This idea has run through my head for a couple years now. I just finally sat down to make it, and want to see what you guys think. Maybe it is not as funny as i think it is.

It isn't immediately obvious what's going on. Perhaps you should make the green baby bigger, or in close-up. And have the real dad casually walk somewhere in the background. Perhaps a mailman in a blue uniform?

Oh, and could you please stuff your presentation in a controllable swf? The automatic showreel makes me a bit edgy. I don't feel I have time to look where I want to.

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I find it very cool ! I really don't think you could improve the drawing, but I think maybe it should be placed more at the middle of the shirt, and should be bigger ; I like the blue one and the white one.

It definitely has its chance I think :)

LOL! Cool concept! I love the idea! Maybe Just have it be the two parents, arguing, and the lil' green Kool-Aid kid, not the other one. Lol, I like this idea a lot. Illo could use a bit of clean-up and stylizing, but this idea rocks.
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I think I have the style that could help boost the concept and focus. I have never asked to collab before, so I'm not sure how the formalities go, but check out this sub:
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And tell me if you think it'd work out. I would love to help realize this idea in this style, but I wouldn't just snake it, lol.

It might work like that, or in a different style than i have it. When I get around to it, I may try a different style on the illustration from what I have now.

Oh, and Bucket knight, This is a .gif file, just meant for the intention of showing the rough of the design. The computer I am at also, does not currently have flash on it, so at the time, no i can not place it into a .swf

Here are some minor changes, like additions to the illustration to slightly change its style, with a "woodcut" in some areas. I have also made the green "baby" larger as suggested. What does everyone think?

That's clever. Maybe on the back could be a blue koolaid man trying to climb out a window or something.

Could you take a look at mine? I appreciate any and all suggestions. http://www.threadless.com/critique/67169/What_s_The_Point

someone else mentioned a blue guy, honestly since he will be a little more work than changing style i am trying to keep from doing a blue, but my original idea like 2 years ago, involved a blue one, maybe i should just make a blue one.

i agree. it'd be cool to add a blue one.
i think you should make the orange "kid" larger because it's supposed to be bigger than the green one. :)

I can do that, i guess since several people have mentioned a blue one, when i get the chance, i will add a blue one.

Thanks everyone for the input so far.

nice idea! The drawing of it lets it down a bit though, add more shading and maybe even more colours to lift and add more weight. And adding a blue one would be cool too.

What do you think of my new version?

concept is great, just needs some work on the shadings and perspective.

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This version is with more changes that have been suggested, thanks for the input so far, Please keep the comments coming.

I really like this, but I wonder what it would look like if you took out the pavement backdrop.

I do like the addition of the blue koolaid man

I have thought about removing the pavement. The more little change I make to it, the more I start thinking this pavement looks stupid.

I could also make it slightly larger if I got rid of the pavement. I might do that soon.

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Hilarious idea you have here. I really like how the baby-cups are mixes of the colors of the mother and the two dads. Very nice touch. I agree that the blue mail-man dad is necessary for the joke.

That said, I think it needs something. I can tell that they're supposed to be in a neighborhood, but I think it needs more background to fully convey that. Alternatively, do you really need the background? I think the characters can sell this themselves, Maybe even some text from red kool-aid man, like "That ain't mine!" or something similar.

Hope this helps, dude. Thanks for critiquing mine too.

No problem. I think the next time i work on it I am going to get rid of the road. I have thought about a background, but nothing has popped in my head, and I think I only have one more color before I hit my limit of 8. I will have to think a little before I get to making the next version. Think about a background and probably get rid of the road. It was originally just to ground the red and yellow one, but now with the blue, they really dont need it.

this is hilarious!

I totally agree about removing the pavement. how about making the blue man reading a newspaper while staring from a distance? then, you wouldn't need the background. just a thought though.

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I might do that. then it would just be understood they were somewhere, and not where are they. Thanks alot. Might be a bit before i make the changes, I am tired of looking at flavored drinks lol.

Hi! Thanks for the comment on mine.

This quit nice.. I like the "checking the mail thing", but would be funnier if the blue one WAS the mailman :D, with the hat and bag and stuff (a mustache maybe?).

I'm not sure variations of this concept weren't done before, but since I can't put my finger on one, I'll drop the subject.

Also I'm missing the handles for the jugs. They seem too large to be held without a handle.

Good luck!

Thanks

thanks a lot for the comment on my piece.
the concept, like everyone said, is pretty hilarious. that being said, you should fine tune the style of the jugs, and maybe fix the perspective of the white striping on the road. plus, maybe have the scene set on a sidewalk next to the street? seems weird to have a family quarrel in the middle of the street--nor is it safe... :P

thanks again everyone. I will work on some of these changes tomorrow. i am most def getting rid of the stupid road, i hate it now.

lol, this is clever! :)

i think it is a good idea but i think you should have them on solid ground. no road, but if you want to keep the road i suggest you fix it a little. but over all ill give it a 4

lol, nice, maybe do a part 2 on a Maury or Springer stage

THe maury show crossed my mind many times when making this, it is probably where the idea come from. That show is so funny. I will have an update on this piece today.

Version 4. I have made some changes that have been given to me through comments, and friends opinions.

What do you guys and gals think now?

maybe he is spill proof, lol

I really like it but feel it needs some sort of background, I didn't like the road but I do think it needs something if its going to be on a light t-shirt

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thinks there's a similar design somewhere with regards of color mixing.
nice concept, agree with dac101. not really sure about those grasses maybe some light colored background will work better.

with regards the placement, seems bit too high leaving bottom kind of empty.

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lol i love the humor in this. i would deffinatly buy it.

i do think that it looks kinda like cli art though

it's a bit hard to see what we're looking at, when you place in on a blue tee like that. because the light blue lines will fade away and you only see the colored liquids really well.
maybe change the linecolor to another darker color to get it better on light tees?.
also try to make the liquid cans more 3d, by drawing small lines for the bottom or the opening.

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Thank you everyone who has comment so far.

I keep getting the mention of a background, even a simple one. What kinda of background, simple or not, are we talking about. I am not sure what to do in the sense of a background. I agreed with everyone that the road terrible, my girlfriend suggested the grass sprigs to help ground them.

I still dunno what to do about a background though, any thoughts?

thanks for the feedback on mine. I like your idea, but the design needs work- use a coloured background to set the characters.. i'll have to get back to you when I have time. keep going!

lol classic :D
anyway i think that maybe you need change the gb color... maybe mint?

Hilarious! I think the placement seems a little too big on the shirt. Maybe if everything was brought in a little closer to each other, it would help with the background issue as well. Great concept though, keep at it!

I might try bringing them closer, probably be tomorrow before i do, but I might just try that. Thanks!

I'm glad you got rid of the road. Regarding your background problem, perhaps you could try setting it up so the "family" is on their front lawn, sort of in front of their house, and the blue guy is grabbing the newspaper from his front door? Give it a little bit of a suburban vibe.

Keep up the good work.

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I like this a lot more without the road graphic!

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I will try some of these things tomorrow when I get back to working on it. I personally like it loads better with out the road graphic.

Thanks everyone so far for all the input. Maybe it will be awesome one day lol.

the pitchers need handles! i kept staring at it thinkin it was missing something... then whammo! lol i also agree, you need to show their homes, so its a little more apparent they are neighbors? maybe :)

I like it. The concept is really good.

However, I prefer the look of the first version, I.E., without the "sawblade" on the side. I don't understand what it represents.

I love it! keep the grass but I think it could use a speech bubble. I get it cuz of the title but a person wont wear the title around on them once they buy it...lol

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I'll repeat myself by saying they still needs handles.

Now, about the BG... I think you must have some sort of sidewalk or road if you want to keep the mailbox. However, it doesn't have to be so strong like the last road. Maybe just some subtle lines to suggest the outline of a pavement rise, maybe have it split to large blocks.

Good luck, and can you please re-check mine out? Thanks!

I don't think you need the real dad in the background, as that guy just confuses me. I like the idea, though I think it would be better if you had the baby bigger? Cool illustration too

Hmm - I think the baby's z's could be slightly larger. You can only see it if you're in detail mode.

I think the arms also look a little odd. Oh, I just figured out that the OJ glass. You can have him be on the dad's side instead.

Cute concept.

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I dont think you need the grass. Just a thought.

Sometime today I will be adding handles, and working on a background for this, to try and better tell where they are.

The blue character has been added for effect and the majority seems to like it better with him in the picture.

There may be an addition of a speech bubble to the red Character.

I believe the grass will stay, and hopefully a background will come along. Some details may move or be deleted during this period.

Thank you so much everyone for all your help and input. I like this illustration more and more each time, and I hope you all feel the same.

Changes to come today!

A lot of good improvements since version 1. For the background I think you should go with the suburban drama theme. Just create some softgrey house silhouettes and maybe some picketfence shapes. These might even work as white cut-outs.

And could you consider having the blue guy whistling 'innocently' and looking up, cartoon-style?

I definitely see a print in the making.


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I made some suggested changes, I did not leave out the speech bubble....i forgot it, and had the flash file made when I realized it. So this version still does not have the speech bubble, but has some other changes.

So what do you all think about version 5?

and once again, that you for all of the support and input thus far!

Really like the houses, once the speech bubble is back I think its ready to submit!

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Personally I think it works well even without the bubble.
Awesome concept!

Thank you.

I think it's better without a speech bubble. it's more visual joke. You've got enough in the facial expressions and the body language to give the viewer a clear idea of what's going on. To add a speech bubble would just make it too obvious, i think.

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I think the houses really helped. It's looking really good now. I say submit it!

I think the houses helped the design but the lines are too thick and the houses seems crooked

Well done! That is exactly what I had in mind for the houses. I like the curb too.

I'm excited to see it with the word-bubble.

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yeah, that's clever, i like the concept very much. Don't add a speech bubble, it is not useful imo...

now, i think you coul improve it graphically. I think you have to work on the faces (eyes, mouth), arms, as it's still a bit "rough", it could funnier, by trying a different style on those parts...

i also think you should relove the 2 slides of placement, and detail. The model will be used as the placement too. And the model is abit tiny, even stretched imo...

good luck!

i like that! maybe colors nearer to pure yellow, cyan and magenta would help comprehension
i would also add " - that ain't mine" below the drawing

It beginning to become a war over speech/text and no speech/text what should be guys and gals?

No reason for text/speech, as it's clear the way it is.
I love the houses.
Only minor ting that now bothers me (but maybe I'm just a nag) is that almost all the grass is stuck to their feet, and there's almost non of it on the loose. I'd go with removing some of the feet-grass rather than adding more free grass. Maybe even place the mom and blue guy on walkways to the houses.

Good job so far, just a small push left!
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I agree, with the non speech bubble crowd. Also, I would make the little orange glass a little more orange. Very very funny.

i think it's a fantastic idea. but i don't know if it really needs the houses. i think it would be clear enough if it was just the kool aid things.. perhaps an appropriate speech bubble (if you had one) would be AWWWWW NO!

Great idea. Not text need and it speaks for itself. Maybe put the baby glass in a pram or will a rattle

Thanks everyone.

I will possibly make some changes and sub this one more time, before I send it in to the real thing.

I like the suggestion of removing some of the grass from the feet, and the walkway idea, thanks Pyros82. I might just do that.

There will be No speech bubble. I thought about when I first made it, and it would be hilarious if it said "OH NOOOO" or something of the sort, but I do think it is needed.

I would like to thank everyone who has given me input on this. When I first subbed it, I thought it was awesome. I was wrong, it had a great distance to walk before reaching, or coming close to awesome. Once again, thank you everyone for all you have done.

Some side walks add, the red house moved a little and some grass taken away. I hope these changes please everyone. I think I am close to pushing it in the running.

Thank you for everyones else so far.

i think its a great idea, but i like the first one the most. :/

Thanks for the advice so far.

cool design. my only question is why the baby green.

Can u critique mine?
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the baby is green because the yellow mamma knocked boots with the blue neighbor...

ha ha I was getting close to understanding it. I feel kinda dumb for not seeing it, but anyway now that I really do understand I think it is hilarious. :) It sounds like most people got it so it might not be worth changing but if you want to try to make it a bit more obvious maybe try placing the orange cup more between the red and yellow jar showing the belonging to both of them. Also I would make the orange a bit more orange. I don't know if its just because the glass is so close to the yellow it just looked like another shade of yellow to me. overally I think it is coming together really well. I like the work on perspective and the peeking expression on the blue guy. (and just in case you didn't notice what I'm sure you did, in this design the door frame of the red house seems to be off)

Thanks for the help on mine earlier :)
http://www.threadless.com/critique/68093/Spill_Your_Heart_Out

this concept has already been done:

You got some splaining to do

is the name of the shirt.

I did not notice, I will move the door frame back Monday sometime, and probably submit it after that. Thanks for noticing that

yeah, once the door is fixed I would say, submit it.

thanks for help on mine

the idea is very good!... still the design needs some work tough, like some refinement on the red jar's face and somehow the perspective of the houses, the fences and the paths is strange also you need to drag more attention to the green baby because is the center of the joke i think, perhaps also making it larger cause it would be lost on the shirt if is too small... but as i said, the idea is very good! just keep on improving it!

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Last changes I will make to this one, have been made. The door has been fixed, and I have taken all other ideas into consideration and talked with some about it, and we are going to go with this version I believe.

And now, i shall hit submit and hope for the best.

I love the concept but I don't like the houses are so angular next to such round figures. Love the look on the blue guy's face, not so much the yellow lady's face.

I would say tiny little teeny weeny "little bit" of shading to give it depth maybe

I may do something like that, if it does not go through to voting. or I may just end up scraping the idea for a while. I have other ones i would like to work on, and this one has taken up more tim that I expected it to, but sometimes it happens.

nyc concept.

like it :)
would be good if there is like the green one behind it in the back ground maybe looking rather confused or scared. thts just a idea tho lol.

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i like the idea, but the houses i dont get, try put then on a table or in the kitcken.
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LOL love the idea! - sorry I'm so late.