Something about my v2 completely messed up my page and deleted the critique. So I'm re-posting the first one and then I'll put the new version.

Even though it seems like i submitted version 1 two seconds before version two, I had submitted it last night. but when i went to submit v2, it messed up and deleted it. There were comments left, and I edited it according to those comments so. IAdded 1 pointy tooth instead of two round ones, and switched the colors.

are you going to add the other crayon riders with the darker colored shapes?



It looks a lot cleaner with the one tooth

Yeah I am, I'm working on the sketches for them right now :) I'm gonna do them in the same color I used for the lines. Thanks, I think so too :)

Oh, crap I messed up. the Pink color combo is supposed to be on the Pacific Blue. And the orange is supposed to be on the denim. I'll fix it when i put the newest version up.

interesting. I'd also like to see some other riders, perhaps in silhouette.

I added some other crayon riders, added another placement option and switched the shirt colors around. I hope everyone likes, and any other critiques or comments are very welcome!

bottom placement is cool, but not my fave. top center placement is great, if one the top shadow guy were moved to the bottom more.

Do you mean moving the smaller shadow guy under the main guy? I had trouble figuring out where to put the shadow guys.

Thanks for the comments :)

I think on the pink crayon cruiser the dark blue would be a nice shadow/other crayon guys instead of the black.

Well the shadow guys are a very dark blue (the same color used for the lines and the darkest flames). If you mean making them the same color as the stripes on the crayon, then I tried that but because of the shirt color it doesn't look very nice.



I think i may submit it, unless there are any final crits?

okay last call before I submit it :)

"Do you mean moving the smaller shadow guy under the main guy?"



Yes.

Big improvement well done. Why not have shadow guys above and below ? They don't all have to be shadow guys

Before I subbed it, I tried some other placements for the shadow guys, but it made it look like the shadows were in front of the main guy, instead of behind him in the "sky" I'm glad you think it's improved :) I subbed it it's pending



here: http://www.threadless.com/submission/129025/Crayon_Cruiser?streetteam=Splaz