Shake your head and free those brilliant thoughts :)

This just popped in my head... It is simple, basic, not finished and not that great, but tell me what I can change to make it something, and if it even has potential at all.

I was thinking myself to makesomething coming 'off' the head- to show the thoughts, but I haven't come round to make that.

I dont know if youre going for this or not, but the girl seems to fade into the background color. I think "free" seems more like something that is emboldened and standing out. Maybe a background color that is more different in value from the darker pink? Or a completely different color?

I imagine this girl looking off the shirt, almost like shes about to leave the shirt itself. Nice image; try something coming off the head just to see. As long as the style stays with the image you already have, I think it could work.

its a bit too photoshop-cutout-design.. especially the edges in the hair..

I like it, but it needs something.

okey thanks :) I'll work on it!

@Snash: I am changing the colours completely: at the moment I've got yellow for the hair, andgreen and blue for the rest. I

@umbrellaboy & eatmorechick3n: I'm changing the hair too, which will give it something completely differen't from what I've got.

V2 will be up soon

different colours, something new and a huge change over all.
What do you think?!

I prefer these colours

and the sketchyness

mm nobody's commentng. Lets just hope that when I wake up there will be some more comments then,,,

xx

Like the hair better in V#=3. What is she freeing herself from. Also we need some idea of where it's going to fit on the shirt, I can see you having issues placing this.

I'll think about the placing - I was thinking bottom hem, but maybe I sould round it off at the bottom and just put it in the middle/top? My original thought was that she's freeing her thoughts- shaking them ouut of her head, ready to be used... But I'm not sure if that still comes out of the design??

Should I make the style more sketchy or not? More with line drawings? I think I'll try that... :)

Thanks for the comments so far

i like the hair on v3, but i like the face colors of v1 better. the blue/green combo makes me think of zombies.

I will try some other colours then :)
thanks!

I like v1 better overall, I liked the way it fades into the background. I like those colors too. I'm not sure about the sketchiness either, it looks more photoshop'd than a real sketch.

I think it'd look good on the bottom right corner.

Nice design and concept.

In the first image she looked like she was flipping her hair around.
Now she doesn't. I think you need to draw it to look like someone flipping there hair around or it doesnt work with "break free" concept.

Jasper7777, I was thinking that too, about the flipping around. I'm still working on it! :)

Thanks Dr.Ev, but what do you mean with you think that the sketchyness looks more like it's photoshopped?

that hair texture looks sweet. but how come you took out the section of hair that was in front of her forehead in v1. I think was what originally gave it that look of flipping the hair around.

i prefer v1...just not on orange

wow i like the colors.
i love the hair too.
and a hair flip would look pretty x)
but why is there no hair on the right side of the girl?
i kinda liked V2's hair except it was a bit too poofy.
and yes agree with the seeing it on a shirt (:
PS. Critique my designs too 8)

I have no idea why there's no hair on the right side, whoops! I totally forgot about this one, smart, right? Anyway, I'm going to look for my files on this one, then I might try to do some more with it :)

I really like the detail and color of the hair. I would simplify the face so it's just one color to show off the hair more.


crit mine when you can

They way you did the hair is awesome!!! But I think the face does not fit together with the hair... maybe you need to simplify it somehow... Anyway, I like the design.

Please comment:
http://www.threadless.com/critique/24076/The_Puzzle

hi thanks! It's random getting these comments on them so much later! it's great though.
ANyway, you're probably rgiht about the face! I'll have a look at it when I find the actual files! Thanks!

(and if anyone even reads this, crit my other please crit one too if you want to!)

definitely agree with goobers18 love the hair on vr3 but the colors on the first version for the face is a lot better.

you should keep working on this one, I like how the hair looks in v3 why not try to apply that style to the rest of the girls face??

Crit mine? ty :)