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I think I'm going to bring that open oven door in some more so it's not touching the edge of the shirt.
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Hahaha, love the idea! I would omit the text completely, I think the idea is funny enough in itself. Also the muffins and oven have to conflicting styles, I would make it more consistent by doing the oven in a more hand-drawn style like the muffins. Maybe a vintage-style oven? I would also like to see the oven a little smaller on the shirt with more muffin band....maybe a tambourine player? Hope this helps...
would love some feedback on mine too :) |
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I like it! I'd agree tho, smaller. Also, I'm not as keen on the many gradients of the stove, I kind of like the simple look from the first version. Maybe a happy medium. Very nice tho!
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I think the plate idea will really eliminate the boxiness (is that even a word) of your design. I think it's a fun idea and you should keep messing around with it.
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I like the concept very much, but I think the words don't look very nice and needs more work.
Please check my design: http://www.threadless.com/critique/48570/City_Dream |
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i would ditch the stove... and the words....
make the muffins bigger and the focus... you could also use a play on words of "Brand Muffins" haha good luck! |
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Put them on a platter. Make the words much more subtle and work them into a texture on the rim of the plate. I do think, in this case, the words are significant to the pun.
The oven is overkill. (Ha, no pun intended.) Would you be so kind as to score and comment on my most recent sub? You can link here... I will not write on my clothes. |
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It looks fine. But i guess the gradient of the oven seem too odd with the shirt color. Try lowering the gradient?
Mind commenting on mine? |
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