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ThePen on Sep 06 '10
its all in a days work...
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Why is the man going to kill the boy?
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Oh I forgot...
Pls crit my design. |
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ThePen on Sep 06 '10
its the ' please remain in the veichile type if thing' i'll check it out
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Ah - i don't think it's clear from just one SWAT guy.
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Ah - i don't think it's clear from just one SWAT guy.
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ThePen on Sep 06 '10
i did orignally have text but i took it away
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ThePen on Sep 06 '10
i looked at you critiques you have alot lol
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Wilfur on Sep 06 '10
i think need add the shadow~
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lalyle on Sep 06 '10
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Hooray Monkey on Sep 06 '10
Yaa, i think need more shading on this artwork dude. :)
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great image. I like it graphic - forget shading. the boy looks a bit old. he should be smaller and more innocent. A girl with pigtails could be even better. ideally, to get the message across, you need a swat team surrounding the car, with lazers pointing towards the car. the title could be 'please remain in the vehicle'
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ThePen on Sep 06 '10
i did originally have that in a text bubble but i removed it because i didnt like the text :P
more shading on the boy and car or swat guy? |
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Toresson on Sep 06 '10
More shading on both! Nice concept though.
It would be sweet to see what you think about my two critiques, if you feel you have the time. :) Here you have Modern Beauty[Sic] and A murder of crows (Name in progress for that last one, not quite that catchy. :P) |
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-TheCreator- on Sep 06 '10
shadow swat guy and car :) but great design if this were running id give it a 4. not to say it shouldnt be edited a lil- innocent girl should do the job! great work :D
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ibeenthere on Sep 06 '10
i think the illustration is cool, though you need to add more details to each one of them.
also, the concept isn't clear, i too feel like the swat guy's gonna kill the poor driver:) |
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The Mitch Hedberg on Sep 06 '10
I think it'd look better on plain white. I love that there's no detail in the faces.
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r.c.davidson on Sep 06 '10
I Agree with fatheed, you need more than one swat dude. Maybe try making the characters smaller on the shirt, then add a couple more swat guys surrouding the kid. I think that might get your idea across a little better. Just my opinion though...
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Skuza on Sep 06 '10
good one... I coul imagine only the boy with this man in his own t-shit.. just as an idea.. but this desing is interesting.. summit and try.. sometimes the best it´s what you have in your main....
again: sorry for my english.. i´m from Spain... |
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larac19 on Sep 06 '10
it's rather sinister... I also like the anonymosity of the facelessness... :)
Can you help me out with my design? |
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dfurman on Sep 06 '10
its too violent for me haha
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EricDiaz on Sep 06 '10
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nbswars on Sep 06 '10
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ThePen on Sep 06 '10
im making a new one with faces and instead of the boy there is an old woman in a mobility scooter lol :P
i will post it tomorow |
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-TheCreator- on Sep 06 '10
act wth am i saying i mean submit!!!! old woman would b even better though and because it counts as a considerable change u can make 2 tees
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-TheCreator- on Sep 06 '10
act wth am i saying i mean submit!!!! old woman would b even better though and because it counts as a considerable change u can make 2 tees
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-TheCreator- on Sep 06 '10
;D
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Fablucero on Sep 06 '10
your new version sounds interesting and funny...good luck =)
If you can, please score my Flood and lemme know what you think, thanks! |
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MKMasonArts on Sep 06 '10
I think that the idea of making the man in the vehicle a little girl is really good, and surrounding her with swat guys. It would be really funny, especially if she was holding a teddy bear or something cute. I would wear that shirt. :)
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ThePen on Sep 07 '10
lol thanks very much :)
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SeaSalt Jones on Sep 07 '10
I like the premise of the idea, but I'd kinda like to see actual facial expressions to really sell the idea better.
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ThePen on Sep 07 '10
i will add some soon :)
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jiska_ on Sep 07 '10
this is great!
you could try to do this in a childish hand drawn style. |
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Tookytook on Sep 07 '10
A great idea :)
My advice - more details on the car, and maybe some face details... Plus I personally don't like the yellow color on that blue but that's just my taste :) play with the colors a bit Pls check out my Tool Belt... Thanx :) |
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ThePen on Sep 07 '10
thanks for the advice i'll check it out
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ThePen on Sep 11 '10
This is my newest version, changed the boy for an old lady and got it down to 9 colours. ( any sugestions how to get rid of the last one and still have the same sort of affect)
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monostyke on Sep 11 '10
maybe there too much grey tipe... but i don't know... i like the style :)
http://www.threadless.com/critique/76302/rorschach_ladybug |
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ThePen on Sep 11 '10
any idea's on how to get it down to 8?
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klog on Sep 11 '10
Pretty awesome. How about instead of white you use a light grey that can also be used for grey highlights?
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FoshF on Sep 11 '10
The idea is great and love the style of the drawings, maybe include some text saying please pull over the vehicle or something similar, just to make the concept a little clearer. Unless you think that would overcomplicate the design.
If you've got the time I would appreciate your rating and comment on my submitted t-shirt design Totem Pole Thank you |
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Dingdogglewoo on Sep 11 '10
This is pretty well illustrated but I don't understand what is supposed to be happening.
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Dingdogglewoo on Sep 11 '10
This is pretty well illustrated but I don't understand what is supposed to be happening.
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ThePen on Sep 11 '10
its the ' please remain in the veichile senario' the old lady is
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ThePen on Sep 11 '10
* the criminal
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ThePen on Sep 11 '10
same as befor but with text to show whats actually happening lol
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ThePen on Sep 11 '10
please rate thanks
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