8 color print - I'm debating on whether or not i should have the characters on the back with the writing on the front or vice-versa...



as of now, the black (which is used for the lines and background) would have to be negative space in the image so its not used for ink (otherwise it would be 9 colors)....thats part of the reason i think the shirt would be best in black aside from also adding contrast.

The images themselves are cool, but in my opinion, I think the 'Body builder' text could look cool in some really bizzare colours like greens, pinks, purples..maybe even yellow...it would have to be the right tones to work though...just thought it could add some kookiness to the mad scientist and extra personality to the design. Great effort anyhow! feel free to crit my works.

Nice illustrations. I like the text (would change one of the 'B'). Interested in seeing placement options.



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might be cool to add a touch of colours to the figures? would tie the text in really well :)



check out mine?

http://www.threadless.com/critique/53257/Double_Vision

http://www.threadless.com/critique/53258/Drink_up

thank you. i wanted to keep the characters black and white just to give that old horror film look. i'm limited on colors anyway as i've maxed out on the 8, but i could use alternatives i suppose.



should i just go full color and see if it works with the simulated process?

I changed the color scheme as a few of you requested. Eventually I'll make it so the duplicate letters such as the "B", are not the same.



8 color print - I'm debating on whether or not i should have the characters on the back with the writing on the front or vice-versa...



tell me what you think!

Great, smart and awesome design! Only thing that I don't feel is the slogan (I mean the form of slogan). Add background (dark chambers) and place the slogan. In my opinion.

ah i think i see what you're getting at Pressitiger, thank you. I'm just not quite sure how to approach that without adding more color or having it clash... oh and do you think the slogan should be separate from the other image (as in option b with it on the back)?

sorry but in my opinion...it doesn't need a thing....i think this is freakin awesome...i think you should put the slogan on the front with the artwork



mind checking mine?

i liked the V1 too

thanks Phiffer, but was that really necessary? as i'm giving legitimate honest opinions on designs, whether they are critiques or submissions. whats wrong with someone doing the same for me? i thought we were all here to help each other out? its not a competition.

Oh and Legoladii, thank you :)

I think you need to integrate some of the pruple of the text into the characters so the colours are balanced, I think keeping the text and design on the front is better too good luck with this !





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8 color print - I'm debating on whether or not i should have the characters on the back with the writing on the front or vice-versa...





as of now, the black (which is used for the lines and background) would have to be negative space in the image so its not used for ink (otherwise it would be 9 colors)....thats part of the reason i think the shirt would be best in black aside from also adding contrast.

something doesn't work here... maybe the text should be like coming from the scientist mouth - no word balloon just place it above the cartoon or on the monsters shirt..

and i liked your first color scheme better



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haha thanks guys, i wish i could take a vote or something. seems like half of you want the original b&w concept and the others want a more colorful option... I'll try to fix the "D" to be more legible, how about the new "B" is that ok? i don't know how else to keep it different from the other B.

the composition doesn't really work...



you've got some great illo skillzzzzz, i like the hand made type, the only thing is the type and images all seem like they are on their own and not interacting with one another...

Love the concept (very funny) and I like the change of colors to the green and purple scheme. You definitely have some awesome skills.



I have to agree with some of the others on here that the figures and wording seem to not be connected. Maybe adding a background or some kind of design that would create movement to draw the persons eye to the characters and then the wording would accomplish a cohesiveness.



Thanks by the way for you critique of my work.

Ok so i attempted to put some basic background elements as some of you suggested...don't know if it improves it any. I also changed the placement of the text and characters to see if it would make them blend better. Tell me if you guys think this is any better over the previous.

Hey man, this design is lookin' good! I really like the colors you're using. Nice choice. Not sure what to think about the stuff on the mad scientist's face though. Also, I think you should show us some placement ideas.



Can you help me with mine?

F-Bomb

Thanks!

Thank you, just to clarify though, what do you mean by "stuff" on the mad scientist's face? :)

oh... okay, so after I looked at it closer I realized that it's his eye. It was pretty small and I had a hard time telling what it was. Maybe you could make it bigger? It was just hard to see what it was without getting real close to the screen is all.



Thanks for your critique!

the eye on the left that is... (his right)

Yeah i'll see if i can make the eye read more clearly for the final submission...that was supposed to be the "regular" size of his eye while the other one is just a big crazy eye to add to the madness. Thanks for pointing that out though..



on a different note, i wish people who voted "don't submit" would say why...i can't improve otherwise. :/

for realz!

I really like the illustration and humor in this design, very nicely executed! One thing I notice is the design seems to be kind of all over the place, trying to fit it all on the front. I like how in version 2 you have the illustration on the front and the text on the back helping to isolate and enhance the beautiful elements in each. With the two together on the front it feels too busy making it hard to appreciate all the sweet detail you've put into everything.



Again, I really love this! I'd just like to see you play with placement again and see where it goes from there :)

Hi.



Great illo, save for the scientist face which I would change.

I like the b. option in version 2, and i would loove to see the text gone, or at least reduced to "body-builder". I just find that text limits the viewers imagination and brings worse scores generally. (when did you last see a print with text?).



I hope that was constructive. Your illustration is really tight and definatly shows skill!

Great work!!! I really like it.

IMHO you MUST SUBMIT! :)

New version in the works :) thanks for the tips

Oi I like this. Puns or plays on words crack me up. Colors are very zombie-esq and I think you captured the feel pretty well.



Would like to see the next version.



Critique Me Please?

I'm hoping this is my final version. (please few previous versions before critiquing). Once again i'm showing the placement on the shirt template - I tired my best to use all of your advice (although a lot of it was conflicting) but this is what i came up with. No longer is the text crowding the graphics, once again the text is on the back of the shirt and no longer with the "yeah i'm a..." before it. It simply says "Bodybuilder"..which is more than enough to get the joke across. I added a simple spatter behind the text and a kept the dark castle behind the characters on the front. I modified the scientists eye a bit so it reads a bit better on the face.

oh yeah...there is a white outline on both the characters and the text (hard to see when its that small) - let me know if you think it isn't necessary. It helps the characters pop out more though.

'i like this - its less cluttered than the previous one. text is definately necessary for the joke.



hmmm the white outline is not always necessary - but i think given the shirt color and the outline being black - it should stay.



good luck

I definitely like V5 best it gave me a good laugh, the colours are right and the design Isn't cluttered by the text nice :D



any help with mine would be great link text

http://www.threadless.com/critique/55977/Space_Defenders

Yea, I think you've got it. Really funny idea and it turned out well.



Take a look at MINE?

It has come a long way from v1! I think this composition works the best. I love how you did the castle in the background. This would have been great for Halloween!



http://www.threadless.com/critique/55901/Planes_Trains_and_Automobiles#lastcomment

concept is decent, but i dont' like the text on the back. I think you should just have an extremely buff frankenstien with a shirt on that says "Body Building Champ 1854" or something like that, and the professor as his coach.



Could you help me on this one and/or this one

i love your idea.. but what lahammerman said would be genius! i really like both of your ideas mixed together! maybe work it out?

Thank you all for the comments. I think i'm going to go ahead and push it into the running with my fingers crossed. Haha Lahammerman, that is a great idea, in fact my original concept sketch was something similar - i had the monster bench pressing (although i didn't think to write anything on his shirt) but when i pitched it to friends they didn't get it right away so i did the body part text instead.