An idea/concept came in mind this afternoon, so i decided to let it go. It's absurd, i guess, but not only...

Soooo, please, tell me if it's something i could sub...or not lol

i dig the placement & the cute illo. but i dont see the connection between the guy wth umbrella & the lil puppets...might wanna reconsider the lil puppets with something else.



sorry im blank for now............



ah! how abt replace the puppets n hands with hands pouring down water? too stale? too much to ask?

well, maybe i should change the sense...but in fact, we have two grids of read here: The weather thing is one thing........... The God/religion, and social/power hierarchy is another. It's about freeing ourselves from a lot of things...



But i know, i can go in SO different directions with it...that's why i put it on critique :)

Hey!



I like this one (also the fact that its on an orange shirt...the best colour of all!!!). I like the idea that Azarello had of hands pouring down water. I would like to add to this...how about maybe another hand pointing to the guy with unbrella, like the cloud and hands are targeting the poor bloke?



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Thanks!

Hand looks too much like the godfather hand.

Was that that you were going for? I don't get the connection.

like this



Godfather

@tymn: yeah, i know, about the hands, i thought it would be distracting to have those types of hands...and it does!



so i'll change them first. then, about the direction to go, i'll see depending on what you guys think :)



thanks

Well I love the simplicity of the design, so whichever direction you go, don't change that!

yeah thanks tymn, i won't change that, promise :)

i usually love simplicity in tee shirt design, so i know what you mean.

Anyway, this time, maybe i won't find a way to give this design a shot, but i'll try!

So here is V2!

As i said earlier, i didn't know yet what direction to take, and i make up my mind, leaving the puppets stuff, which was too dark, for a lighter concept, giving i hope more fun. :)

Added also the "planet hands" underneath the guy.



what do you think?

I really love the design and the simplicity. Nice use of white and the shirt color is great. I don't know how I feel about it off to the side like that. Why not center it, so that the wearer's head is coming out of the cloud? Then one would feel like a deity indeed.



Will you check out my critique ?

I love this shirt and I think is ready for submission...



If you have time, I would appreciate your comments

http://www.threadless.com/critique/48413/Drama_Queen

Very cool with the lightning bolts going to rain, maybe the third level of volts could be outline clouds and then the rain underneath. I must say I think you could do better than the stick figure. Maybe an outline raincoat, solid figure, outline rain boots, something that goes from outline to solid. Anyway cool idea, and very unique shoulder graphic. Cheers!

Oo how cleverly executed. I like everything about this lol. And the white on the orange makes it stand out and look beautiful! You probably already know that though.. lul..

The only thing I can really suggest is giving the guy a body, cus he sorta looks like he's got a crazy wedgie.. but that might be a personal preference..

It looks excellent though, can't wait to see it subbed!

And if you're not too busy, a comment for my first submission would be very much appreciatied!

wow, thanks a LOT for your awesome comments.



@strickenbrow: nice suggestion, i am not sure about it, but i'll try it, this could be kinda cool.



@quister: i like that! i will check it out. About the stick figure, it seems that people don't like it right now, i wanted to draw something childish...to follow!



@ars fera: thanks, again, the guy seems to bother you...so i'll see what i could do.



my only concern is that i took big inspiration, i vectorized mainly the Godfather puppet hand, maybe i should change it a little, to avoid copyright problems? ot you think that's ok?

Solid. I like the placement. There are so many ideas at work yet its so simple. It works well.



Submit.



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I like it, but i see a bit of copy n paste with the mobiles/ lightning bolts.... i know the repeating imagery is needed more the design and it looks cool but i worry about lack of individuality in the design elements.



Could you critique my new collab design? Thanks!

this is sooo great!!! i love it...so simple!

thanks, nice suggestions again :)



@greenttentacle: the repetition of mobiles is obviously something i searched, to emphase the hierarchic symbolic...about the bolts, maybe you're right, i will try some stuff in a few minutes, one of the solutions could be what quister said, with little clouds...let's see!

Hey Jebs



I think this version looks great (love the addition of the hands). I think the stick figure could do with a mid section though. I agree with Ars Fera, that it looks like he's reached a new Guinness record as the biggest wedgie ever! :-)



Fab...looking forward to the next version!

Hehe nice I love the simplicity and the colors, I'm not sure but I think I like the stickfigure, like the childishness, but still think you could try out quisters idea for the guy, might look better anyway. Great work



if you got time please crit me

So for V3: i listened to your nice suggestions!

I put new elements on the mobiles, to get a more complex overall hierarchy.

I Perfected the "hand planet"

I tweaked the stick figure adding a mid section, but i still stick with this childishness style right now because i like it, even if quister for example was not sure. we'll see



thanks a loooooot for your feedback, you are all awesome!!!!!

So for V3: i listened to your nice suggestions!

I put new elements on the mobiles, to get a more complex overall hierarchy.

I Perfected the "hand planet"

I tweaked the stick figure adding a mid section, but i still stick with this childishness style right now because i like it, even if quister for example was not sure. we'll see



thanks a loooooot for your feedback, you are all awesome!!!!!

this is very cool, i wear it

yeah man digging the simplicity of it all. I like how its placed on the side like that and on the orange T its got a great pop on it. I'm not big on the massive cloud over the shoulder tho, but that's just me. Alot of critiques seem to like it. Everyone's got different taste. But great job man.

Oh, wow, I really like the shoulder cover! What about making the figure less stick-figure-ish? It seems rough compared to the rest of the detail.



If you don't mind, would you look at my Panda?

thanks, again, you rock :)



So, about the stick figure, it seems that he doesn't have a lot of success...so i'll try different styles when i have the time.



About the massive cloud, from the beginning, i have an alternative i've not shown, because the massive cloud is appreciated...but for the next version, i'(ll put this alternative to see what is prefered.

It looks really, really, really nice. Submit!

ya i like it!

thanks ! :)

other suggestions? ^^

I like the improvements. I preferrfed the older stick figure-- it had a cool energy.

i really like this, and hope that it gets printed. i would buy one.

is the stick guy supposed to have pieces of himself missing?

V4 :)



THANKS you so much for all the great feedback, first of all.

Then, One major change is the character, i want to be a childishness style, but i improved it, giving it clothes and a better vib' (thanks quister and others)



I also added a new placement, keeping the massive cloud on one, but removing it in a second placement...



Now , i listen to you :)

Gets better with every V! IMO, I'd say feature the big cloud shoulder and show the small cloud placement as an alternate. The big cloud is very distinct and we're all hard wired to take notice of of things that are different. Love the world made up with hands, very unique idea. Could be a concept unto itself. A cultural icon for friendship and the world pitching in to help one another (green for eco-friendly?). Also, I think the rain drops could start a bit higher up on their strings, just to break of up the above string pattern a bit. Anyway, very cool concept and design. Cheers!

concept and execution are great. i agree that the large shoulder cloud is great in that it makes it a very unique tee, but i would still feature the other placement. oh, and i love the orange =)



a look at if you get the chance night vision

I prefer the big cloud shoulder one! The character brings more focus and details, and it does look childishness. very well done! I'd say you probably can submit it now.

could you please help on mine?

http://www.threadless.com/critique/48560/Sprite

thank you.

Thanks, i love all those interesting feedback that are a big part in those WIP success :)



@ quister and wild thing: yep, i'll keep the alternative...as an alternative :)

@quister: about the raind drops beginning higher, that's nice, i agree with you, so it will be in the next version: thanks! About the hand world, thank you again! I like it incorporated in this design, that was a concept i made previously, but never published here, as i thought was not strong enough to be the only idea on a tee shirt.

oops, not finished :)



@aha: thanks about the character, i think he's now close to what i wanted.



@all: i'll change a little (at least) the mobiles/puppet master hand because i worked with "the godfather" model, and i don't want to have issues about copyright, even if i already changed it a little.

I'm not sure the second option with the smaller cloud is needed. The first one is much better I think as it highlights a hierarchy of clouds, to hands and strings, and then onto the figure. Glad you sorted out the shape of the planet, it looks much better now!

i like it :)

it is a good concept.



but i think the hands are too close to the godfathers... I'd try to change them a bit.



please crit mine!



http://www.threadless.com/critique/48441/Monsters_Inc

this is so sweet - yay for orange!

i really like the choulder cloud although i can see how it wouldn't be everyone's cup of tea so the alternative is a good idea.

once you've moved the rain up a bit you should have a read-to-sub design



i could do with some comments on my pot and kettle if you would be so kind, thanks

yeah, that's cool, new comments :)



@chris rowson: thanks, indeed, i thought the planet had to be better balanced.



@b.sonsin: yes, you are right, it will be my next version, when i have time, i guess friday.



@digsy and agrimony: thanks :)

yeah, brightwood, i'll surely vote and put a comment before the design's votes end.

and thanks a lot for your appreciation! today is a beautiful day ^^

I see that everybody loves Orange!!! Hehe!



I like the current design...the kid is a real gentleman with the top hat! teh orange reminds me of a ride called the Oblivion in Alton Towers in the UK...anybody been on this vertical free fall rollercoaster?



Sorry...back to design....keep teh massive cloud!

it makes me smile!

earth, gentleman and big cloud are perfect!

ANd maybe there's the point of idea that someones hand rules the rain but i'd like simple summer rain. it would be simply joyfull design

it's fun, i like the big cloud version best.

thanks everybody!



@smalynai: hmmm, thanks you, but i'm not sure to understand, what you mean exactly with " maybe there's the point of idea that someones hand rules the rain"...?



anyway, what do you think of my title design: "in Umbrella we trust" ? good or better idea?

@orangesensation: and yup, i'll keep the massive cloud of course :)

V5:

So, for eventually, problems of copyright, i reworked the hands, mirroring them and retouching them too. I also put the rain drops higher than V4 (thanks quister again).



What do U think? Better than V4? Not anymore copyright issues (with "godfather" hands)?

thanks brightwood, so for you V5 is better than V4... ok! :)

Yeah, hands are good, no © problems, they can't say they own puppet strings :P

I like the grunge on the first slide but maybe use it as a frame around the edges to keep that look but not imply it's part of the design? Anyway, great idea and execution, I think you're ready to go. Cheers!

Oh! I forgot to say the world of hands, IMO, is very simple, very strong, and could become a modern cultural icon for world friendship.

really really love this, sub it!

THANK you two :)



@quister: thanks again for all the nice suggestions you've made. Abou the Slide 1, i'll see if a mix of textures only in the edges works well. About the world of hands, maybe i'll re-use it eheheh ;)



i think ill sub it tomorrow if the comments comfort me ^^

Love it! The placement, the colour, everything! Submit!!!



also vote for me? http://www.threadless.com/submission/220085/Three_dimensions_of_terror

@quister: again, you hit me, i tried wto smoothen the texture behind, and the presentation is even better :)



@stayoftheheart: thank you!



just wondering, the gentleman could have something in his hand, growing, or dunno, but i thought of that yesterday... i like it like that, but i always try to improve, so what do you think...ideas ?

Hello :)



Looks cool



Please crit mine back!

hmmm, it might be worth doing it just to see, but i would say aomething in his hand might just be a step too far and unnecessary. there are so many different elements going on in here - the hands, all the elements coming off the puppet strings , the rain and the eart of hand prints - i think adding something else might actually take away from the design.

that said, i always like to be proved wrong (that's not true at all but in this case less pretend it is!), so by all means give it a go and there'll be lots of friendly helpful people to tell you whether it works or not.

@digsy: hello :)

i agree with you, that was just something that came in mind, but i don't think it will be a success, it could break the global harmony, and disctract from the rest...



...we never know!

Love the design and the colors, The placement I'm not in love with

@ivantobealone: thanks, for the third slide, without the massive cloud, i think i'll put a centered placement ;)

well maybe you can extend the cloud andhave it come from the sleeve and still have a center placement, just an idea

well i tried to put the massive cloud central, from the neck, and it doesn't work, but i didn't try the cloud still from the sleeve and central placement, so thank you for the suggestion, i'll give it a try ;)

wow .. man this is perfect ...

think it would look more suitable on light blue tee ..

plz vote $ comment ...

looks great - as usual.



i think the only thing that might need some attention is the face

@ jamesf: thank you. I already let down the idea of putting something in his hand, if that what you meant ;)



@MKcmyk: i thought of this, but i was not sure of the contrast white/light blue, not as deep as the orange one. Anyway that is something to think about, i agree, as an alternative (slide 3 eventually) thanks

This is looking fantastic. The only thing I'd say really is that I'd like the rain drops to follow the contours of the puppet strings. The raindrops as they are now run straight across horizontally and imo I think they'd look better if they curved with the puppet strings. Does that make sense?



Thanks for the comments on my WIP, there's a new version up and I'd appreciate your comments, thanks.

hi CHris! Thanks for your comment. I just don't understand what you mean about the rain drops curved...you seem to say the strings should be curved?



sorry for my english betraying me :/



@all:

I rethought about the whole concept, and i think i'm going too far from the initial concept which was stronger, and the reason why i wanted to design it.



The sense of absurd but symbolic protection the gentleman has, is methaphoric, so are the elements on the puppet strings, which are meant to be "dangerous", and right now, the third scale of strings for example is not good, i mean, i put snow lol... i already find an idea to fix it, and i'll do it today or tomorrow. In fact, the cascade of controlling elements, and each other in a pyramid, must be more clear...even if the metaphoric weather stuff is understandable, the hierarchic danger that the gentleman will protect from is not so clear...



see you and thanks in advance :)

Hi! Here is my V6 :)



SLIDE 1 VS SLIDE2, which do you prefer?



I changed a lot of stuff here.

First, I developped and changed the elements on puppet strings, in harmony with the concept i was going away lately.

I mean: The sense of absurd but symbolic protection the gentleman has, is methaphoric, so are the elements on the puppet strings, which are meant to be "dangerous". So i added the sign symbol, and the human presence with "high voltage" symbolic.



Then, i put emphasis on the umbrella, giving it the color if spectrum/rainbow...along with the puppet strings.



The other question is, do you prefered the V5? in terms of concept, and graphically?

Love love love the one color version

eheh thanks, i also prefer the 1 color version...but i first have to see what people think abot it ;)

nice idea and good illustration good job ;)

if u'r not buzy help me http://www.threadless.com/critique/48843/pop_world

oh Jebs i just love the improvements..last time i saw was in version 1.



anyway first slide wud be best! keep it coming man!

Loove it! It's ready to be submitted ;)

@azarello : wow thanks a lot, i'm pretty happy with the direction i took, but that's also thanks to the community :)



about slide 1 vs slide 2, i lik the simplicity of the one color version,

but i like my attempt of coloring the umbrella, my concern is that it distracts maybe too much...and unbalance the whole design?

btw, check out my design :)

I think the colored one is better since the main thing in the design is the umbrella :)

jebs i do agree & know ur a fan of one color/simplicity (yup im a stalker & read ppl's blogs LOL)



but my view is, the rainbow colors do add depth to the rain & in some cases..distraction/out of place objects makes a simple design stand out. this is my view man.



final word is, both illo works for me ;) damn u tiger! :(

@azarello: lol, so i can't hide nothing to you ^^

thanks for the reply, what you say makes sense, especially because that was the point when i create this colored umbrella. Also, it pops up well on the tee shirt slide 3...

so i don't know what to do right now lol... let's see what ppl thinks eheh



@gergeosson: thank you, so that's 3-1 for the slide 1, right now ^^

yup yup, lets c wht the community says ;)



p/s: lemme know whn its up for sub ;) !

Absolutely definitely the colored version!

Cute idea!

thanks francesca, i will go toward the colored one i guess ;)

Thank you so much everybody for all the awesome feedback :)



I think that will be the version i'll sub!

Just updated a new placement and a new color tee shirt.

Anyway, if you have suggestions, i am still open for a few more tweaks.

I think it's awesome! I say sub it!



http://www.threadless.com/critique/48814/Keyboards

thank you ^^



I forgot: Do you think i change the TITLE In Umbrella We trust



Suggestions?

well, this design make me mad, i already think i have to remove the high voltage as it's maybe too trashy...

V8

A step backward in this version, as the high voltage symbolic on the previous version seems to me a little too "dark/sad". SO i remove it and replace it by a bolt like i did earlier.



except from that, that's the same as V7.

just a question about the title i asked earlier: "In Umbrella we trust" is good enough...or you have suggestions?

I really like this.

This is awesome!

Also, I think the title is good :)

this is really good i love the colors i love the orange one with the placement along the side. also amazing progression from beginning to end. i think this is ready to submit



Please critique mine if you could.

http://www.threadless.com/critique/48751/To_Love_Is_To_Be_Vulnerable

this is great.. :) i love the hand-controlling another hand thing...



sub! good luck!

Sub! Title is great!

This is awesome. I love the little tiny hands making up the continents! I like the blue shirt better, but maybe it just makes more sense to me with the sky and whatnot. But also I think the colors in the umbrella stand out better against the blue.



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Thanks in advance!

Hey Jebs thanks for the awesome feedback on my crit. Sorry I didn't make my earlier crit easier to understand - it doesn't matter though as this version is great! I think going with the slide 1 colour was the right direction to take so this should probably be submitted now, good luck!!

v9: New title: "In umbrella we trust (peace of mind)" :)



I hope you'll like it, as i think it's my best version so far.



Changes:

I changed the background and remove the orange one, as now, the umbrella pop up better, the general feeling better, and the sky atmosphere is of course more respected.

I remove the rain drops colored, which disturb the whole idea IMO.

Most important, to give the concept more harmony, and easier to read, the earth, humanity is now beginning to be colored, so, "protected" and "in peace" by the gentleman. The umbrella has the peace colors flag, and it's also the rainbow colors of course.



I change a little the clouds as you can see on tee shirts.



thanks again ^^

Great job dude! :) Even though i liked the orange tee better, the blue one suits better :) You should definitely use the first placement ;)



Help me out with my design if you don't mind :)

Hey Jebs



Lovely little additions to the current version. However, I feel kinda string about the blue colour T. Although I understand it makes sense, I thought the orange colour was more unique.



Will there also be an option to choose the orange colour?



Other than that, great work!!!



Help me out pls..to sub or not to sub....



Hanging with the Moon



Thanks!

thank you :)



about the orange one, i'll see what people thinks, if the orange is prefered, i'll at least put it on slide 2, on tee shirt template as an alternative.

Not to make you crazy Jebs but I'm still digging the one color V. Both are cool though. Maybe show the one color as well as the 7-8 color because the one color would be more attractive to threadless. Badbasilisk entered an incredible color version but also showed a one color and threadless decided to print the one color.

Anyway, looking good man! Cheers!

badbasilisk print.

quister, you are the best :)

believe me or not, i had exactly THIS badbasilik print in mind (which i love) since my V6. So, your comment is excellent, because it's just what i needed to be sure to go with those 2 versions in sub! Thanks again for your awesome suggestions, you don't mind the criticisms as long as they are constructive ones.



and now, i'll put the LAST version in the WIP just for information, but that what i'll sub too :)

nice idea...go for placement 1 on orange.



plz critique mine:

http://www.threadless.com/critique/48828/colourful_bliss

thx

Great!



Please comment on mine.

Yeah! Nice one Jebs! I also prefer the 1 color design.. COOL!



Please comment on my submission 'The Magic Mansion'. Really appriciate it!

hi dude, i think u should add some snow and roadsigns linked to weather dangers too ? not only lightnings and clouds. ^^

I too prefer the orange although the blue works fine. Maybe do 2 options - either:

One/multi colours, on either orange/blue?

Very cute! I like the first placement, a little off to the side! $



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http://www.threadless.com/submission/220360/jelly_beans

hmm..this is tough...first, i'd go with slide 2 placement.

as for the colors..i..still..think colorful version would work. i dont think this would work on one color..i notice most one color colors are..kind of sketchy illo. dont u think?

but if u can sub both versions, do it man ;) i said this once & im'a say it again, both versions got my attention!

wow, you are awesome guys! thanks for all those comments. :)



so, finally, i am making the templates for a 7 colors version on Blue Jean, and a 1 color version on Orange. Only one placement, on the side, as it's clearly the one i prefer and you prefer too!



@scro: hi dude, happy to read you here ^^. So, in the past, i already put some snow, and i tried on my backups to put more signs, but it's just too heavy/busy, and less poetic, just one sign is enough, and about the snow, it's a symbol that could be read in too many ways, so i removed it too.



@chris, kidloko, kayster, xeroefx: i listened to you, the ORANGE will come back in a few minutes in the next version :)



@azarello: i agree for the placement dude, and about the colors, you know what i think about too many colors , don't you? :p The main thing is here, color bring more signification help, and perhaps the one color is not as easy to read/understand, but graphically, i think i prefer the 1 color :)

First, again, and again, thank you for all the splendid feedback you gave me :)



then, this is what it's supposed to be the final version, with too alternatives: a 7 colors version on Blue Jean, and a 1 color version on Orange. only one placement, on the side of the tee shirt.

i really listened to you all to make this ;)

this is great...submit it and good luck. ill vote for you.



if you wouldnt mind checking mine out:



http://www.threadless.com/critique/48970/anatomy_of_type

It's ready dude, sub it! Love it!

Yeah! Great presentation, simple and direct. Ready to go, sub, sub, sub :D

yeah thank you all, it will be sub in a few minutes :)



i don't want to forget poeple, so i don't give names, but i know exactly each of you that helped me, and THANKS, the pleasure was i hope shared :)

Good luck Jebs! I'll certainly be $5ing this baby when it comes through!! Thanks again for the help with my critique.

I'd say... go for it!



Please check mine

Hey Jebs



Good luck with this one!!!! :-)

hey, thanks guys and girls, i'll post a link when it will be ready for voting :)

this is great! love all the little details like the hands on the earth, and love the placement. look forward to voting on this one.



Would appreciate comments and votes on my Brave Knight

Jebs, look forward to ur link once its up ;)

Good luck dude! :D

Awesome! Good luck!

looks great...

interested inhearing what you have to say about my design



http://www.threadless.com/critique/49127/MAMA_S_BOY

hey this looks really nice! sorry i missed out on the most part of it.. but i prefer the 1 color version :) glad u included it.

hey thanks everybody, i can't wait to see how it is appreciated and commented, i guess that will be ok for friday or nxt monday ^^



@ agrimony: that's ok, you'll be there for the next WIp, if not, i will come in the states just to kick your ass ahah :p

XD then you wont find me there because im not in the states =P

@ agrimony: loool, well at least, i take a good trip to the states as i never been there :) but where are you from?

I love the 1 color version a lot! It makes me smile!



please check out my critique



Thanks

I like both versions, but the all orange one a bit more.



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For sure for sure the 7 colored version, it looks so much more dynamic and interesting. Great design! Submit!



If you don't mind, would you leave a comment and a vote on my Panda?

Ehy great work, nice upgrade from the v1, I really like v5 it's original and I love the god father style hand

Looks great. Submit.

ahahaa i come from singapore

thanks a lot guys, the pleasure is all mine :)



@agrimony: wow! that's a place i always wanted to go! indeed, you are far from the states eheheh. I really thought you were american, as your english is stunning dude, i wish i had your level (but in singapore, i guess english is the second language spoken no?). that's the beauty of internet, communication all over the world ^^

well jebs u might wanna go to singapore whn this design gets printed *LOL*

better keep tht fingers crossed & momentum flowing ;) !

lol azarello :)



so that was pretty dam fast, the design is up for scoring yeah :)



and thanks a lot again, you are all aweseome, really ;)



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7 colours on blue jean is fantastic!

I love it!! *_*

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