Hello All,
This critique is for the threadless Travel contest.
I hope you like it and the concept is understable.
Can you please help me with your critiques and suggestions (esp. on the clouds).
Thanks in advance!!

Where would you put the guy in the corner relative to the T-shirt design?

I would put him in the bottom part of the tshirt.
I was thinking of a wrap around design, with the hill going on the back of the TShirt

Cool concept. Not sure about the color of the sky. I don't think it has to be blue necessarily, but it looks kind of like smog. If you do a wrap around you should change the color so its clear that its sky without the hill.

I could use some help:

http://www.threadless.com/critique/55953/Real_Vampires_Have_Fangs

Love your style! I'd be keen to see it on a shirt to see how it places. The only thing is I agree with jmg14. The colour of the sky feels a bit "dirty" maybe play around with some combos to make it feel a bit fresher.

Thanks for the comments!
When you're talking about the sky, do you mean the world map clouds or the bckgd I put in brown? Because I did not intend on using any colour to figure out the sky, I was think ing of using the TShirt colour.

Very cute idea. I wouldn't change anything except maybe the sky color, like the others said.

Where would the placement be?
Nice idea.
I wouldn't wear it, but my little nephew would

nice i think it needs sum work maybe lessen the clouds.
plz check mine http://www.threadless.com/profile/997187/b12345/critiques

Lovely. Put on a tee and Submit it ;D

It the sky will be the color of the tee, maybe try gold or light blue. Purple might also work if you want a sunset look.

Agree with the people...the sky it's a little messy..right?
Apart of this...i should rework the clouds...give it other style...of course it's only my opinion.
Let us see it in a template.

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Thanks.

Hello!
I worked on my design and here is the new version:
I worked on clouds, changed the sky colour and added flowers on the hill.
What do you think of it? Is it better than the previous version?
Thanks for your critiques and if you have any advice on how I could improve it, just let me know!

I think you'll experience a problem with the placenment of the hill/grass maybe it should be centered..

OK, I see what you mean, I will try it in the next version...I wanted to try the placement on the tshirt anyway, so will see how it works...
Any other advices??

Yes much better

Much better than V1, but I really need to see the placement to see how well it works on a tee.

Here is a presentation showing three different options for the design. The first two options only differ by the colour of the TShirt and the last one show a different placement.
Which one do you prefer? Thanks in advance?

any advices?

Wow....great improvement!!!

I like much more those clouds rather than v1. And the change on the ground is a good idea for this placement.

Very goo work.

Oh sorry....i wasn't clear...i was talking about option 2.

This is much better at the bottom.

Can you please check out my babies -

http://www.threadless.com/critique/56462/G_raffes

http://www.threadless.com/critique/56470/Henry_the_80_s

http://www.threadless.com/critique/56574/Art_school

I like option 1 best

Option 2.

http://www.threadless.com/critique/56541/iThink

thank you!!
any other advice?? it seems that option 3 is out of the contest...

I think one of the options could be on a blue tee for the sky... right now i'm diggin option 1 most.

These shirt colors don't work for me, but otherwise looking good. If you go with the hill in the middle (option1-2) maybe turn the guys head a bit up so it looks like he is looking at the clouds? His eye line looks a bit off to me, maybe its just me though.

Can you take a look at mine:

http://www.threadless.com/critique/55953/Real_Vampires_Have_Fangs

I tried on a blue shirt, but it was a bit too flashy...
My preference was for option 1

Any other advices before I submit the file I want to push into the contest to your critiques?

I like option 2. Nice design, good luck.
Care to critique mine: link ?

hey i looked at your older versions, and yea this current one is definitely better. i like it. the clouds are cleaner and the character placement is much better too. reminds me of a children's storybook. cool. :)

OK thanks for the advices...it seems that v2 is having more votes.
Do you think that in a 3 slides presentation, I should put:
-The design, its placement on a shirt, a close-up
-The design, one shirt colour option, another shirt colour option?

I like the brown sky a lot.
But having several options in a submission might appeal to more people.


I would love your opinion: Banana-skateboard accident

really nice idea. I think the design/placement/close up is the best way to present your slides.

crit me? http://www.threadless.com/critique/56740/TEAm_work

On a three slide layout, I'd suggest Design, close-up and on a model... in whatever order you feel right.

Shadow of a Saint

hey good job I actually like version three! The layout is much more interesting to me. To make it even better, you could extend the hill out a little bit and maybe make the clouds extend of the edge of the shirt.

take a look at mine

i like option 3 but i like the dark gray sky better.

Option 3 layout looks cool!

If you can, could you please check out
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brilliant! Option 3, definitely.

if you could take a look at mine?
November Equation

Hi!
Here is the presentation I planned to submit.
What do you think of it? Any last modifications to perform before it's ready?
Thank you!

I prefer placement 2 personally, nice design.

I'm up for scoring!

I thought I would let the other option in the submitted design.

anyone before I sub?

this is adorable!!

placement 2 is cool

I like the color in version 2 but please try again about placement. Check this link to see the printed designs.
We can learn a lot from them ;D
Printed Designs

thank you...and is it all right to call this design "head in clouds"??

or is it "head in the clouds"?

head in the clouds is fine,is this the name for your design?

Yes I was thinking of it, if it's alright as I'm not sure it works in english.

head in the clouds is grammatically correct but i dont think it s completely fit with your design, i dont know..

Does it mean someone who is always dreaming?? because it is what it means in my language.

i dont think so,head's meaning is the part of body,u mean mind,and i dont think that head refers to mind in this case,by the way which country are you from?

Allright, the expression "to have his head on the clouds does not exist"?
(I'm from France)

i guess so even i m not hundred percent sure, dreamin of a journey could help u little i guess,very good idea and design any way..

really love your design, and I'd give you a $5. Good luck.

if you have time.
http://www.threadless.com/submission/242202/Dare_to_Dream/showmore,designs

thank you for the elp on the title anyway!

"Head in the clouds" does mean a dreamer, but its often used is a bad way. It is someone who dreams but does nothing else. It can mean lazy, unmotivated, ect. At least it does in America. I hope that helps.

It can mean many things..you can never know...you can only assume.

Hey this is pretty cool! Well done.

Would you mind critiquing mine?
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OK Thanks guys, I will submit it under the name "Dreaming of a journey", so a special thank u to diogene for this title!

cool!
maybe little plain could be flying thru Atlantic ocean?
I need your comments

little plain PLANE :)

Hey, you know that I first tried it with a plane, but it wa not cool. I thought it disturbed the whole idea.

u'r welcome donlope