hi, just started with this lavalamp :-)



still needs to do a lot of shading and coloring...

but what do you think so far?

this is really good, love the idea and the red really stands out

will you check out mine please :)

Haha, awesome! I think that the lack of shading gives this a blueprintish look, but the trees don't fit in as well.



I also love the font, it's the first time I've seen an implementation of Arial and liked it. ~maybe~ make it a monospaced sans serif font, but IDK how that would look.

cool idea

really nice idea! personally I would remove the writings and the other lamps, it could be more iconic...

haha. cool. i like the writing but you need to drop the trees or change them...maybe instead of trees try to illustrate the surface a little. great work!

Great illo. I also like the writing. I do agree with the suggestion about the trees. I actually didn't realize they were trees initially.



Please let me know what you think of Crime of the Centurion

This looks perfect for threadless, something makes me hesitate though, and I think it's the text. Either less text or no text would make this perfect.

ok, i'll try to enhance the surface a bit and change the trees into proper trees.

(also need to add shading and stuff)

ok, i've worked on it some more and changed the trees and added some glow & shades.

still need to work on the colors and the earth layers...

Ever think about removing the text and leaving just he image...looks good.

the colors need work. They just don't appeal to me right now.

yeah, i know txt doesn't do very well with tshirt designs. but this one is set up like a proper info graphic, where txt is quite needed you know... i'll work on the graphic a little further and think the txt issue over.

i'll try to show the next version version without the txt.. see what you guys think :-)

Cool idea! Can you put it on a tee - Im thinkin the text might need to be larger ( depending on the shirt colour) and if you colour the trees and the ground I reckon it would have a bit more visual impact. Good Luck!

Can you crit mine?

http://www.threadless.com/critique/50801?Nerds_of_a_Feather

new shirt color to make the design pop out more...

also experimented a bit by adding some halftones in the earthlayers (on the left)



what do you think?

this is really awesome, dude! i'm not sure about the text though...think it's not really necessary. and since people here don't like text...tecnically everything's perfect imo.

really nice ;)



Pls check out mine, too

I agree with ^, the text isn't doing anything for the shirt so it would look better without it

I like the text, it makes the design looking like real scheme. Maybe you could try to talk about that lamp like if it was a real natural phenomenon, I mean, not mentioning it is a lamp. Nice illustration.



please critique mine:

http://www.threadless.com/critique/53962/Super_arrested

text can stay or go, really





it might be to hard to read now, though

If you want to keep the text I'd make it bigger and simpler, and don't talk about the fact that it is a lamp, as Guijuled said. The new colours look great.

If you have time please leave a comment

classic mtths. cant wait to vote on it



:)

I think the idea is awesome!

try to make the shadow of the lamp more visible.

take a look at mine

This is great, i think the text is necessary in this case though you could definitely cut back on some of it. The spacing looks a bit odd between the words as well. So for all the naysayers you could always add a (small) option with no text. Looks nice on this brown earth tone.

ok, new version to see how you all react to the no-text slide....



(also changed the txt font to get rid of the large spaces)

(i rather keep the txt :-)

(...any ideas to name some extra parts of the design?)

Cool idea & illo

Also I like the text.

better with text!! neat concept :)

Ha! I'd wear it.

any more ideas or remarks?

When I see it like this I like the text. It looks empty without it.

Please leave me a comment.

It's difficult, because I really like the diagram style, but it also looks really nice and crisp just on its own as an illustration



Either way its great!

I like it with the text.

Submit this as is!



If you have a moment please check out my Loves Geeks design.

i enjoyed version three better. I think its a glow affect with version four im not a fan of

I say yes on the text :)



Please Crit Mine Too

http://www.threadless.com/critique/54021/Joker

I think this works better with text

brilliant, btw

it is done, sub it

yep definitely with text, however the halftoning seems quite awkward here, wonder if its possible to tone it down some.

txt it is then :-)

great!

Good work, guy. Perfect Tee choice too. Submit!



Stop Pink Eye

something feels off with all the tree shadows. They look too cut and paste right now. Shouldn't the closer tree shadows be shorter than the farther ones. The trunk part of the shadows on the closer trees would be shorter. That would give you some variation to them.

reworked a lot of small details like glow, surface grass, shine on lamp, tree shadows, linethickness, magma, uneven groundlines and more halftones in the groundlayers...



thanks for all previous comments,

got any more of them?

This is so pimp. Lovin' it. Great colors, quirky idea, solid artwork. Very cool. Sub it. It'll probably do well. Best of luck!



Please comment on my sub when you have a minute:

"The Muse 3." Thanks! :)

Ok now the shadows feel better to me. The look less cut and paste.

@bortwein,

yeah, thanks, it's a small change....but it works really well

I think this is great. Awesome idea, great execution. The single problem I'm having is that the light cast onto the trees is white, whereas the lava lamp is orange. I've never owned a lava lamp, so I don't know if they give off a colored glow or if the color is negligible. Also, the higher of the two trees directly to the left of the lamp looks very flat to me. I'm not really sure that's an issue though.

I definitely meant directly to the right of the lamp.

wow great concept. I love the lava lamp. I like what you did with the glow and shadows. Sub this. :)



http://www.threadless.com/critique/54043/One_summer

@frame,

you're right about the glow of the lamp.. it def should give an orange glow on the trees.

i don't own a lavalamp either, but i suppose it isn't spreading just white light... good point!

got anyone a suggestion to change or add some text lines or title?

(needed?)

This is awesome!! but if I was you I would integrate actual volcano terms. like the magma pocket and throat and crater and so. just a thought! looking forward to seeing this printed someday!

fuckin hell, epic! you cold use volcano terminology. you could do the shading to have an orange glow but i dont think it's needed really! great work!



crit my beard one if you can!

i've already clicked submit this because i think you could and it would be awesome.

i also think you've got some great suggestions above though - orange glow from the lamp, more volcanic like terminology etc

this serisouly rocks though

spectacular execution!

thanx all, great comments!

i'm working on some volcano terminology, like JupiterUnderground suggested.

also added some orange glow on the trees, gives them the warm feel it needed



anyone thinks the title needs to change?

it's a bit boring, but it it what it is....

very cool

yeah this could go as is, it would be neat to give the type of volcano almost a dictionary definition for its type, similar to how they do it for all the types of volcanoes on the wikipedia page for volcanoes http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Volcano to do this with the text snippets as labels might make it feel more diagram and less powerpoint, though this is nitpicking.



this all may be too much though, looks great.

haha this is great love it. to me it's ready for voting and making print



please critique my brainwave

This is sweet. Add the orange glow and I'd say you're good to go!



Feedback for mine?

ok, added some extra volcano terminology and also made the glow on the trees more orange



final version :-)

ready to sub i guess...

Does the glass on the lamp need some highlights help it look more glass like? example

Cool. Sub.

Haha, I love your idea. Submit it for sure.



Take a look at mine and let me know what you think:

http://www.threadless.com/critique/52855/Always_knock_first#v3

Simply awesome.

Damn son, good shit! $5. Any ideas for mine?

man this is excellent!

the idea, the drawing, everyhting.

nothing to add.

mine?

http://www.threadless.com/critique/54248/World_s_Most_Fierce_Bullet

@bortwein,

tried to add such a shine to the glass earlier, but it didn't work out that good.

i might add some really small shiny lines on the glass to make it more glass like.

I think its ready!

A classic threadless design :)

I love ideas like this! Submit for sure!



Comments on mine?

very cool

haha i love this.. kind of stuff i'd wear..



submit for sure..!



comment on mine if you can:

CHESHIRE

Def Sub! Amazing



Check mine?

http://www.threadless.com/critique/54338/I_only_date

Love it.



Glow in the dark ink perhaps?



Help me out?

werd!

Neat!

Wow this is awesome

a good suggestion from bortwein to add some shine to the glass, to make it more glass-like.

gonna sub it tomorrow, gotta go now!

it's pending approval, now we wait...

YEAH!, it's up for voting

Dude this design is awesome.

Could you give mine a look?



http://threadless.com/?from=gman013

this is an awesome design and concept. i'd sport this shirt.



check out one of my designs if you get a chance.

Clicketh

only two more days to vote for my Lavalamp :-)

excelent stuff!



please critique mine.

Death rope!

by b12345

wooohooo! got myself an awesome 3,26/5,00 score!



thanks everyone who voted :-)