Allright...Showing how the Titanic really sunk. Most of this picture is made out of wrinkled or folded paper (e.g. water, iceberg, ships, etc.) and then collaged together with drawings and photos.



I would really love to have some advice on the placement...Especially on how to handle the really horizontal water. Any ideas how to make it look good?



I am still working on the colors (even though this is what it's going to look like, roughly) to bring out that made-of-paper-style a little more.



Thx in advance....

Allright...Showing how the Titanic really sunk. Most of this picture is made out of wrinkled or folded paper (e.g. water, iceberg, ships, etc.) and then collaged together with drawings and photos.



I would really love to have some advice on the placement...Especially on how to handle the really horizontal water. Any ideas how to make it look good?



I am still working on the colors (even though this is what it's going to look like, roughly) to bring out that made-of-paper-style a little more.



Thx in advance....

just a little "bump"

Thanks for the load of help on my blog!

Lol! This is great. I think the water looks beautiful, I wouldn't know how to change it. As for placement I'm thinking Option A. I don't know why, but that's the one that really speaks to me :) The only thing I would change would be the ship itself.. if you can some how get a picture of an actual boat instead of a paper boat, I think the idea would be a bit more clear. But if you can't and you choose to keep the paper boat, write 'TITANIC' somewhere on it so people can catch on to the idea a little quicker!

thx...i did one version with"titanic" written on the ship, but i did not like it that much, since everything else works without typo...is it really important that the ship is symbolizing the titanic? or does it work with any ship? i'm not so sure...



i liked the fact that the ship was made of paper like the other stuff but i don't have to stick to it. I could easily rip a titanic from the web and draw it.



any more opinions on this? or concerning the placement? i like option A better, too...if you guys have any other ideas concerning the placement i'd be more than happy to check 'em out. thx a lot Ars Fera.

when i first saw this i thought it was the moon....and then i was like...why is there a boat on the moon?? and then the iceberg's propellor looked like a satellite dish...



i think maybe if the color of the ocean wasn't the same color as the iceberg...then it might not look so lunar...ya know?

hum. true. when you are too far into your own work you can't even see simple stuff like that. thx

oh man



i thought that was the moon as well

I agree with those up there ^.. everything is kind of blending together... I like placement A a lot!

okay..so for starters i'll change that. you think i should go blueish with the water?

definitely go more blue with the water. I think it will help fight the "moonish" look, and also lessen the contrast between the shirt color and picture, which is a little too in your face right now

cool! thank you all so far. I'll try to do a new version till tomorrow. check back to help me out....

Allright...Showing how the Titanic really sunk. Most of this picture is made out of wrinkled or folded paper (e.g. water, iceberg, ships, etc.) and then collaged together with drawings and photos.





I would really love to have some advice on the placement...Especially on how to handle the really horizontal water. Any ideas how to make it look good?





I am still working on the colors (even though this is what it's going to look like, roughly) to bring out that made-of-paper-style a little more.





Thx in advance....

hmmm..strange. wrong text...okay:

i changed the water to blue consisting of 2 extra shades of blue and the shirt-color.

I'll do another version, with a "real" titanic instead of this paper one and correct a slight coloring mistake til tomorrow, since i'm running outta time for today.

Still awaiting your opinions. Thanks a lot.

Cool idea, but I don't know about the ship. Not much about this says "Titanic" to me. In fact, it looks like there's two competing jokes going on here: people driving an iceberg and intentionally sinking a ship versus a paper boat hitting an iceberg and sinking instead of a real one.



The paper textures work great for the icebergs and the water because that's what icebergs and water look like. I probably wouldn't have even guessed that they were paper without your description. So without knowing that, what's the significance of the obviously paper boat?



If the joke is that some guys in an iceberg wrecked the Titanic intentionally, then show us the actual Titanic, not a paper boat meant to represent the Titanic. The crumpled paper is a great idea, but I would use it as a means to an end, not as the point of the design itself.

Durr. Should have hit Refresh.

Anyway, I'm looking forward to seeing this with a real ship. I think it'll make a big difference.

now i'm convinced, too. so tomorrow i draw the titanic!

it is a paper boat till now, because as you guessed, there really were 2 ideas colliding. the one with the paper and the one with the titanic and the ppl inside the iceberg.

thx for your help, nasmo!

the water is definitely an improvement!

Changed the water a little bit, added the "real" titanic and some twirls in the water.

Let me know what you think and tell me which parts need work in your opinion. Thx a lot

bwahahaha! submit this! It's funny. maybe at Leo and Kate Winslet at the top in their pose. I think this is good to go.

Love the development! I'd buy it :]



critiques most welcome

http://www.threadless.com/critique/50061/I_m_watching_you

thanks for the comment on my 'life in the shadow', sausage_moe.



I think your illustration is beautiful, I like the atmosphere and the theme is innovative, to say the least. I am thinking that maybe you should to use a bit different color tone on the parts of the objects that are submersed in water compared to those sticking up?

thx aha. thought about it, didn't try it yet. it's kinda difficult though, since i'm scratching the 8-color limit already (right now 8 colors)... but i'll give it a shot and see how it turns out...maybe i'll pt it as a new version.

wow, i must say your style is really unique! i dont like the cutaway part of the iceberg too much though. i think you could try simplifying the colors, and try to make a focal point. right now i feel that theres just so much detail all wanting attention you dont know where to start looking at first.

Bwaha! I do love this, it's funny, even though the Titanic incident was sad, lol... but Actually, wasn't it called, lik... the Titan or something? I don't know, but it was sad, hah. But still this is great. I only don't like the gradient thing goin' on for the cut away of the iceberg ship sub thang.

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Awesome design but It looks to me as if the ship has too much detail. Great design though!

thx, everybody.

@agrimony: what exactly do you mean by simplifying the colors? use less? that would be quite hard. agree on the detail on the ship though.

as for the cut-out part of the iceberg that was mentioned a few times, i couldn't think of a better solution til now, but i'll be on it.

keep 'em coming so i can do the changes at once:)

neat idea! I would try getting rid of/ moving the ice directly behind the top of the periscope cause it kind of blends in with the background.

Nice idea..

Im not sure if i like the way you can see into the Iceberg (like a chunk of it is missing)... maybe another window, like you have on the side.. or just have it fade and you can see inside... and maybe less stars going up on the shirt...



aside frtom that looks GREAT!

I agree less is more with the stars. I also agree that a port-hole window for viewing inside the window would be a good idea to look into.

good idea. thx, jodabaum and andy. why did i not think of that? i guess that's why i'm here;)

yeah i meant use less heh. yeah i guess its hard...

all i could do is drop one shade of grey, but it really doesn't help the design IMO. need those other colors really bad :D

THOSE BASTARDS!



looking good :D

way too low on the shirt. move it up so the horizontal band of water goes across the main part of the chest (think boob area) and the stars could go off to the shoulder and sleeve.

any other thoughts or comments? hopefully i can manage to upload a new version before my vacation...so: NOW'S THE FUCKIN TIME! :)

one last "bump"...thx in advance...

look's good to me. Maybe you could do like an old school comic style x-ray vision kinda thing on the iceberg if you are looking to change that part.

lol it's funny! can u check mine out? :)

http://www.threadless.com/critique/49994/I_Loave_You

The absorbed part in the water of the submarine should have a different aspect, for example less precise!

thanks a lot. it might take some while to do another, improved version, but please do check back in 2 weeks.

Lovely details. Maybe add something floating on the water? Maybe a chunk of the gas dispenser or whatever.



If you have time please :

http://www.threadless.com/critique/49011/nuoooh

So sorry XD i meant the tube that release gas i don't know what is it called

For a t-shirt some detils are too small for exapmple the guy in the iceberg. I would zoom in a bit.

critique my double hug

I'd remove the bottom part of the ship, in my opinion it's in a bad perspective, it doesn't match with the distance of the upper part, due to the "inclination" of the sea.



Still a good work!!

Oooh, put people in the water, and emergency boats!

Jaws of HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA! .... Heh... Lawl...

okay. took me some time to get back to work, but here is the 4th version.

less stars, different way to look into the submarine, bigger people, no underwater titanic and a few minor adjustments. i hope you like it. please keep the comments coming and also critique on the placement. i did a second option since this was a request on version 3. changing the underwater parts of the submarine did not turn out too good, so i left it the way it was. maybe i'll add a few lifeboats and some floating stuff, but right now i don't feel like the pic needs any more details. thx for any comments...

Ooo I like how far this has come!!

I like the bottom placement, I'm not sure why but it would definitely be my choice. Is this going to wraparound to the back? If not, I suggest some how ending the water before it reaches the sides, maybe just a sort of circle-ish view of the water? Because if it were to stay like this and not wraparound, it would look quite awkward with the design cutting off right at the edge. Other than that, I would mess with the stars a little and make that big star near the horizon a little smaller. It looks great though, I love the new window into the submarine!!

And if you're not too busy, I would sure appreciate a comment and score for my second sub ever!!

wow.thx.

no wraparound. the water is supposed to fade out, before reaching the sides...like, dissolve into dots...dunno how to call it.

havn't put much effort to the stars yet, but will get to that..

thx for your comment on mine!

but i don't really see anything that needs work (besides thefading water part). like the idea and the design is great :)

i think 1st placement is to close to the tshirt bottom edge, so you could lift it up little bit. And also on first tee i like star path, how its goes.

Details is ok and agree to comment about bottom side of ship. Now it looks better

The first placement where the water is lower than the one on the right, is just perfect. It's actually amazing. I love how your tee evolved from its original design. It's a work of art.

thx guys...i prefer the first placement, too. just wanted your opinion on the 2nd option since asher27 suggested it in V3.

haha that's awesome, definitely submit it

perhaps you could see part of the ship under water as you can see the iceberg? apart from that i likee

haha... i just deleted that bottom part mularam check out the previous version. any thoughts on that subject, ppl?

The only thing that bothers me is the propler of the submarine, otherwise I think it's a great idea. And It looks better without the underwater bit of the ship - at least for me.

Thanks for critiquing mine! This design has really improved.

The scuba diver driving looks a bit too close to the window though.

It's like the bottom of the steering wheel would hit the inside wall of the sub or something.



I like the first placement and the shirt color choice is great.

I agree about the steering wheel being too close. Out of the two, I prefer the bottom placement, but I think something in between may actually be best.

really good. i think the positioning of the image on the left is the better one of the two.

like the left version better, too.

I LOVE THIS!



I always wondered why the hell the captain of the titanic never saw a big ass ice burg right in front of it. Puzzling.



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I cannot see anything that needs to be changed per se - except that you should re-include the other part of the ship under water, you have developed it nicely from its beginning stages up to the current one. This is an interesting concept!

Some of your line work is a bit scratchy. That might be the intended aesthetic, I'm not sure. If it is, keep it. If it isn't, work on it. It's a pretty solid concept altogether. Nice work!



Check out my latest if you've got the time!

really liking the idea and (the left shirt's) positioning. well, bump it up a little bit like some others had mentioned. try making the edges of the waves just splash out (similar to the bottom of the surface, like its a puddle or oil sitting on the surface... that probably doesn't make any sense). the actual art seems a little rough to me still.. it's not bad by any means... but i personally feel it could be a little more sleek. definitely keep the stars and how they curve up, that's a great element.



if you, or anyone else for that matter, have some time i'd like to have some criticism on mine.

don't have much to say that hasn't been said already - left placement but a little highter, scuba guy and the wheel look a little too close to the inside o the iceberg (does that make sense? they just look kinda flat) otherwise i really like it.

one thing, if you're not going to show titanic under water (which i kind of agree with) then maybe you could try make it a touch bigger?

thanks for your commenting on mine

so...underwater-titanic like in V3 or no underwater-titanic like in V4???

help me out ppl. cast your votes, since i cannot decide after so many different opinions. for now i'd make the upper part a little bigger and move it a little towards the back of the image, so it appears further away and a little bigger in comparison to the submarine.

i will make up 2 or 3 options of how the water is situated on the shirt for the next version. coming up soon...



SHOW TITANIC UNDERWATER? YES (V3)? NO (V4)?

please vote on that titanic issue....yes or no?

bump

V4 FTW! I really like this design. like others have said, it's really evolved from the first version to this one. I would have never thought to use paper as a water/ice texture. Looks awesome. Sub now!



Could you please take a look at mine?

Really cool idea...looks like the Jules Verne Nautilus :)

I have only one critique concerning the colour you choose...I would rather prefer less "agressive ones"...you know, like pastel colours.





Can you help me on my critiques???

Chinese medecine

Edison idea

i would try give it a the blu a lighter colour



culd you help me with my critiques

http://www.threadless.com/critique/51817/BIG_BAND

hey, danke für deinen netten comment ;)

schön zu sehen, dass es mindestens noch einen andern deutschen hier gibt :P

an dem fransigeren look des risses arbeite ich grade.

dir auch viel erfolg mit deinem design, is echt cool.

ich mags übrigens mit unterwasser-teil der titanic lieber, scheint aber geschmackssache zu sein.

Don't show it underwater.

Print it lower on the shirt so it fills it up more.



A comment and a score would be lovely

@ayearinreview: thx, for the help

@bengineer: ja...scheint geschmackssache zu sein. ich finds ohne besser obwohl ich mich in die wirbel und blubberbläßchen verliebt hab die dadurch verloren gehen!



ANY MORE VOTES ON WETHER TO SHOW THE UNDERWATER-PART OF THE TITANIC OR NOT???? v3 vs. v4??

I vote for version 4, I think it works a lot better without showing the other half of the ship.

I also like the progression (for the better) of this piece. :)

thx everybody. i'll correct some minor mistakes then and finish the 2 options about the water...and i'll see you back here in a little while.

Allright. I changed some minor details (tried to unflatten the scuba-guy, moved the titanic back a little, etc.).

What's really bothering me now is that i can't find a way to end the water at the sides of the shirt...I came up with 2 options, which do not satisfie me, but cannot think of other that would look better. HELP, PLS! It's kinda tricky since one of the 3 colors is the tee-color, thus making every attempt look crappy. thx in advance for all your comments. You've all been a huge help so far!

bump

thx insiddius...

concerning one: the whole point was not to meat the t-shirts seam at the sides, so an iceberg would not really solve my problem...plus i already have the one which sunk the titanic on there.

concerning two: just have the light drop into the picture? i can't really see what you're getting at...

Nice! I'm not really digging the waterline, maybe if you remove it, and then just indicate that it's water around the objects in the water if you get what i mean, I think it would be better integrated with the shirt, just my opinion anyway keep at it! :P



If you got time please crit me

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2

mhhh..good thought...maybe i'll try that. thx

I like option 1 with the pixelated edges. I almost feel the top of the ice berg should be bigger but all in all the details are great!

Details look great, I'd make the top of the berg a little bit bigger or closer to the ship, but I love it! And I like the square pixel edge best!

This is crazy great!!

But I liked the way you used the water in v4 better.

You've been doing this for a long time right =)

nice idea.. my suggestion is to make the fake iceberg as the top part of a submarine, so you won't need the divers..

Might be better to move the design up on center chest, less stars and sky.

Did you use cut out filter on photoshop for the water? looks great! need more brush work on the edges tho.

this looks great. but i think i prefer option 1. have you thought about having a moon in the sky? i wonder how that would look?

danke für deinen letzten comment zu meinem design. ich habs mit dem physikalisch korrekten schatten probiert, aber ich find irgendwie, dass die "falsche" version besser aussieht :P

wär schön, wenn du nochmal nen blick auf meine flsh-slideshow werfen könntest, ich will's jetzt bald subben.

zu deinem wasser-problem fällt mir leider auch nichts ein im moment, aber ich mach mir gedanken... und sonst sieht das hier auch echt spitze aus. ich würd auch die größe des fake-eisbergs oder der andern eisberge nicht ändern, alles stimmig und witzig so.



check out mine, too

this is a really cool idea and i think the execution is coming along really well. I like option two personally.

Looking rad!

~maybe~ make the waterline bumpier and less 'static' around the submarine, but it looks awesome. That might make it look bad, IDK.

Awesome! I think you should show the Titanic only above the water as in this version, but the water definitely looks best in Version 4. Like the lower placement best. Good luck!!

Option two is teh best I think, don't go with the halftones. I like this a lot, and I think it might be ready for submission



give me some feedback too if you get the chance

http://www.threadless.com/critique/52231

what do you think...might it actually be best to run the water from seam to seam like in V4? i dunno if they can print it like that?! but the other options look kinda stupid...i think

du hast recht, sieht wirklich viel besser aus mit dem wasser von saum zu saum...hmm, du könntst es doch einfach submitten und wenn sie's ablehnen weißte, dass es nicht geht :P

ich kenn mich da leider nicht so aus.

vielen dank für deine bewertung und deinen comment zu meinem design! sag bescheid, wenn ich deins $5 kann ;)

grüße

I like the water on V4. Go for that. Nice work.



Please crit mine.

thx guys! i'll be on it soon. got another great 1 comin up soon so i kinda didn't pay attention to the titanic anymore...i'll submit the seam-to-seam version then i think.

Option two for sure!

sry. some first sketches on monday. this one will be updated by then as well...

Hey Sausage



You been working on this one for a while now...nice seeing the progress it has made.



My only suggestion (which people have already done so already) is to make the iceberg a wee bit bigger. Other than that, fine job!

Allright. i decided to keep the water stretching from seam to seam...this is kinda what the presentation is supposed to look like. comments on placement, presentation and even design are more than welcome! thx for your patience...

oops...images are a little blurry. will fix that.

witty and sleak design. Good work!

bump

maybe the stars could fade out a littel, not fade the colour but just gradually reduce them over the t a bit more, apart from that i'd its good to go.

nice work!

and a very witty idea... :D

i agree about the stars. awesome design though! very clever!

love the colours!

check out mine?

http://www.threadless.com/critique/53257/Double_Vision

http://www.threadless.com/critique/53258/Drink_up

the model seems badly photoshopped. thats just from a presentation aspect though, design wise looks pretty tight.

yeah...the models not in it's final version. didn't wanna spent all that precious time for critiques. sry. lazy me. thx for ur comments so far. keep em coming:-)

thx everybody, for this long and really good critique round. would have never gotten this far by myself. i'll go for it after i finish the presentation.

really long and great improvement... all the best for the submission...:)

and also thank you for ur comment...

pretty messed but it looks awsome. submit!

hahaha. great one. I think a Russian iceberg in the shape of a sub might work better, but if this is you sub, then good one! Remember, you can always re-submit a re-worked design if you find the scoring is not to your liking.





Can you maybe critique mine if you have a chance? It's called Windows, and it's for the Geeks competition.



Thanks! :)

Hey Greententacle



I thought you couldn't re-submit re-worked designs or is it only if something has been rejected? Would it have any impact if the title was the same as the original work?



Sausage - Great design, should sub it (big props on the effort put into this...you have limitless patience my friend. Major respect to ya!).

Orange,

If you re-work a design regardless of rejected/ ended early/ low score, you can re-sub it. It's something they allow the let people try to improve upon past designs. That's where critiques and blogs come in super-handy :)

Super duper thanks Green! :-D

Ahahahahaha!





this is AWESOME!

it's finally up. thx so much to everybody who helped me during this awesome progress...

mhh..something went terribly wrong...

click here instead!

it's UP! now the link should work as well. thx everybody who helped out! please comment and score!

can anybody tell me how i can post something under "sub'd design" in the blog-section!

!=?

haha...nevermind. stupid me! i just figured that out all by myself! i'm a big boy already!

bump

thx everybody!

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check mine?

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3 days left...go for it :)

Very cool idea I love it!

critique mine?

http://www.threadless.com/critique/54107/My_Cheese_Is_Grilled

Hahaha, I like the concept a lot. It just looks very, well, "cut-out" -- for lack of a better word -- mostly because you clearly used the "cut-out" effect in photoshop.



I'm just a sucker for vector designs myself, even though I can't make one to save my life. Just a difference in personal taste and preference probably.



I still love the idea a lot, if this one doesn't make it maybe play around with it some more. I know that somewhere here is a great t-shirt design.



Cheers and happy designing!

why not comment on the page of the actual design instead of the critique?

one day left! last chance to comment and score!