The shirts colour need not be blue, can be any other colours.

Bump!

hahah, cool idea + an awesome design.



do you mind taking a look at mine?

http://www.threadless.com/critique/58850/Pink_Elephant

so adorable! :)

Is the message/idea clear ?

How bout the matchbox ?

Placement ?

Comments anyone ?

i think the idea, is cool, i will add some shadows..

ok i will work on the shadows part



more comments please..

I think you could make the match boxes a little clearer. Like maybe re-do it at another angle so you can see more matches poking out. I got the idea right away, but it took me a second to get that it was a matchbox.



Other than that I really like the idea (very funny), and I think the shirt color suits it.



Please comment on mine when you have the time, I'd really appreciate it:

http://www.threadless.com/critique/58860/Rainy_Days

added shadow and matchsticks



the matchbox looks like post it..grr

is the shadow too round-ish ?

shadows look fine, the beak's color on the poster looks too much like the poster color. Otherwise looks great!



Vote/comment Please

Did some very minor changes..

I think it's really cute, but I think the bird on the painting needs some work - maybe the wings should be more precise, more "feathery"....

I think the matchbox is a lot better now, but what's been throwing me off is the part where you strike the matches. I like the texture you put on it, but the dots make me think that I'm looking at the bottom of the matchsticks.



As opposed to having dots on that part, make a couple scratch lines to show that matches have been struck there before. It might make it look more like a match box. Make it a little taller too.



Also as one last suggestion, I think it would be kinda funny if you had the bird running around on fire on the back of the shirt.

Thanks will work on those things mentioned.

will work on the bird on fire part..

Bump again

Oh yeah, matchbox looks a lot better now.



It just occurred to me, but have you tried making the poster of the phoenix bigger? That might help it a lot.

hahaha..this is cute.

Anyway, maybe you may add a tape or something that makes the poster stick to the wall so that it doesn't look like it's floating. :)

Bigger poster and added tapes

last:



(a) bigger placement on a tee

(b) the two matches that are out of the box are too close together and the shadow below it should not necessarily be a circle *although it's also my habit to put circles as shadows..hehe*

& it's ready for a sub :)

hurm i kept the shadows as circles so its less realistic.. or should i change them ?

the shadows wouldn't probably matter that much anyway. This is ready :)

whoops.. wrong colour for the tapes

ok this should be it..



any thing else ?

I'm not sure about the gray eyes, they don't really work with the other colors. You might be able to use the blue background instead of the gray. I also think you need more obvious flames on the phoenix and the ash pile.

Hurm i dont know how to achieve that flamely effect..



i used grey for the eyes cause its sorta neutral..

the colour of the shadows, lines and stuff will vary together with the shirts colour.

The head part looks kinda weird dont you think..



Please help..thanks

Very cool concept. I think your earlier versions were better as far as the flames go. For this design it looks better when the flames are a bit larger. Also, I think the phoenix could use a tail off to the right of the legs. Keep at it.



Please take a look at my design and leave feedback:

http://www.threadless.com/critique/58727/The_Cheerful_Street

funny



may you see mine:

http://www.threadless.com/critique/58262/Brieght_butterflies

http://www.threadless.com/critique/58215/Space_creature

cool idea, but i think you should try a different approach.

Hey.



what kind of brushes are you using?



I'm a beginner! :)



thanks.

A more simplified version of the flames..

Have the flames going up and off the outstretched wings as you have done with the flames under the tail

As in like V8, but tidy it up a lil ?

Version 8's doesn't look like flames. Something like that, though. yes..

I like the idea but I think the block of color from the paper on the wall is distracting. What if it was just a drawing on the wall that he made. I think larger flames going up would be interesting too.



Please take a look at my design and let me know what you think:

Never Ending Flight

More ?

Bump

Change the shadow under the box and add some under the poster. The down right corner of the poster seems a bit too long.

Keep it up! :)



Family Portrait

V11..ready for sub ?

awww! i like it, centered :)

If you are not gonna put anything els e in the wall, get rid of them and place the poster against a pole or a single wall.

You have a great idea going here but the little chicken needs some work.

How about:

Phoenix are made not born

for the title

walls as in those lines ? i drew those lines for perspective..not needed ?



Erm what sort of work for the lil chicken..



owh and its kinda like the chicken will burn itself cause its not born to be a pheonix..meaning like the dream will not come true sort of thing..

this is so cute and looks great in the middle of the shirt.... submit it please, its funny ireally like it..... :)

please comment:

http://www.threadless.com/critique/59080/lalala

...lol i no mine sucks so far but its my second crit. so wat evs u say will probs help!

Chick aspiring to be the Phoenix, haha! I love the contrast of the super cute and the dark side. Self-immolation, suicide by fire, rising from the dead, etc.



I think the design needs to be much bigger on the tee, not so teeny tiny and a classic center placement might work best. The perspective lines are OK but maybe they and the shadow colors could be a shade or two lighter. The chick's eye seems off, could be a bit higher, more focused on the picture. You might try the Phoenix poster background in a shade of the tee color with a bit darker shade/shadow behind it to better integrate the design with the tee. Anyway, very cool idea, should do well in scoring imo =]



As far as a title maybe, "Phoenix Fixation", "Chicken Rising", or my favorite, "Bar-B-Que" Haha!

wow nice input..

agree with the posters colour



lol and thanks for the titles, nice vocab



also, should i remove the corner placement option and just use center placing..i personally like center too

also, when submitting, put your design on a real shirt template, not that ugly shirt outline.

I personally like my tees to be seen, so I'm way against any designs that disappear into the natural wrinkles that occur when a tee hits the waist line.



You might also think about downloading the free flash template Manos generously put up for everyone's use here so you can feature your design close up on the first slide and see the tee placement on the second. I prefer the old template without the pop up buttons. Maybe just a luck kind of thing because I got printed twice using it, superstition I guess :p

thanks quister for the link, and thanks Manos for the template...



and yea ferfo will heed your advice

Agree with ferfo, check these out tee models from NiNTHWHEEL and threadless tee pool on line

Hurm hows the colour? I've max out my 8 colours...



Also i tried doing this in flash, but the file ended up too big

How do i reduce the size ?

Got it working..so now how does it look



Is the new poster background ok ? Too dark? Too light?

yea,

maybe the poster should be a bit darker?

Sort of between the blue that you've got and navy??

anywayz, nice job it's awesome!



mind takin' a look @ mine??

http://www.threadless.com/critique/59088/Soaring

It's looking great, but I liked it better when the poster was that cream yellow kind of colour. Now it just kind of blends in with the t-shirt, which will look bad from a distance.



I say switch back to the old poster colour, and if you need to cut down on a colour -- get rid of the medium grey you're using for the eyes. I don't see that being used anywhere else important, and you can replace the grey with the dark blue you're using.



I like the brown on top of the matchbox though, that brought it out more.

Hurm so now there are two options

1) darker poster

2) change back to the previous versions colour (yellow)

I'm not sure how fast one can really understand that the bird in the poster is a pheonix. I'd expect it to be much more flamed.



Check mine out?

Cat's Nightmare

Thanks!

ok now which colour should i use....please please help



would like to finalise this..



many thanks

Slide 2 ftw!

Still wanna see a shadow under the poster. :)

yeah this design is cute and bad, in a good way though, i like that ii can get the joke with mininal effort and i thing you r illustrating is just fine the way it is. im not going to shower you with ideas here because i think that you pretty much have the nuts here, so the t shirt color will be the hardest part. you should think aboutif you want the image seperate, meaning the room is a diferent color than the t shirt or if you want it to match, which imo would be your best bet, id go with the baby blue here, but dont take my word for it, wait for more responses before yousub.

oh and maybe put some ashes in the phoenix pile

scratch marks: credit goes to homemadeheroes



i'll try out the shadow and the ash part..

This is a really cool design, id totally wear it.

Keep up the cool designs and goodluck.

Check my critique out. http://tinyurl.com/ybuv5k8

Design and placement..i didnt know how to change the buttons name..new to flash presentation



But this should be it..the ash pile didnt turn out well so i left it..added shadow to the poster

so cute i love it maybe try changing the circle shadows so they fit the shape thats casting the shadow



please vote

http://www.threadless.com/submission/247753/Starting_Early

Submitting this using the same title i guess, makes it easier to find..



And Happy New Year people..

Submit it! Love it!

Check Mine, Please:

Zero Killed

StarSmile

This looks good to me. My only suggestion would be to change the match box shadow. The chick shadow doesn't bother me because of the giant circle head but the box shouldn't have an oval shadow.





Thanks for your comments on my design here's the latest version:

The NeverEnding Flight