Help me out! This is my first design.

I like the fact that you put the text within the toast at a certain point it makes it more interesting. Maybe clean up the reflection or glare on the toaster and add some burnt sections of the toast just a thought

Hey, thanks for your feedback, I like your design, the typography is really well and the design well executed, go for it.

Hi again, thanks for commenting on my design, based on your comments i have made some changes to my design, would you mind checking them out and give me your new opinion, Thank you for your time:
Bread Jump

Hey, thank you for your nice comments on my design, It is now up for scoring. Please if you have time, help me with your score at: Bread Jump Score

Yes, as mentioned- I dig the type treatment. I also like the chrome reflection.
If you have time, would you help me out by scoring my submission in the running? Thanks so much!