would love some feedback from you guys
thanks

I think there's too much going on here but I really like the funeral part. The top section seems to contradict the realism to me, though I'm by no means confident that others would agree with me.

If you keep the words on the bottom I think it should read "First...and last issue." Otherwise the focus is on "issue," for me at least.

thanks for the input

i sure needed help on the wordings part, 'First...and last issue' it shall be.

hurm what should i do to the first panel, just one cause ? will it then be too plain ?

first of all, your concept is AWESOME. I adore this as a setup.

As far as the execution is concerned, I think it needs to gel more. The upper part and the lower part for me seem sort of distant at the moment. I'd want the font to be somehow more comicky, I'm not sure how but I'd want it to leap out at me more, maybe like this? Or like this.

I also think the atom-energy ball thingies need better integration, maybe some motion lines to show them whizzing about or something. I'd like to see the funeral in the same colors as the upper part of the drawing. All in all it's a great start, keep workin' at it :)

Very cool idea, work on the pics and make the text more comic-booky

how about keeping only the funeral part....

I agree with what the rest of the community has suggested here. My initial read on it was confusion. since you are going with the comic book concept here, maybe break it up LIKE a comic book. I mean placing the imagery in boxes so it suggests different scenes. You can add a few more storyboards to tell the story. I think that would be a great way to communicate your concept.

nice inputs here

@ celandinestern: i'll try to add in colours for the second panel but yet keeping the solemn-ness

@ celandinestern and boycey: will change the font

@ sherm3k: im not sure if im able to convey the msg in just one panel.sry

@ 4anartist: actually the 2nd panel was made to look like a coffin, but looks like it didnt get across. might add another panel

thanks a lot

I like the irony, and I like how you interpret the theme. Nice colors, too.
Can you help me out with my design?

will work out the font, later on

V1 or V2 ?

bump

honestly I can't even tell what changed, except the 'first... and last' tagline. And in the case of the tag line definitely 2.

thanks for commenting

i'll put in more effort
and as for the 2nd panel should i keep it looking like a coffin or should i change it to boxes instead ?