A bit of a doodle... I think it looks sort of cool.
I plan on adding some sort of ground and maybe some other animals if I can manage...

who's tired of waiting? is the old worm just finally giving himself up to the bird? make the bird look aged too.

m

im not very fond of the worm being old, and i don't really understand the shirt, because i don't think it has anything to do with waiting

agreed.

Originally I had a few other animals, and they were sort of standing in a line. They could be waiting for their ship to come in...


anyway I'll see if I can make the bird look old as well.

it looks liek the bird is gonna eat the worm tho.

m

haha... should I have the worm like stabbing the bird with its cane?

The bird is pretty cute. The worm could use some work, though - it looks a bit fat.

Comment back--

Part of that is that my original document wasn't 640x480, so when I re-sized it, it was stretched horizontally, so both figures are more squat than I intended.

I'm not exactly sure how to make the bird look old... any help?

Also, moved the worm a bit and changed the cane to an umbrella.

HORK hORK HORK

HANZAMANIAAAAA

maybe if he's balding. hahaha, like, the "shoulders" of his wings could have no feathers. idk, just ideas, just ideas.
m

dude, keep the bird, screw the worm. That bird is outstanding

^yeah that

seriously...expand on the bird, put him in a 1920's speakeasy haha doin the swing? or the cha-cha?

hey!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

MALTZMANIAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA

:D

urm... lol.
Thanks hero, I'll see if I can actually do that... haha.
But wouldn't if be boring with just a bird? I think he needs a bigger hat too...

sippin a martini

the bigger and ridiculous the hat the better

you're inspring me

oh my god, I have no idea how I would do that.

haha.
So... martini, speakeasy, big hat...

what about gunz?

you should make a whole gang of them...and just have randomly a human flying overhead...like hardly noticeable

haha. I will see what I can do ;)

should they be wearing trousers? lol birds in pants!
BIRDS IN PANTS!

birds in motherfucking pantzzzeess

hehehehehe

it's the sequel to antz in my pantz; fuck y'all bitches.

The beginnings of the speakeasy hat club...

Something is wrong with the blue bird. I think it's the black golf-tee that it is sitting on/in/behind. WTF IS that?

and the pants can be lost on pinky.

Yeah... birds look better in the nude.

pink bird is checking out blue bird's package!! omg!

ohnoes!

dang... inadvertently lewd content!

"inadvertent..." yeah, right. I SAW how big you made those trousers; inadvertent my flaming butt!

lol. There is no winning, is there?

He can't help that he's a portly fellow! Not everyone has skinny legs!

i wrote a song.
here it goes

and a 1
and a 2
and a 1, 2, 3

Hanza loves to draw birds
she once drew a worm
but it was for the turds.
Now she's drawin stuff that makes us squirm,
we want to see these 1900's birds doing the swing
and perhaps some bling?

thank you thank you
hanza for president of the world

You are amazing.

This crit is amazing. It's turning into a storyboard/comic strip.

I live the ver 2. It made me chuckle.

fatheed is right, it looks like the worm is telling hte bird to go get a drink...and not to eat him...and the bird...the lush he is...obliges.

Haha. I can just hear the worm saying "Come on you bastard!"

hehehe.

I was thinking of adding the bird saying something to the effect of "so then he said..."

"two humans walk into a bar, and we poop on them"

Do you mind if I use that, lol?

use it to infinity.

and beyond!

yessssssssssssssssssssssssssssss

Lol I think it's pretty cool you have something like a picture story going on in this critique.

"Has the worm led Old Bird into a trap? Did the blue bird poison Old Bird or the other way around? We'll find out next submission..."

:D

maybe I'll submit them all as a comic-style shirt sub.

Anyway... I need to work some more on v4, so say some crap or something so I have an indication of where I should go with it.

pronk.

(a relative of pron, but more along the lines of someone you'd take to dinner, but wait until a couple of dates to get it on with you.)

In the original submission you were going for a "the early bird catches the worm" theme right?

That's what I thought at least. And I was wondering why no one else said anything about it.

I think so. It would make (some sort of) sense with the title... however I don't remember exactly.

That's probably a bad sign, but anyways... I might put up another version later tonight, if I feel like it.

I can't wait to see it.

Make sure, no matter what, you don't change pink bird's feet. I like the whole tippytoe-ness

:D

I just suck at bird feet, hehe.

Blue Bird needs more detail (like Pink has on the wings and tail) and better-fitting pants. And feet.

Pink Bird needs to look at something NOT Blue's crotch.

heeheheeh.

Okay so I lazed out tonight, I swear to Nanny Ogg that I'll post it tomorrow.

Thanks- I'm not sure if the blue bird is staying, but I'll definitely work on him some.

inspirational bump

So, I finally did it.

It's getting closer to the speakeasy thing, with added looky-loo window, squirrel, bartender, and less weirdness between the pink bird and the (new) blue bird.

Watchoo tink?

I'll fix the bar and crap, I just figured I'd put something up before I write this off forever because I'm terrible at committing to things.

Also- what color should the bartender bird be?

And I realized that I forgot to take off pink bird's pants...

Ha ha ha, he's a stool pigeon! Blue and plain need the same line detail as pink. I love pink's pants -- they fit with the hats, besides. The squirrel's got this look of panic and indignation mixed with jealousy and shock that I love. Blue's tail is missing? and how many legs does he have?

OH! You put the worm on the glass! omg! Yes, make pink with the worm-glass bigger and the central focus of the shirt! Blue and a more detailed bartender can be sleeve additions!

I think I like version two better.

I'd just add some background in, maybe a tree stump or something to give it some depth.

that shadow on pink birds wing is what makes the whole design, you have to make that sort of detailing in the other animals if they are gonna be as interesting... I really dont like that bartender... and I'm not sure if the squirl is too muck information :)

and I dont think you should change mr pink's pants...

Sub version 2, dammit! Lol

submit something!

yea dude, just sub it already!
m

I love it

the bartender is so bad a$$

I might just sub version two... but keep working on this, for the hell of it.

Thanks guys!!! :D

No no no! Sub it as the pink bird with the worm on his martini glass!

There's got to be more than just pink bird with the worm in the glass.

I don't want to be one of those guys, but a bird with worms in his glass is sounding pretty familiar

aw! Aww fuck!

I'm "tired of waiting" for this to be ready for submission!

YEH WHAT SOURBITCH SAID!

okay, so the whole bar-scene has to be there. Give blue and green/yellow (the bartender) the same detail as Pink, and sub. 'Cause they're all looking at the worm, like it's got all these words of wisdom, but really all that comes outta its mouth is shit.

the squirrel's tail looks like,
like a lion.

lol

lionz

umm. Tomorrow is right out, due to me waking up at about 11, and then flying around and stuff, so I'll work more on it sunday, and sub it (a revised v2, with more details) monday-ish.

ha, so cute
keep going with this please

i wanna see the squirrel's paw up above his eyes like he's peeking in

dude renfrue congrats on the shirt btw!

and SUBMIT THIS!!!!ASJDFHASDJH:ADH

haha maltz.

I'm going to sub v2 w/ a tree stump, once I draw one that doesn't look like what people sometimes refer to as "logs."

I'll draw the other arm in like that, rennyfrooo.

sweet! I are teh happyz

HOLY SHIT GUYZ



:D

i love the bartender

lol, I'm gonna color him in eventually.

Also, the html didn't work, but I subbed v2.5.

I also posted a blog about it. So. check it.

i love teh blogrsz

blerrghs