :)
I like your design :)
lols i like it, the only thing i can think of is maybe edit the shape of the toast dude, like maybe give the stryotypical butt shape at the top.
i need criticism
haha hey, really novel idea. I'd think it's about ready!
This looks nice. I think you have blurred the steam cloud bit too much.
I like it! :)
HAHAHAA!!! Like the humour concept! SUBMIT!
how is mine?, please
Hey thanks for your critique on my last design it is up for scoring if you are interested in voting
Also this one only has one day left so I'd really appreciate your vote
Mmmm i'm not sure about that cloud. i would try to make the steam came only from upside but different as it was before. The full cloud makes no sense with all the design
Check out mines if you have the time:
Fly To Your Heart
Slight adjustments...but the idea is simply HILARIOUS!!!! I like the way you think. :)