I was about to sub it...
but as always, i wanted to put the design in the critique section,
to see what you think first, and your suggestions are welcome !

The title can be changed too, if you have a better one in mind

so, what ya think? i sub or...

thanks in advance!

i think the spikes need to be more uneven as it nears the heart.

please help my new submission by rating and commenting on it..

http://www.threadless.com/submission/273557/Poor_Weather

I like the presentation a lot, although I'm torn about the wraparound. I like it overall, but the graphic may hit harder if it were slightly bigger. Again nice job though.

I think its great but needs to be all on the same side to be understood. I also think that the lines shoud peak more jaged-ly like a reall monitor. All in all Awsome!!!

Dont for get to critique:
http://www.threadless.com/critique/67832/Magic

thanks a lot for the Fast and cool feedback! I'll check your stuff tomorrow.

@mytton and brain83: i agree about the peaks, i'll fix that.
@sanction and brain83: about making it bigger, why not, but i have to try.
Concerning the wraparound, well, i think that it can works well, also because if it's on the same side, it would be tiny, too small imo...

anyway, that's why i love putting designs in critique, because comments are clever, and threadlessers are awesome for that! SO THANKS

@jstolz: the price tag is an awesome idea to try, thank you!
i'll vote and comment other critiques today ;-)

way to go jebs!

1 comment. Put design as the first slide, and move the placement slides as 2nd and 3rd. When i saw the first slide i didn't understand what the design was about, and then i realised there was a back. In scoring, i'd just take a glance, score and move on without ever realising the back.

Very cool design. I agree maybe change order of slides as I didn't get it right away.... Great work though!

@ agrimony: it's been a while! really glad to read you buddy. About the slides, i completly agree. The teaser won't work in Threadless.

I worked and created the design just yesterday, and looking at it today, with a fresh eye, i think i still need to improve it, in readability, presentation. I have many possibilities to complete the concept, and I've already an awesome feedback !

@four.winds: thanks, and yeah, i'll change that!

I really like the wrap around but would like to see front and back on 1 slide to get the full effect straight away.


please crit my latest if you get a chance

V2 changes
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-Presentation: the first slide shows the design and not the tee template.
-The color print can be yellow, on red background, i think it works better (especially printed), but tell me!
-I kept the wraparound, but if people ask, i could test a version only on front (it lacks impact, because of the small size...and the teaser effect , back front concept disappear...)
-I changed the peaks, so that's more realistic, i also made a better play of shapes between the barcode and the last heartbeat. I made the whole design bigger, especially the heart.
- I added a price tag without price, because you don't now what your soul worths until you sell it lol...what ya think?

thanks again!!!


THANKS for all the excellent response you gave me!

Yes, this looks better. I like the yellow color better than white too. The entire concept is a bit hard to figure out though. You have to look hard at all the details, and probably even then someone has to tell you the title.

Please comment on my latest design:
"RainbowZebra"

V3 changes (don't look at V2 - it's not the good template, v3 IS in fact v2)
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-Presentation: the first slide shows the design and not the tee template.
-The color print can be yellow, on red background, i think it works better (especially printed), but tell me!
-I kept the wraparound, but if people ask, i could test a version only on front (it lacks impact, because of the small size...and the teaser effect , back front concept disappear...)
-I changed the peaks, so that's more realistic, i also made a better play of shapes between the barcode and the last heartbeat. I made the whole design bigger, especially the heart.
- I added a price tag without price, because you don't now what your soul worths until you sell it lol...what ya think?

thanks again!!!


THANKS for all the excellent response you gave me!

@ BucketKnight for v2: thanks! about the concept easy to get or not, i wait at people feedback...maybe i've just to add a thumb on slide 1 with the entire line...? dunno...we'll see!

bump! i have a concern, splitting like i did the first slide, seems maybe to make the concept harder to get...?

what do you think of all the changes?

NEW VERSION - WITHOUT WRAPAROUND

a few told me in the previous version that they were not sure about wraparound, as it's harder to understand...so here is my proposal:

Do U prefer V4 or v3? Do you prefer v4 tee1 or tee2? Or should i keep the two v4 placement?

thanks in advance.
What do you think of the pricetag without price? meaning you don't now what your soul worths until you sell it ;-)

tee 1 is much better than tee 2

I like Tee 1 better also.

This is a very nice design, very clean, and a very cool concept. I love the heart rate increasing until he is dead, and obviously sold. I think it may be close to done, if not done.

Check Mine Please?
That Ain't Mine

THANKS :-)

@elvisshow: yeah i'm pretty happy that someone noticed that kind of sense, details, as i was not sure that people would get it, obviously, you did! thank you.

@ you two; i also prefer Tee1 , and definitely, i will forget the wraparound stuff that is too complicate for people to get ghe whole idea fast ;-)

so i'm gonna make a 2 slides presentation...what else? ^^

I prefer V4 - tee 1.

Version 4: Tee 1 is my favorite of the options. I like the color choice as well. I think you're ready to submit. You're also ready for Liquid Bunnies.

I agree with the others, version 4 and Tee 1. looks great :-)

great work man! (there are so many bad heart-tshirts around here)
i like the barcode change to heartbeat waveforms.. smart thinking :-)
i'll say v4, tee 1 is the best, def no wrap around.

final versions?
Walk on Water
How May I Serve You?

waouh! I don't see that!
Grat work and idea!
My favorite is the tee number 2.

Please rate & comment the love story of my Zebra
Zebra (zebras are only horses who wear pajamas)

wow! thank you so much for the superb response, and the warm comments ^^

it's 1o'clock in the morning in France, so i quit now, but tommorrow, i'll comment mtths and erelca works (already did with a great pleasure for all the others)

@mtths: yeah,thank you! i agree that putting a heart is tricky lol, but i tried to make someting different...i hope that people won't see just another heart tee ;-)

this is pretty cool

http://www.threadless.com/critique/67012/Follow_the_Music

thanks elfo9

PS: i meant 1 o'clock, and almost 2 right now, so goodnight everybody ;-)

Really Awesome work..... $$ v4 tee 1

thanks!

just commented your stuff everybuddies ;-)

i'll put a 2 slides version later, and try 2-3 minor improvments!

t1 for sure it is really nice how it stands in this design

please rate and comment

thank you, you rock! t1 for the win!

@Brightwood: pretty happy to read you again! simple and complex? that's all me lol

V5: The vertical version is the winner!
-The presentation is now finished, with 2 slides
-The heart is slightly bigger.

The title is good enough? Last suggestions about a detail to add ? SHould i sub it?

THANKS for your stunning feedback since the beginning!

Hi, thanks everybody for the great response you've given. That was awesome.

Here is the version i'll put in the running in a few minutes.
in this version, I improved just a few details, like the pricetag...

SUBBED!!!!
i'll tell you when it's up for scoring.

And thanks again!

Um wow, this is awesome. Hah, I don't know if I'd wear it, but this is a great concept.
... but who plays for the violin?

I'm watchin' this...

was gonna say sub it, now i'll just wait for vote..

Check it.

thanks!
just commented your wip ;-)

Thanks, man. Don't forget to tell us when you've gotten it up for scoring!
And the violin comes together...

I like this one as is. You subbed it already, so I'm too late for suggestions. I was going to say make the heart larger, place the heart graphic where the human heart would be on the shirt, place the 666 bar code on the sales tag and make the sales tag larger.

thanks glaze for your comment, too late indeed, but interesting :-p

so you can Score and Comment on the design, it' up for scoring! a BIG thanks to everyone

Score and comment my design: The man Who sold his soul (thump thump)

Hi again, 6 DAYS TO GO for voting :)

COmment/vote if you want the design

Great use of line. i would buy it. Is the Barcode from an actual product?

Did a new version of one of my designs. What do ya think
http://www.threadless.com/critique/68361/Old_School_Rockers

great concept! very clever i might add. Submit!

Please help me and vote for my design as well :)
http://www.threadless.com/submission/273480/Tangyyy

wow! i really like ur idea. i hope this works out.^^

if you have time please check my critique as well;
FUNKY SIDE UP

5$ nice work!

interesting thought , i think you need to empasis those bars otherwise people wont get the idea from first sight.

this is really good! i dont think u need to add anymore to this.


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THANKS BUT IS HAS BEEN SUBBED.
VOTE HERE

and now, just 2 DAYS TO GO

and...

1 DAY TO GO

Ill vote 5!!!!

Can you rate mine?

great score you've got there mate, hope my moonlighting Wally gets a 3+ as well ;-)

let's support this working man...
he's ready for your vote!