Hi! I need your help, I have this idea in my head but I don't know how to do it for a tee design... I made this one, this is my basically idea, the game of the shoot duck but this time is the duck who shoot and take his revenge, is a duck a little crazy but he has been shooted for a long time jje



so how you would improve the design??



thanks ^^

Wow this is a really great idea!!!



A way you could have it connect more that the duck wants revenge would be if you made the non-crazy ducks into little people targets instead.. so it was like the duck with the gun, snuck into the line and was hunting the other "ducks" (now people)



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I will consider, perhaps would be good, I'll try



thanks!!



anymore ideas?? :P

great start. Concept is very good. I'd make the game scene more 3dish. Add some depth and maybe some shadows and shadings. I'll be watching for the new versions.

This is the new version thanks to a coment I realise that would be a good idea made this, just a little macabre ^^



what do you think?? :D

waaay better!

thanks!! I think I like more like this but I would know how can improve it more :P

I think it's a bit too.. "square" of a frame. Maybe make the top of the booth have some swirly decor on the corners to make it a bit more interesting of a frame?

Also, it looks like the duck is on the same level as the people - try to bring him to the foreground a bit more... maybe on a stool?

maybe a different colour to the red so that the blood splatters will show up more easily

I think changing the red would work too, but maybe the other red, not the blood.

thanks for all the coment you are helping me so much ^^ I'm preparing another version :D

very creative, i really like it the way it is!

What about this version? I added more details like the baloons, more decoration.. and also the duck is more visible...



I add the blood in the neck of the tee or remove it??



thanks for the help! I like how this is turning on ^^

it makes more sense now with the duck on the stool. great work!

oh and i like the blood on the neck, it adds to the whole idea

I think you got it. i laughed right away and then I notice the layout and was glad to see more of the story around the neck. Great Job!



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I think you need to change the color of the "human" text it's rather hard to read..

And I like the idea of the blood around the neck, but I don't think I would wear it..

The Idea is good though as well as the illustration :)

I agree with Have. Maybe white colour on the black text. The blood around the neck is fun and well made, but it turns the shirt into a halloween-only.



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thank you for you comments!

this is too serious for my taste, however if I were to choose, I vote for the second version.

I would change the name to: The revenge of the sitting duck.

This is gruesome haha. But it made me laugh. I do kindof agree with Fonus that the Blood around the neck, although well done, pushes it a little too far for me to want to wear it consistently. Other than that its a great design, I like it!

lol looks great, time for revenge huh ;)



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Ok, what do you think now? the placement, the letters in white, the size... ?¿



any other tips¿?



thanks!!

lol, pretty gruesome, i think you need the letters to have a more contrasting background

if you make the curtain shadows bigger and wider it will add more depth to design. Right now the shelf and curtain have the same shadow size so it looks flat. I hope it helps you.

I think its too big on the shirt. I would shrink it to half the width of the T (approximately). Good luck.

ha! I agree. a bit too big, but other than that, good to go.

Perhaps try blue paint for the word "human"



Blue always contrasts nicely with yellow..



Thanks for you help with mine!

This is a cute idea. I agree with RoeeSch, think it's a bit too wide on a shirt. And maybe the green colour for the background could be darker for more contrast with the human heads.

And personally I'd prefer the balloons to not be there, but i think that's up to you.



Anyway thanks for your critique on Quit Whyning :)

well I like this version much more... just with some details.



what do you think now? with the placement and the design in general??


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morbid...but good! The second human head...it looks like their hair is REALLY tall? Maybe scoot it down a big

Try apply in Light Blue tee.

I like this placement. Great improvement from the old one.

very nice idea:D

maybe you could try bright colours for improving this version.

Funny. Maybe turn one of the heads at a different angle (they look a little copy pasted). Also, I really like the backdrop of version 1, but maybe adding it back in would make it too busy. Lastly, I always remembered this game as "duck shoot" rather than "shoot duck," I could be wrong though.

Much better! Glad to see my input helped. I don't know how I feel about the text though... if anything it would be called "Duck shoot" not "Shoot duck". I'd personally take it out altogether. Doesn't add any meaning. Try giving the balloons a bit of shading?

I'd also say that I don't care for any of those color tees.

I like this! Very cool, creative, original idea

haha, it's pretty cool! I really like that bloody handprint. I don't know about the middle guys hair though, it looks like mickey mouse

thanks for all your coments ^^ you are helping so much :D I will change a little the middle head, try to be a girl but I think that doesn't really seems that xDDD



I will retouch the ballons a little.. I put shoot duck in the design because when u goo to play this game There is a signpost indicating it..



anyway, thanks to all and I will upload a new version soon ^^

I really like this. I like the darker colors that you have gone with.

If you get a chance please critique my design. :)



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This is very nice, but shouldn't the sign say "duck shoot" (and changed to "human shoot")?



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Thanks!

..if you won't go with blue text, then white is definitely better than black..



Version 4 is up!!

This is really getting close to where it should be,

but I still need you help!

Throw a critique my way.

:)

Maybe try it on a mustard color?

redxwhite stripes can be wider, it kills my eyes like this hehehe. And make the duck bigger and put it a bit front. Maybe add more stroke to duck he's lost in the colors. Yeah like some people mentioned turn the heads in different directions. That's all some minor changes and it's good to go!

"Funny. Maybe turn one of the heads at a different angle (they look a little copy pasted)."



i agree and I dont like the white outline on the body part and the duck. Try it gray!

I really like this shirt! It's a hilarious idea and done really well....



One thing I'd like, is to change the color of "Human" at the top to a color that stands out more (maybe green? or add another color?)



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It's looking good. I agree about changing the angles of the heads and the colour of the tee. Love the hand print. Nice touch.

thanks for all the advice, I'll do a better version with all this tips ^^

hi! I made some changes, do you like more now??



notice that the balloons seems to have face, I think would be funny xDDD



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coool duck is better better with black outline. I think it's good to go sam! Nice job!. For tee color i think it's best to use inside color of the shooting place. Good luck!

Nice design and idea, though I would lose the title ("duck/human shoot") - no need to spoon-feed the joke.

thanks for all!! I think I will do another version and then submit ^^

yeah i agree with JCMaziu,make all outlines in black..

great concept.go for it



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I liked the humans color, and their heads at the same angle more in the previous version.. but the balloon highlights have been a nice touch :)





..I'm about ready to sub my critique help me pick which option and layout you like the best!!

cute ;D

Hi again! this is the last version I think ^^ just some changes, 3 tee colors.



Hope u like it!! :D

He looks like he is giggling, great!

yep, he has a devil laugh xD

grcias JCMaziu! ^^ le dispararon una vez en el ojo y se quedó tuerto xD



thanks all! :D

i like it, very funky! the balck shirt works best for me ;-)



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thanks again!! ^^



tomorrow I will upload

upload!upload!upload!

lol looks great!! submit!! :)



could you check out my design?

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:D gonna submit now ^^ just a little retouch

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