Apparently not good enough, what can be done about that?

well, they're floating at the moment, give them some grounding by using floor shadows, and maybe add a bedroom in the background - not massively detailed cause it'll detract from the rest of the design, but just in monotone maybe.

the highlights and lowlights on the girl and monster are awesome so thats a good start. it really doesn't need a lot of work, just some touching up and context.

thanks for your comment on mine.

I agree, monotone bedroom details in the background and some shadows would do some good. Don't know about little girls and handguns, might be touchy subject.

I think light from the door will be a nice touch

I agree with digsy, you need to add some shadow on it. May be can try different color for the monster's hand?

Great idea with the shadow. I'll play around with adding a monotone background and some light.

Much appreciated.

man i love that art of work! chek mine out whan you have time! thank you :)

Hi! I like the concept but there are some things that bother me. Like, one hand of the monster has only three fingers. I know it's a monster, but still I find it lacks coherence this way. Also I think the hand on the door is weird. Check the position of a real hand opening a door that way, or better still, make both hands stretched forward. An I think light from the door (as someone suggested), would be nice. In that case, you should make the door darker. Right now it kinda looks like a window. Good luck!



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Great job.

I agree with everyone above me - shadowing, monotone details, light from the door, an extra finger - would all help to improve it even more :)

i really dig it, i think the comments about the shadows are really good. i don't know if you want to but you could also have blood coming out of the closet as a means of giving them a ground plane



speaking of blood what do you think of mine

http://www.threadless.com/critique/51911/the_revenge_of_death_metal

I like the concept too... agree with sbelleque that gun could become an issue though.



How about a less "mechanical-drawing" style for the door? It doesn't seem to mash well with the girl and the monster right now.



Thanks for your comment on mine, really appreciate it!

I have the same observation. It looks it the door and the girl are drawn by 2 separate people. The shadows are great on the girl, but something is missing from the door... like no shadow and definition on the door knob. Just small details like this will tie the drawing together. Thx for your comments on mine ;)

Maybe have to image blend more with the shirt itself, maybe some kind of fade to make the blend?



If you have time i would appreciate your comment on my latest submission.

Thanks!

I added some light and shadows.

way better! id say its ready for submission :)



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Nice idea, I think the gun might be frowned upon by the descision makers, but i cant really think of an alternative that wouldn't change the overall feel of the work.



Maybe add a few girls bedroom touches, teddy's dolls etc. Possibly something hanging from the door handle.



P.s You've lost the seams on the left sleeve of the shirt.

Cool design. The shadow from the door looks a little freaky though. Maybe start it from the edge of the door (on the right hand side) not the doorframe.

there is a lot of stuff wrong with this

'Stuff wrong' very useful. Thanks to those with real critiques.

I think the shadow isn't quite right yet: if the light is coming from the door, the shadow should be behind her (on the right side of the t-shirt). Also, the window in the door should led some light through. The way it is now, in my opinion, it looks as if the light is coming from the girl.

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Now that I think about it, I think it would be cool if the shadow of the monster was reflecting on the wall behind the girl.

sorry, i was very alseep when i gave wrote last. the shadows looked skeewed and werid as does the overall perspective. the light shining looks akward also and would at least look better if it wasnt a gradiant, plus a I would completely redraw the kid with the gun