This is an older piece I forgot I had. I think it could make a good t-shirt but it needs some work. I know I've used too many colours but nothings set in stone. Please let me know what you think and feel free to make suggestions of where I should go from here.

Oh please ignore the colour blocks on the side. They're from another template and I forgot to delete them.

try some other layout

You could do a better job on the woman. Her shoulder is very broad and angular.



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I would like to see this

on the back of the shirt, with a knife on her hand and a smile on her face!

This will get a lot of vagina comments if it goes to submission. Be warned.

Nice idea, but try to work on the woman. Her arm looks really thick and maybe you should try differen skin/haircolor.

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reminds me of some artists book design. Its interesting in the way its detailed.



You could try to make the girl into a nurse ;)

good concept !!!

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the actual innards kindof creep me out, but this is a good idea

A good start, definately, i'd make it a point to make the woman a little more attractive, i certainly agree the Shoulders are too wide, mess with the colors a bit, they look a little primary.

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I'm afraid I've been a bit busy so it's taken me a while to get around to creating a new version of this design. I've changed the colours, the colour of the t-shirt, the weight of the lines to give more definition and finally I've changed the curtain and organ part of the design. Hope you like this version better and please, some constructive criticism would be lovely. Thanks very much.

Oh I've also made the image of the girl flatter so that the organs stand out more.

OooOoo this is an interesting design! I like the second version better for sure. You could add more to fill in the negative space. Maybe add detail over the shirt to show ripples/texture in the curtain fabric? Just some thoughts, thanks!

i like this so much!!! good luck!!

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I like the idea..I don't really like the girl. I mean she's well done but...I don't know...maybe it's better without it

Second version is much better. I think I'm also trying to understand what the girl wants me to see. I suppose she might be revealing my inner self, but I don't even know if I want her doing that. I mean, we just met.



It's a cool idea but maybe you could refiine the concept a little more - is she helping? Hurting? What does she want me to see besides my organs? Would it be deeper if something other than organs were behind my skin? Just thoughts.



Thanks for your comments too!

I feel she's being seductive? Idk I'm a guy as many probably think the same. Maybe have her head bowed in shame or disgust something saying and showing more emotino you know? that would be awesome but man the color is amazing and the concept is great awesome art!!!

Interesting idea. I definitely like your second version better. nice job on it. The only little comment i have it to make the earring a different color,right now it looks like its flesh toned and i thought she had a weird bump on her ear. Making it the red color would probably be good. Nice job.



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It's a good idea; second one is definitely better. It seems to me like you'r strugeling between "creepy" and "sexy" look. You could raise the girl's eyebrow (and some red lipstick maybe?) to make it more seductive, or/and, dress her up in white like a doctor. Kinky I know haha :-) or you can make her more creepy by making her smile a little with a black dress... a roach or a spider coming from inside the curtain?

I dont know; just some ideas - depends of what do you want...



Thank you for your input too; I've put up a new version that bird design so you can check it out

http://www.threadless.com/critique/62647/Queer_Ducks#v2

Hi I had another fiddle with the design and thanks for the critiques I've been given. Some I'm using and some I'm not. But I have given her shadow now and a little more texture has been added to the curtains. I don't really want to add any shading to the girl as I think she'll stand out too much and the look on her face is coy and I kinda like it that way. But please keep bringing on the advice I'm pretty near to submitting this one.

cool.. I like this..

cool.. I like this..

now its really good!

looks really good.seems to be good to go





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i think it is good but i feel like there is something missing with the girl or maybe if you could add some more details with the folds in the curtain...like if the folds could come out more on both sides

i would add tone to the girl like you have on the intestine.

I would also add bigger folds coming down behind the girl in a nice fluid arc from the top of the opening. It will look more natural and help integrate the different parts of your design more.

Only other thing is that I would play with different colours. It feels a bit dull in terms of your pallette right now.

Great idea and I think you are nearly there!

Submit it, this is ace, reminds me of some science tour thing we used to have at school haha :')





Critique mine?

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good idea, but maybe the girl has to much detail? maybe an old acme stage hook could be pulling the cutain across? that way you could have a horizontal and verticle thing going on and the focal point becomes the human interior instead of the girl.

good luck :)

i think the girl need to have some shadows on her body to match up with all the internal organs.



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Really good! Submit it! :)



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