Hi everyone!rni'm back with something simple in apparence,rnan idea i had yesterday, i wanted to give a try.rnrnOur lives are always complicated, aren't they ?rnsometimes messy, or doubtful, sad and then full of joy, rnsometimes we make a step forward, sometimes backward...giving this sensation of being at the starting point...rnrnbut that's our nature, that's what make us stronger, that's how we grow, and in the end, we hopefully find a way, to give a sense, a meaning to our lives. This meaning that free our mind, flying peacefully :-)rnrnwhat do you think guys?rnrnthanks in advancernrn

wow the text is a bit messy lol...so here it is

Hi everyone!
i'm back with something simple in apparence,
an idea i had yesterday, i wanted to give a try.

Our lives are always complicated, aren't they ?
sometimes messy, or doubtful, sad and then full of joy,
sometimes we make a step forward, sometimes backward...giving this sensation of being at the starting point...

but that's our nature, that's what make us stronger, that's how we grow, and in the end, we hopefully find a way, to give a sense, a meaning to our lives. This meaning that free our mind, flying peacefully :-)

what do you think guys?

thanks in advance

love the simplicity and the colours used!! :D
great work!!
:D

I like it, a lot! What are you thinking for placement - wrap around with the birds?

Also, please check my simple design critique if you have time, thanks.

thanks! well that's not the good version, i put a slight outline on the design...i send it now lol

the good version 1 in fact (worked on the outline and forgot to send it as it is now)

so my presentation

Hi everyone!
i'm back with something simple in apparence,
an idea i had yesterday, i wanted to give a try.

Our lives are always complicated, aren't they ?
sometimes messy, or doubtful, sad and then full of joy,
sometimes we make a step forward, sometimes backward...giving this sensation of being at the starting point...

but that's our nature, that's what make us stronger, that's how we grow, and in the end, we hopefully find a way, to give a sense, a meaning to our lives. This meaning that free our mind, flying peacefully :-)

what do you think guys?

thanks in advance

to Ngee (version 1): well i don't know yet, about the placemet, i first want to see what people think, if you think it's smart, or not, if people get it, if you like it, and ideas to improve it too...

i like the birds forming into arrows and the whole shape of it feels really really nice.
i have a problem with the font of the text (i do think the text should stay), it feels different from the rest of the design...also, i would change the blue colors into one of the green...don't see a reason for it to be blue and less colors mean cheaper prints which will raise your chances:)

Please score my design: Bearminator

thanks for the feedback!

about the font, i drew it myself, i didn't want this time to take a font...

but you are right, i think the "e" is off, i wanted to put an arrow, but anyway. i will make them fit better in harmony with the design.

about the blue, i want the last bird, to "pop" litterally, as it's symbolic...but again, i'd ay just the last one should be blue ;-)

v3 changes
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Reworked the font, so that it fts better the design, the arrows,
as suggested, and kept just the final bird in blue

so, what do you think?
thanks in advance for your suggestions

ok then, just the last one...but this is the last time billy! now go to your room and do your homework!

lol:)

darn it! i commented just as you updated...so i only saw the 3rd version now:)
ok, here goes:
the "my" needs more work to fit the style of the "life"
the "life" is great as is!
also, i thought we had agreed only on the last bird blue?! you lied...YOU LIED!!! lol:)
but seriously...i think the text should be completly green, and i think you can lose the dot above the I'...

Please score my design: Bearminator

ahah! you rock, and i promise i won't lie again, never ever, thanks! :-)

seriously, about the blue, again, i say you seem to be right, again!
i'll try with the text completly green. About "my", i'll see what i can do with my delicate hands eheheh

just scored your design, and by the way: it's awesome !

other suggestions? ^

complex Idea! greaaat

How About Mine?

v4 changes
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just a slight change in the font i reworked, and the color of "my".
thanks a lot to "ibeenthere" , that's true dude, "youbeenthere" and i thank you for that lol

what ya think? ^

lol:)
my nickname is actually a word pun (as you said it...) of my sure name...Ainbinder;)

anyways, back to your design...
it looks much better!
the "my" is working great!
my last suggestion is to lose the "dot" above the "i" in "life"...it's just feels so out of place, color, shape, and texture wise...(it has kind of a bevel feel where all the rest is flat) if you still want to leave it there, then use one color blue (which will tie it up with the bird) and make it flat! :)

Yes, this is an improvement, though I agree that you could lose the dot on the i.

thanks you two!

ibeenthere: so i love your nickname ^^
i'm ok about the dot, i will try all in blue, or without.

except from that, other suggestions anyone?

V5 changes
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Added a distressed texture
removed the dot of the "i" which distracted from the rest (thanks ibeenthere and ngee)
made one better arrow-bird transformation

what else?
thanks!

i would like to see the placement :D
PS if you have the time, please help me out by giving me your input http://www.threadless.com/critique/72225/the_head_in_the_sky

v6: Now i added the placement (and 2-3 minor changes)

so i put also the presentation text with the flash template:

Our lives are always complicated, aren't they ?
sometimes messy, or doubtful, sad and then full of joy,
sometimes we make a step forward, sometimes backward...giving this sensation of being at the starting point...

but that's our nature, that's what make us stronger, that's how we grow, and in the end, we hopefully find a way, to give a sense, a meaning to our lives. This meaning that free our mind, flying peacefully :-)

i like the text a lot! (the presentation text i mean)

I also like the texture you added...works very well!

my one issue now, before submitting this, is the blue bird (again, lol), but this time, it's just because it's too high!

maybe you can lose a few birds and lower the blue one a bit...

Please score my design: Bearminator
And if you have the time, let me know what you think about my African Savana :)

you know, there is a superb song called Bluebird - One Self
here:

lol

anyway, just for you i lowered the blue bird a bit :-)
and thanks a looooooooot for your support ^^
i scored bearminator as i said earlier ;-)
i'll check your wip tomorrow with pleasure

v7 - Presentation and better layout, with the birds.

Presentation Text:
Our lives are always complicated, aren't they ?
sometimes messy, or doubtful, sad and then full of joy,
sometimes we make a step forward, sometimes backward...giving this sensation of being at the starting point...

but that's our nature, that's what make us stronger, that's how we grow, and in the end, we hopefully find a way, to give a sense, a meaning to our lives. This meaning that free our mind, flying peacefully :-)

you have an idea of a better Title?

thanks again guys, you rock!

Duuuuude! i really like this design! and the text doesnt hinder it what so ever :D I especially like the solitary blue bird at the top signifying finally finding one's place in the world :D I love this and i think this is deffinitely ready for submission! :]

Hey, if you have a minute could you vote/comment on my design Cardboard Epiphany! ?
http://www.threadless.com/submission/285886/Cardboard_Epiphany

yup! now you have my "premision" to submit this lol;)

this looks great!:)

I even like the blue bird!!! :O
lol:)

5$

Wonderful coloration, texture, and white-space.

Cool T- placement, too.

Tea-Pain need your help (or critique, rather)

thanks a lot everybody :-)

@ibeenthere: thanks "dad" ahah

@treihugir: thanks for your kind words, my blue bird appreciate your interpretation ^^

@alexhughson: and thanks too !

v8 - Updates
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Changed the whole composition (tree bigger, etc.)
The design is bigger on tee shirt
some arrows are outlined, to give a better graphical aspect, more depth
and Added a new Tee Shirt Color: on Dark Grey

Text Presentation
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Our lives are always complicated, aren't they ?
sometimes messy, or doubtful, sad and then full of joy,
sometimes we make a step forward, sometimes backward...giving this sensation of being at the starting point...

but that's our nature, that's what make us stronger, that's how we grow, and in the end, we hopefully find a way, to give a sense, a meaning to our lives. This meaning that free our mind, flying peacefully :-)

i like! :)

i think the dark gray looks good...but i feel the white is better suited for the freedom feel you are going for:)

thumbs up! (:
the white one looks good, i would definitely get it on a tee! (:
do help me out with mine too! (:

V9 changes
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added a few different arrows (lines) to bring more diversity, and a touch of happiness in it ^^


Title question:
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What do U think of the title, someone has a better idea?


Text Presentation
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Our lives are always complicated, aren't they ?
sometimes messy, or doubtful, sad and then full of joy,
sometimes we make a step forward, sometimes backward...giving this sensation of being at the starting point...

but that's our nature, that's what make us stronger, that's how we grow, and in the end, we hopefully find a way, to give a sense, a meaning to our lives. This meaning that free our mind, flying peacefully :-)

like:)

maybe: circle of life(?)

how about Everyday Chaos ...

comment on mine??Bad Day

thanks for the proposals... a friend told me "The ways I am" i like it a lot, i think i'll use this title!

"The ways i am (my life)"

i tried some stuff, on the bird especially, but i'm not convinced at all...so i will see if i sub it tomorrow evening, what do you think?

other suggestions?

THANKS

bump of the day :-)

this rocks so hard on gray!

Please help me out and critique

A question: you prefer v9 or v10?

i just wanted to give a chance at a blue bird more realistic, different, than the birds that are forming...what do u think?

i personally prefer v9 byt the way (so why did i put this v10? dunno)

I would go with V9. Great progress on this. Looks cool on both colours.

v11: between v9 and v10.

i guess that what i will sub (but i'll do that tomorrow).
last suggestions before i sub it?
thanks a loooot!

Text Presentation
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Our lives are always complicated, aren't they ?
sometimes messy, or doubtful, sad and then full of joy,
sometimes we make a step forward, sometimes backward...giving this sensation of being at the starting point...

but that's our nature, that's what make us stronger, that's how we grow, and in the end, we hopefully find a way, to give a sense, a meaning to our lives. This meaning that free our mind, flying peacefully :-)

thanks Ngee! (on previous version). i agree, that's why meanwhile, i subbed this version ;-)

Makes me think of an old Don McLean song (for my shame) which has the lyrics:

You know I've heard about people like me
but I never made the connection
They take one road to set them free
and find they've gone the wrong direction
But there's no need for turning back
'cos all roads lead to where I stand...

something like that anyway.

SUB IT!

that's beautiful dude!

and DAMN, you are right, i sub it right now, no need to wait, sometimes, we don't need to overthink!!!

thank you and thanks everybody who helped me, especially ibeenthere! i tell you when it's on the running

That nice... The green gives it an air of ecologic matter..
can you help me with mines http://www.threadless.com/critique/72563/Squeezed_Sub

hey it's great, really! hope you subbed it already, i'll be scoring it, let us know!

comment on mine please?? thanks!

http://www.threadless.com/critique/72572/Invader

I like it! And prefer it on dark grey.

you know it's a 5 from me:)
update the link once it's approved:)

yeah thanks everybody, and again to ibeenthere, who was really there for me eheheh

so it's UP, you can score it you can score it NOW

coool! cooool! cooool!
plz look @ mine
http://www.threadless.com/critique/72811/My_life_is_upside_down

i like it. i really would buy it. plz comment my picture.

http://www.threadless.com?streetteam=jorge_oliveros

This is really good. Maybe add some blue to the letters to make them stand out a little more.

Now that I see the earlier versions. I am thinking a light blue shadow for the tree trunk might be worth trying.