I think the font might need to be changed. I would like to put it on some different shirt colors also. Any suggestions?

I don't think you actually need to say "oh snap!" You could probably get away with just an exclamation mark. Other than that it's really cool.

Any suggestions for my new one?

http://www.threadless.com/critique/50629/Drawn_of_the_Dead

The blue bar around the top of the outlet is rubbing me the wrong way.

I agree with Libster and gia13... maybe you don't need that blue line. Also, maybe make it a tad smaller?

Other than that, it's a fun idea!



If you can, please critique mine:

http://threadless.com/critique/50641/bon_voyage

Thanks

Hmmm... I really appreciate the advice guys, but trust me, it looks wretched without the blue line. I was really trying to give it the appearance that the shirt was the wall that the outlet was on. Any ideas how I could still deliver that perspective without using the blue lines? maybe make them thinner or something?

I like the design, great idea.

however i agree with gia13 the blue border around the plug is bothering me a little.



other than that i like it.

try making the word bubble more cartoonish - a comic feel even? i would eat least try a different font.



thx for the feedback =)

I think no text, and the tongue and x eyes need some work. They look cartoony while everything else doesn't.

this is funny. Work on the scorch marks more and when the shading is right you won't need the blue border anymore. I also agree with libster in that you can do without the wording. Instead, make the expression of the remaining plug say it all. shock, surprise, worry... OH SHIT! I'm next!!! As pantsworth stated, the "eyes" and tongue also need some further development as they don't really match the style/finish of the rest of the illustration.



It's a fun concepts, I'm interested to see what you do with this.



If you get a chance I really appreciate some feedback on Alone in the woods.



Also, if you could toss a vote my way for Chick In A Box!, that would be cool too.



Thanks.

Pretty neat. Agreeing with Pantsworth, without the "oh snap" it might be funnier, but it's still pretty funny. Nice job.

yes, the blue line has to go, and the text bubble could be an exclamation as mentioned. to get this done without the blue lines, change the opacity on the scorched part. hope you can work it out.



Could you please comment and vote on my design?

i agree, remove the blue line, either completely remove the text or change the font, and tone down the smudge marks a lot. they probably don't need to go much further than the border of the outlet.

Haha, cute lol!!!! I like the idea, but I think it would work better if the design were more cartoon-like.



Oh yeah! Check out my design if you get the chance! I would really appreciate it!!

Kawaii Ramen