THIS IS AN UNFINISHED DESIGN!



I wanted to upload this before taking the time to finish it to get some initial reactions. Any and all criticisms are greatly appreciated.



The finished design will have all of the pegs put in, like the L in "Original", and I'm also planning on placing some loose pegs on the ground next to the toy.



As far as peg color is concerned, I was considering each letter being a solid color with diagonal stripes of one color throughout the letters.



Also, should I draw on the electrical cord plugged into an outlet on the floor.



Thanks!



p.s. All votes of "Don't Submit" without written comments or criticism will be disregarded.

I like the creme color with the green olive shirt. Looks great with the perspective too. maybe offset the design a bit? I like it centered but if it was a little bit offset I think the perspective would look much better than it is centered.

That's a pretty steep angle you have there. I feel compelled to want to turn it to face me a little more but then I guess you wouldn't be able to make out the heads of the pegs as well as you can at the moment.



I agree with Mark that if you move it off centre slightly it will help compensate the perspective, maybe you could then bring in the cord plugged into the outlet to the side of it to help balance the composition of the t-shirt as a whole.



I also feel that the illustration needs reducing a bit and would also look better positioned slightly higher.



http://www.threadless.com/critique/54960/Soda_Pop_City

I think you need to tilt the right side down so that the angle isn't so extreme. The sharp diagonal isn't sitting right on a shirt.



Also, when you are doing the pegs try throwing some other colors in in places to add some interest.



Finally, is this legal? It is a licensed toy, isnt' it?

As far as the legality of it, I think that, as long as I don't use the name, I'm in the clear. I mean, people don't get sued for putting Rubix cubes on shirts...do they?...



If it's illegal, Threadless won't accept it into the voting.



Looking at the design more now, I think that the pegs are a bit nubby. I'll lengthen them on the next pass. I'll also do some fun designs around the words to liven things up.

looks good but its a bit hard to read. maybe if it was facing us a bit more. really neat design



cehck mine?

http://www.threadless.com/critique/54338/I_only_date

Alrighty, I've tweaked the design a bit. Let me know what you guys think of the color selection and the general design.



One last touch that I'll be adding to the final presentation is to show that the pegs in the Lite-Brite GLOW IN THE DARK!

Really nice design. Though it doesn't seem to go well on the shirt as its placed right now. Maybe changing its size and position might help. Maybe some more background will help as well. Good luck.

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Maybe some shade.

Hello, I like the idea but I think you should change the prespective to see the screen better. Maybe change the color of the shirt to make it more cheerful, since the idea is funny. Good luck.

It's a little bit too dark and too hard to get the words. Have the light come from a different angle, or turn the whole thing.

Also I think the Tee's color isn't going well with the design.

Good luck!



check my sub? http://www.threadless.com/submission/237342/Sea_Sky

Before endeavor in the process of redrawing the whole thing, I changed the design of the peg symbols a little to see if that takes care of problem. I'm also trying it on a new color.



Let me know if I still need to redraw the Lite-Brite itself and if the T-shirt color is better.

Teehee, thats way to cute! Man, I miss my Lite-Brite.

The light blue tee is a definate improvment, but there still seems something off to me. I can't quite figure what it is. Perhaps moving the placement on the shirt? I'm not sure, but I do like it. Seems like a very original idea to me.

If I was going to make changes, I might make it feel a little livelier. All the straight lines of uniform thickness make it look generic. I'd vary the line weight a bit, maybe add some reflections/shadows, and try to balance the composition some. It seems like there is a lot space above the word "art."

Cool idea! The pixel screen design and t-shirt color are much better than previous versions. The angle of the lite brite seems a little too extreme. Maybe a slight clockwise rotation would be enough to make it look more balanced.

mayb a shadow would help

comment on mine please!!!

The perfect straight lines of all the same width are throwing it off for me. It looks too computer generated for me taste. Varied line weight would help, and some shadows. It feels unbalanced with the way it's angled. The A and R in Art are too squished too. What if you just had these pegs glowing on a black background, without the lite-brite box? If you left some pegs lying around I think the message would still be clear.

Cool. Shaddow definately and possibly shirt color change...



love the old school lite bright tho!

put more in the floor.. and yes try to change the shirt color..



CHECK MINE OUT!!!

http://www.threadless.com/critique/49359/Bob_Marley_amp_Frank_Wilson#v4

Alrighty, I've adjusted the angle on the box and added some shading and some more pegs in front. I've also tweaked the peg art (repositioning the flower and the A in Art and adding a butterfly).



Any other things that need to change before I start working on the glow-in-the-dark feature?



p.s. All votes of "Don't Submit" without written comments or criticism will be disregarded.

Thanks for your feedback Mr. Jotz! Big Spoon and Little Spoon as a concept probably isn't clear enough from the outset, but I'm trying to think of a way to make it clear

Sorry I probably should have finished my comment about your idea! I love the concept, and the improvements since V1 are great. Look forward to seeing the finished design

Realy cool) i like it, but why design on placement looks blacker than itself?



Make shadow not like an oval gradient, make it more realistic. OR just delete it.

very good, i'd watch the perspective on the pegs sitting on the ground. some of them look like they're floating. for example that orange one dead center of the group, i don't think it would sit like that. oh and i do leave comments, i just don't like spamming links and the bump thing seems to work perfectly fine.

Am Crew, the reason that it looks darker in the smaller version is the same reason that half-tones look more solid from further away. If the design were even smaller, all you would see is the black, but such would not be the case in real life. Also, I'll fiddle with the shadow on the ground.



cigammon, I'll fiddle around with the pegs on the ground to make them sit better for perspective. Also, I only leave a link if I leave a constructive comment. I consider "I like it. CHECK OUT MINE!" to be spamming. Though I did it too when I started submitting critiques, bumping seems a little cheap to me now; it's like only taking from the "Take a Penny, Leave a Penny" tray.

Great idea. Nice work. I'd maybe experiment with some different perspectives on the light bright. But, the idea is very strong.





Feedback is always appreciated:

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Idea!

Try a different color mix for the 'pixels', and maybe using one color for the "P' & "A". But I like the idea. Cheers!

needs work man

Haha

Great I remember those things ^^,

You might wanna try some foreshorting in the litle things(don't know thier name) by make some of them bigger on the fore ground and use it as well to lead the eye back there.

Because at the moment my eyes keep going to those things in the front in stead of the pixel art.

it looks interesting...but dont think the blue shirt is the ideal for the design

interesting, check mine ?http://www.threadless.com/critique/55638/The_Abstract

I really like the idea - brilliant.



One thing I would say is that the color choice could be a little more dynamic - and it's a little busy. I think there could be fewer little bulbs in front of the design and a little less on the design, even make the bulbs in the design bigger so you could use fewer of them. You're on the right track though, it's a genius idea :)

Changes made:



* Peg colors have been fiddled with

* Shadow under the Lite-Brite has been fixed

* Pegs in front of the Lite-Brite have been moved around

* Glow in the dark added

* Shirt color changed



So...sub-worthy yet?

Changes made:



* Peg colors have been fiddled with

* Shadow under the Lite-Brite has been fixed

* Pegs in front of the Lite-Brite have been moved around

* Glow in the dark added (After reviewing the special printing rules, I noticed that "Super Glow" only comes in one color.)

* Shirt color changed



So...sub-worthy yet?

now its well balanced:)

plz critique on my new designs

Cool idea, and I like the style and tone of it. The only thing I would change is maybe making the whole thing a little brighter.

i really like this concept, and i get what you're trying to do with the butterfly and flower. But i think you would appeal to a larger audience and it would work with the glow better if you did not have the butterfly and flower and focused more on the design of the text and legibility.

I agree ^ it could be much better without the butterfly and flower. Also, the colours need work.

awesome idea! but yeah, readability is a bit tough, and it might be better to just get rid of the butterfly and definitely the flower. maybe you could put something really simple in like a smiley face. looks cool!

Very cool but maybe you could make the whole image bigger maybe?? I personally think it's too small and what what that be if you can't read it in the dark, right??

Critique mine??

Smile!!

I think the pegs being a more simple design on the light bright board would be a better sell for a shirt. People would buy it based on the novelty and nestalgia of a light bright board, and trying to spell out something people can't relate too would be a turn off.

Before changing the text and such too drastically, I wanted to try out just taking the leaves on the flower away. Does that clear things up enough in the glow-in-the-dark feature, or does the design still need to simplify before it's sub-worthy?



A note about the colors: I'm using a full 8 colors in this design as is, which is why there's no red in the art. The present colors are all colors used in Lite-Brite art.



Please let me know what you guys think!

p.s. Any votes of "Don't Submit" without explanation will be disregarded.

lol on your last comment. I really really like it. I know that this comment sucks, but I think it's ready to be subbed.

PS I am the one who is now clicking "Submit this" lol