collab with L.T.

hello

Maybe the spilled popcorn could be saying something a little more sassy.

not fresh enough,huh?

The drawring is good, as is the jovial type.



Just laughing makes them seem less impudent. Maybe something more bold.



Examples escape me at the moment. It's 3:46am here...

hahaha I like Orville over there that's pretty damn funny. Can you make that the shirt? I'd sport that till it stank, then another day after that.



On the serious side I agree with the professor, it needs a little something more concept-wise. Nice drawing though that's for sure. How do you do that texture? It's great. Ummm concepts also escape me. Maybe have them trying to get back into the popcorn maker??? no that kinda sucks...hmmm not sure

i put a paper over an old book and rub with graphite

scan it, and it's a texture screen



thx for the inputs

lol@orville

oh I love this! I love the scratched feeling. Or worn away. Whatever you wanna call it. SO good. Could you make the word fresh bigger?

love!

send!

love!

cool, I did a popcorn design as well, you should check it out, it only has one more day left of scoring and it's called "popcorn drops".

mo feedback?



:-)



malorie, i'll check it out

lol @ orville's sexy body

I didn't even notice the little kernels at first...

you gave me an idea. I'll tell you in secret.

secretz yay!

oh, thank you steve for whorin out the hot bod on this

orville sez eat ur damn popcorn

that arm is kinda awkward how it comes outta nowhere.

there are only 2 more things that bug me:

the elongated eyes mixed with the mouths kinda feel generic, like mickey mouse or something.

There's a big shadow under 3 little corns.



just fix that and it'll be subworthy imo

Awwwwwww. Poor little unpopped kernels. I like the box.

hey renfrue - this is very consistent - + awesome



I cant see the shadow under the kernels - but it is prolly my shit work monitor -



SUB IT

he's laughing and pointin at the little unpopped ones



anyone else think we should lose the arm?

title ok?

I think "orville sez eat ur damn popcorn" is a good title

I do think you should lose the tongue on the one with the arm though

if we use it, u get creditz :D

this looks real nice renfrue worth subbing



as for titles heres a couple of ideas



popism

late bloomers

"at least i wont be eaten"

popcornism

cornballs?



title



and keep the arm -

so far:



keep arm ~ 2 (me, Isaboa)

lose arm ~ 2 (LT, polyester)

nice!



Hmm, keep arm!



And for the titles. . .



Premature Popcorn

Premature Children of the Corn

Too young for the movies

keep arm.



title: "keepin it fresh"

Keep the arm. Keep the tongue. Make the shadow under the unpopped kernels more size appropriate.



Ignore what I said under v1 about what they are saying. The arm says it correctly.



Sub this bitch!

I dont say lose the arm, just move it.

I really like "late bloomers"

or "hot-buttered mutants"

should the box's shadow be round?

yaya, the arm shall stay, but we may tweak it

fron the angle the light hits it, the shadow is correct to me

shadow bothern anyonez?

Lose the tounge, keep the arm.

v1 faces are better guys!

LT, aim?

v1 MOUTHS are better

see how MY corn pops better?

vain bastard

He's dead as disco - except he doesn't get sampled by hip-hoppers...

he should

poppin fresh

I like this! I like the arm..

submit it

the best part of critiques is that you develop a fan base for your design.

That's 9 $5's before we even sub! :)

"In Orville's Image?"



Meh.. gave it a shot.

name for it : Poppin it fresh.

Snobcorn

Popped 'n' Fresh

leave the arm - but make the disregarded bits of popcorn look more like un popped corn or make them black - just so it's a bit clearer :)

love the concept but might need a little brighter color

brighter? like the tee or inks



cause we are going for old tyme/vintage movie popcorn

coool :)

i agree that the unpopped poppin' corn hould look a bit more different from the popped ones cuz i was confused at first too. Also in the title if you use "orville sez eat ur damn popcorn" you should say poppin' corn instead cuz thats what he used in the old commercials

minor tweeks

Looks better!

i say late poppers

late bloomers, and the first comment will be about being unPOPular :)

pop defects

pre-pop escence

premature e-pop-ulation

on blue?

like it somehow...but i think iŽd prefer it on a lighter background,maybe a pale yellow

I think you should make the bully popcorns white, because you want people to quickly make the connection that they are the same fresh ones that are in the box