needs work. criticism?

I'd probably take away the number of stripes along the cone. At the moment there are so many that it draws attention away from his face a bit. :) Look away from the image for a bit, then look back at it suddenly, and see if his moustache keeps your attention (I noticed I looked at the face first, then my eyes drifted

off to the cone).



Hope this helps!

i actually really dislike my own draiwng style. I'd rather find a partner to collaborate with. I have the ideas, but not the designing skills

The ice needs texture to look like ice instead of a ball. And I'd use a grizzly beard. A moustache like that would require a lot of upkeep and hence isn't the first thing that comes to mind when you think of "unshaven" skin.

thanks! :)

new approach

feedback?

hee hee - this is funny.

I think you should have the skirt go all the way around & how are those coocnut shells hanging on?

ha! pepperoni

fix that loin cloth dude

fix what about it

??

pepperoni??? it's a grass skirt

make the coconuts more round like so that you can see they have dimension

they are perfect circles i don't knowwhat you mean by more round. shading on the sides?

yeah, a bit of shading on the coconuts would help them look round, at the mo, they look a little flat, and maybe a hilite in the eyes and the corners of the ice

I'm wondering if people will get the joke without the text. That's not to say you should slap some text on the shirt. Maybe have a little kid walking by holding a Hawai'ian shaved ice and looking surprised at the ice.

Looking surprised at the ice *cube* I should say.

it would be kinda cute even if nobody got it though :)

Yeah, the hula skirt should go all the way around the ice man, they don't end in the front like that. Very cute character!

shazam

is that background acceptable or is it like a gradient? its a brush. Maybe it could go behind Seņor hielo to further emphasize the hawaiian part. unless it'd be ugly or tacky

Threadless doesn't allow gradients, if that's what you're asking.

it's a photoshop brush. is it acceptable?

funny but i dont know if i would wear it

Try using "threshold" mode on the brush tool (or using the pencil tool) while placing your brush stroke, this will use only one color while keeping (some of) the brush's texture.

I was just wondering if the brush counts as one color.

the brush isn't that important, just a sidenote. back to the design. Comments?

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the coconuts are a scream!

anyone else?

im trying to work on a new version but i dont have enough feedback to do much

make the hula skirt go all the way around & show on a brown shirt? Maybe add a Lei or something else that's hula -ish?

not sure...

yeah fix that freakin skirt

do that necklace or flower in the uh hair?

iwanna look like that one day...

*flower necklace

if you could i would put that flower in the hair some how... thats just me

his beard hair? lol

or just on the side of his cubic head

the head

in the beard would look gay

...because only straight ice cubes wear coconut bras and grass skirts?? LOL



I think his eyes need a bit more character, rather than just black jelly beans.

thanks sillybanana. its users like you that make the crits bearable :) I'm trying to decide on which one to focus on, i'm putting most of my effort towards "tanning aspiration"

You're welcome.. What's Tanning Aspirations?

one of my other crits

its really cute.. took me a moment to figure out it was an ice cube though.. course could be b/c i'm slow. lol