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This is a little bit of a rework of a design of mine. Trying to fit it on the front of a shirt and see how it works.
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Elyison on Nov 06 '09
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lizsmithson on Nov 07 '09
I love this. Submit. Sorry this is so short. But I have nothing to add.
Critique Ours? The Tooth Fairy: What Really Happened To Your Baby Teeth |
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sjem on Nov 07 '09
Awesome - should the toothpaste creature have some highlights like the tube ?
Could you critique my latest design ? |
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sethmcomber on Nov 07 '09
Love it! The curve in the toothpaste in the creature's neck looks a bit odd - it doesn't quite match the swirly curves of the rest of the toothpaste. Maybe have it double back on itself once more. I agree that highlights on the creature and paste might work too. These colors work well.
Take a look at mine? |
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Thanks for the input. The odd bit at the neck area was probably because the original design went over the shoulder at that point. I'll have to fix it. I like the idea of making it double back one more time.
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lizsmithson on Nov 08 '09
Good catch.
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R Thull on Nov 08 '09
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Thanks
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hahaha! That would be a cool effect. Perhaps I'll consider that after I fix a few other things.
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iamalaayy on Nov 24 '09
that blue circle in his mouth is really bugging me, maybe coloring that it to match the grey of his mouth :) then it will be perfect!
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MariaSurducan on Nov 24 '09
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ok iamalaayy: I'll fix that for you. ;)
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MariaSurducan on Nov 24 '09
nooooo, I love his little tongue :P
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MariaSurducan on Nov 24 '09
If you want to go nitpicking, fix the contour line so that it's relatively equal all the way around. That is, if you have a lot of time on your hands....
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The other part I have never been 100% sure on was the "and Spit!" part. Does it make sense? Is is funny? Is it offensive? Should it be some other 2 to 3 word thing? anything?
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ellygeh on Nov 24 '09
Very cool hahaha! Love the monster's face!! One thing I would add though, is the rest of the tube of the toothpaste, going to the side of the shirt?? That's it for me, then it's ready to go!! Really cool idea!!
Would be so kind to take a look at my design as well?? I'd appreciate it !! |
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Did some minor edits and reworked in an additional twist of the toothpaste. I thought about changing out the "and Spit" for "Hello" so I included that speech bubble down in the left hand corner.
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hoorayforblobs on Dec 11 '09
"Hello" is awesome, I'm definitely missing the joke with the "and spit" but it's a pretty sick shirt even when it doesn't make any sense
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Maphia Phamily on Dec 11 '09
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drailskid on Dec 11 '09
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I had a feeling I should have just gone with "Hello" for this version to see how it worked. I'll try and swap it out for the next version.
I probably need to make the chunky white fade happening on the tube be more obvious on the mock up because it is pretty chunky in my file. |
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HoopVaas on Dec 11 '09
haha, it's very funny... i like it...
du you want to take a look at my design... http://www.threadless.com/critique/58131/FastBeetle |
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Updated with "Hello" as the main speech bubble. Did a few minor edit to the rest of it and fixed the halftone fade on the Tube.
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SoulieBaby on Dec 12 '09
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zoso1 on Dec 12 '09
i like it! the only thing that bothers me is that the black lines on the letters abruptly stop in the halftone gradient. perhaps if you did a similar effect to the black lines so it will fade away with the white better.
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DAMG0014 on Dec 12 '09
I personally liked the "and spit" better, it's a lot less random than "hello." How about "don't swallow"? I pretty sure it's universally known that it's bad to swallow toothpaste.
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I think I'll stick with "hello"
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ChrisDB on Dec 13 '09
looks good! how bout 'mmmmintyyy!!' in the speech bubble?
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RukmaPratista on Dec 13 '09
^ Hihihi, 'mmmmintyyy!!' ?
Whatever the text, this is a nice drawing and concept. I like it. |
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AshiNater on Dec 13 '09
This is great! Good work! I say submit this!
And while you're at it, critique my design? :) http://www.threadless.com/critique/58303/The_Art_of_Organics |
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ReneeDelMonaco on Dec 14 '09
haha...awesome design...like the placement and feel of it. Submit this.
also what do u think of mine http://www.threadless.com/critique/58300/cat_errrrr_pillar |
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I'm think I might just call this one done. Unless there is more feedback...
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hotspot on Dec 14 '09
hihi funny, i like it., i agree the 'and spit' or 'downt swallow' gives it that little bit more than 'hello'
Would love to hear your comment on my Skully Hearts design, Thanks! |
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DAMG0014 on Dec 14 '09
Hey if you stick with "hello," you wouldn't mind if made a toothpaste related design with the "...and spit, don't swallow" innuendo, would yah?
The kids love all things sex related. |
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I probably would but I can't stop you.
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pecazy on Dec 14 '09
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Changed the Presentation to include both text options.
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Nice. You could even have it saying 'smile' or 'open wide'?
If you have time I'd really appreciate a vote on my collab with sonmi |
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Good luck with it :)
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