Critique this t-shirt design: "The fun way to ruin your family's evening!"

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Work in progress by:

twoonebee
on Sep 11 '10

Version 1 - 623 days ago

Version 2 - 620 days ago

twoonebee on Sep 11 '10

This based on a slogan I submitted many moons ago that did relatively well. rnIt revolves around the fact that I don't think I've ever played a game of monopoly that didn't devolve into a full blown row before the end of the night.rnLet me know if you can think of any improvements.

Ariane B on Sep 11 '10

hehe, funny! my suggestion would be maybe to remove the painting to keep teht things more simple! the drawing is perfectly fitting the idea, so well done!
if you got a second, feel free to comment and score me, only 3days left for my design ;)
http://www.threadless.com/submission/295957/The_Wish_Tree

twoonebee on Sep 11 '10

Yeah I can see what you mean about over clutter, but I put it in because without it the image looked un-balanced, and too weighty on the left. Plus I like having another visual reference with the monopoly house haha.
And already scored! It's very lovely.

Dingdogglewoo on Sep 11 '10

This is really clever and well done! I would just experiment with tee colours and would like to see the placement.

Could you check mine?

twoonebee on Sep 11 '10

Is the meaning implicit though guys?

I'm worried it looks too much like an evil monopoly guy just jumping out the box and scaring the kids....

twoonebee on Sep 12 '10

Sorry guys, but bump.

ChukwumA on Sep 12 '10

hehe, awesome stuff!
the only thing I would do is to make the outlines on the money all black and solid. otherwise it�s a great illustration!
please critique mine:
http://www.threadless.com/critique/76400/No_Natural_Enemies

Manupix on Sep 12 '10

Yes, I'm afraid it looks too much like an evil monopoly guy just jumping out the box and scaring the kids.

Why not make it just that? Coz those people are awesome.

nitai_i on Sep 12 '10

its cool but i dont know why.
check outdough_boy_vs_cookie_monster

jiska_ on Sep 12 '10

this is really funny! maybe add some more colors to the illustration and show placement.

any ideas for sea level or winter sun?

twoonebee on Sep 13 '10

Thanks for all the suggestions peoples!
One more bump before I go back and make changes.
:)

beargarms on Sep 13 '10

This illustration is so well done, I don't think you need to do much to it! Monopoly has this effect on families, I can vouch!

Go for the submit!

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v2 The fun way to ruin your family's evening!, current version

Work in progress by:

twoonebee
on Sep 13 '10

Version 1 - 623 days ago

Version 2 - 620 days ago

twoonebee on Sep 13 '10

With placement. I'm pretty much ready to submit unless anyone has any suggestions in regards to design, placement and presentation...?

jiska_ on Sep 13 '10

the girls on the presentation look like scaled up in a wrong way, kind of not equal, i don't know why...

any comments for sea level?

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