Russian ninja doll eliminates the enemy... Pirates!

I think this is right on.. the ninja's expression is great ^_^ the smaller pirate on the right could use a little more work.. but i like this a lot.

if you don't mind scoring my design, i'd appreciate it. thanks :)

I like your take on the russian dolls. Can you make the left piece, the one on its side, a bit more angled, like in a better perspective because the angle its at is a little odd (looks like a tongue). And enhance the shadows. You can also explore a background, but not necessary; simple is nice.

perhaps more dramatic lighting and shadows too. to make them pop

Haha, this looks awesome. I'd love to see it in greater detail. i also agree with changing the perspective of the upper half of the leftmost figure. Also, why is there a smaller pirate doll in the left base and not the right?

clever design :) maybe bold thick shadows and bigger dolls?

if you have a second:

http://www.threadless.com/submission/311024/Dream

http://www.threadless.com/submission/311022/GEOCOSMOS

brilliant submit!

please score my design: http://threadless.com/submission/311080/Mushroom_Soup

why ninja and pirates ? is there a reference i didn't get ?
good stuff tho. try a bit bigger design on the tee. add shades. ;-)

you're welcome to comment on mine ;-) thanks !

ok i changed it up a bit, and made them bigger with a bigger shadow and ... ya dont know how else to make them pop really

any suggestions?
cheers

The perspective of the pirate on the left looks off. Or is he flying through the air? "Assassination" is spelled incorrectly :)

I would love it you could take a look at my design: stereotyping It's my first submission on Threadless!

i wasnt really concerned with the correct spelling of that word, seeing as its not on the t shirt itself. if it did get printed im sure threadless could correct that i
but the pirate on the left was supposed to be as if the ninja had just cut him and the upper body was falling down to the ground... didnt really know how else to draw that
thanks thou

Yes the others are right work a little on the pirate. Misspelling can be fixed at sub. Keep up the good work!

Can you take a look at mine?

http://www.threadless.com/critique/80095/Politically_Correct

Looks better. Maybe no gradients on the shadow, just simply all black round shadow?

agree with WaldemarBorowski. also add shades on the characters ;-)

oh and dont forget to remove the transparency on one of the character's back. :-)

ok thanks, id add shades on the characters but then id be over 8 colours

New version is much better! I agree on the others who say the left big pirate should be on the ground, also because the sword of the ninja is already in his/her belt!
Shadow of the right pirate should be closer to the body and the "harder" part of it should be all along the body imo.
Also the shadow of the ninja looks like it's floating!
It's really funny otherwise! :D

If you have a spare minute please score and comment on my design! Bamboo Dealer :)

ok i updated the shadows, made them darker "harder" from the middle out and put that left pirate down onto his side instead of falling through the air. i was gonna just put black shadows underneath them all, but it looked kinda funny.

what does you all think now?

not sure on the gradient shadows, try using a darker shade of the T-shirt colour - green.
You could also show more stages of the doll lying on the ground so you can only see one complete doll (the smallest) lying by itself.

Andy

Feedback appreciated:
http://www.threadless.com/critique/37599/The_briefing

looks good, I agree on the shadow, you might want to experiment with making them all black

please critique

....try the black shadow, but i think it's almost ready to be submitted.

Nice idea you got there! :)
I agree on awl rock, try make the gradient shadow only black.
Maybe you could try make some assassinated bodies behind the ninja? I'm not sure if its too much details. or try replace the figures elsewhere to see what view it then would give.
keep up the good work!

I've answered your question about my design

Looks great now; good improvement!

Please critique mine too!

ok everyone seems to want the black shadows, but i think it looks like these weird portals underneath them.
but the people ask and i shall deliver so here ya go

I wouldn't use black. If you can make it transparent gray so it looks more like a shadow. Keep it Up!

Can you take a look at mine?

http://www.threadless.com/critique/80749/Oh_the_humanity

haha! love the idea!

if you have time vote my slogan,
http://www.threadless.com/profile/1315627/moonreich/slogans
Thanks!

you say you'd be over 8 colors if you add shades. but you can use black (or one color you already used in your design) shades working on the transparency of the layer on photoshop.
good luck :-)


Btw my Alice's tea party is being scored ! you're welcome to vote and comment :-)

Looks a lot better! Shadows of killed pirates are perfect. One more thing - make the shadows of standing ones a little smaller.

i think the same about the standing pirates' shadow...try to make them a bit smaller..

If you have a minute let me know what do you think about my last version of Reverse Idea

Agree with WaldemarBorowski.
I like your concept

I like the idea, just try to use green in the shadows, maybe looks transparent.

It is definitely an improvement, and yea just make the shadows of the standing ones smaller and I think it will be ready.

Please critique

added some shading, and made the shadows on the smaller pirates, well smaller
did the shading with multiply transparency so i dont know if that makes it over 8 colours or not?
does anyone understand those flash templates? cuz i dont, but i dont know how to use flash

Yea this definitely looks better, I'd say its ready

please critique rainmen

I think that the shadows are much better now...about the flash i can't help you, i don't know how to use flash too...

Each shade counts toward your 8 colours. I think you're right at the maximum, but it's hard to tell from your image.

To make a flash file (.swf), you'll need to own a copy of Adobe Flash. Then you can download one of these templates & import your images.

Please critique Jiffy Squid, if you have time.

I didn't mention, but I like the design. It is hard to tell what the little guys inside the pirates look like: could you post a detail view?

this is a detailed version of the characters, what does everyone think about it? almost ready to submit i think

yes, I think its great ;)

Imagine a single light source for the characters, say, above the ninja. Then: the shadows on the left figures would project forward & left, & the shadows on the right would project forward & to the right. The ninja's shadow wouldn't change. I think that would improve the composition.

The "skew" or "perspective" tool in your drawing program should do the trick.

I like the previous version more than this one.

Please take a second of you time to comment my design
here

Thanks!

I'm not sure if i'm getting it.is it 1 ninja doll that's sliced 2 pirate dolls in half, exposing a smaller pirate doll in each?

im guessing sayadar as never seen or heard of those russian dolls that open up and when you open them there is a samller one inside until a certain size.

Getting better! I agree with debbilboy i would work on the shadowing a little bit more. I know it's frustrating, but you will get there!

Can you score and comment on my sub?

http://www.threadless.com/submission/312043/It_s_not_easy_eating_greens

Agree with debbilboy .

thank you for your valuable comment.

I think that some sort of simple background or setting would be good, to tie the whole thing together?



Also, if you have time I'd appreciate it if you could score my design...

ok here is a flash presentation of it, hopefully the flash file works this time, and i added the shading on the right sides as well.
what do you all think now

like it,
it's funny an well done

Make sure your close-up is the proper dimensions, i.e. 640 x 800 pixels. Right now it's distorted because you imported a file with the wrong width & height.

And by all means, work on the shadows. It's a good concept -- it just needs refining.

Jiffy Squid needs your comment!

actually i did use 640 x 800 pixels for the close up and thats how it came out. i keep adding or changing the shadows i dont know how else to change it
thanks

i would work with the shadows some more, as they dont have a common light source. They look nice, but adding an angle to them and having them all go the same direction would add more depth. I'm assuming that they are being chopped in half and theres more little dolls inside. What if you had one the way they are, but the other one be cut again so that the guy inside is even smaller. Make it a little more interesting. Please critique mine

This is great! I agree with fine-tuning the shadows a bit. But you could definitely accomplish that, you have some obvious talent.

If time, please rate and comment:

http://www.threadless.com/critique/80906/Hamlet

nice,submit this funny stuff

tanks for your comment to my design

haha! thiss funni, what are the peole inside the pirates??
and also the shadowing is fine to me wat i would suggest would be placing all the characters like on a ring, maybe, or something similar, because right now it seems they are just floating, or make something to it so they are actually floating, but other than that great figurines

Test Movie (or press CTL + ENTER) to preview the clip. Also, include a preview on an official template (required when you submit this for scoring).

Jiffy Squid isn't flashy, but he wants your opinion.

1st part of my post is missing. Should read "When you make your next Flash presentation, go to Control » Test Movie (or press CTL + ENTER) […]"

*sigh* I guess there's no way to type a right angle bracket or "greater than" sign in this forum.

It is definitely ready now

This is funny, i think its ready to submit

check out my design to if you could!

http://www.threadless.com/critique/81019/Over_Prepared

ok i changed the shading a bit to what i thought it needed, other then that i think it looks good. does anyone have any more suggestions on what to do?

oh also gave some shading underneath the bearded fellows

I like the design over all (and the concept, it's adorable). The only thing that jumped out at me was the shadows as well, like Fezbeast wrote. The solid black keeps drawing the eye back, and it distracts from what is otherwise a strong design. Perhaps fade the shadow, or have it be a lesser shade? Keep working this though, it's a good piece.

Nice one, Yeah try to lighten the shadow!!!

plz check mine here

I'm totally loving the design. The only thing that seems off is that the Ninja has a highlight and the others don't. They feel a little flat because of that! But nice nevertheless!

If you have a moment, please let me know what you think of "Instant Summer".

allright i went back to the original shadows that everyone seemed to not like, but now everyone likes again, whats up with that!?
and i also took the hightlite off of the ninja as it has been requested

does it look good now?

oh and check the previous ones, and let me know whats your favorite please

thanks

ya ia know thanks, its just frustrating when some people say this, and others say that. but i appreicate it oh and i did use a gradial radiant guess it dont look like it thou

DUDE I know what to do to solve your shadow problem. Take away the gradient and do a solid color again. but instead of black use the dark grey that you used to shade their pants!!! Try it, it might work!

would you comment on mine when you can please? cumulus

I'd use flat colour for the shadow, gradient in general doesn't translate well in t shirts like GOB suggested (for the reference I saw the previous version and I have no problem with it being black either)

and as many conflicts there are in people's comments, you have the last word, so do what you believe in

remember the saying "A camel is a horse designed by committe"
its very good to take on board other people's comment and critics, but just don't lose YOUR main message, and in this case I think the shadows are just minor, your main message and illustration is great, I'd say decide on the shadow and submit it because we can keep being nitpicky about every little things if we want to :)

ok i think i finally have the shadows perfect on this one! and also changed up the ninjas belt colour, and played around with the outlines a bit on the dolls. but dont know if i like them w/out the black lines
what does everyone think of that then?

oh and i couldnt get rid of all the black lines that outline them, cuz it wouldnt work that way and wouuld probly take me another 4 hours or something

I'd keep the black lines anyway, the black line frames the shape of the objects and makes the color transitions clearer

love the shadow change

nothing else to say from me, its great
the only thing that I'd do now is just see if there're other T shirt colors that you like better for the sake of presentation, but personally, I like the green.

great job :)

love it. really minor point, but to me the ninja feels just a bit too far to the right. it's so slightly off the golden third that it unsettles the composition. maybe move a few nudges to the left?

minor crit though, great design.

There is something about the composition that doesn't work for me, it is a sort of inverted t-shape as it is, and I think that maybe it could be stronger. For instance, being as there is an assassin, maybe he/she should be better camouflaged, like a smaller 'doll' inside a hedge/camouflaged doll. I also feel that all the pirate dolls inside the pirate doll should also be attacked. Then maybe only one other doll but with lots of bodies. Does that makje any sense?

keep the black outline on the pants, and the grey shadows look "grey-ate"!