Muffins Rock!

I get that's in an oven of some kind, but maybe play up the detail of the oven some more? Also the insturments that have black lines can't be seen against the background. Guitar player has no legs?

Muffins Rock!

Muffins Rock!

Fixed the back square so you can see the black of the instruments. Also added an oven door.

and gave the guitarist a leg. The other is behind his guitar.

Please tell me if this or the last version is better.

i like the last version

Some oven dials would make it a bit easier to figure out. I also think you should lose the text...

i dont think the door needs to be open, you have it closed and look through the glass and just use dials and stuff to show that its an oven

good idea, I'll give that a try

I like the idea of the closed oven too. I don't think I like the cursivey text... Oh and maybe you could try putting "Do you know" above the oven, and "The Muffin Band" below it.



Other than that it's great!

Very cute idea!

sweet... I'm definitely going to give the closed oven look a try. And I'll try switching the fonts too.

Cute idea.

The gradients may be hard to print on a shirt, maybe you cold try faking them with a color somewhere between the orange and grey.

May be cool too to feel the light and heat from the oven on the muffins, adding a bit of orange lightning on the upper part of their 'bodies'.

Well I hate critting like this, but you have a long road ahead. Enroll in some drawing classes. I believe your digital skills are their, but you need a better since for composition. Try working with standard boring fonts like Times New Roman and figure out how you make it appealing.



check out these books by andrew loomis. I believe creative illustrations would b the most helpfull.

http://www.alexhays.com/loomis/



A good site that's helped me allot is conceptart.org It's geared towards fantasy art, but everybody their has an open mind and can teach you the fundamentals of illustration.

Well... I believe that everyone needs improvement. Me most of all, but I'm really trying to keep this one on the cute and simple side. I don't need this one to be crazy complicated or detailed.

Thanks for the resources though kirpid, I'll be sure to check them out.

I would like to put some more shading in though, but aren't we limited to just eight colors?

I'd like to add more shading but aren't we limited to eight colors?

I like the drawing, it reminds me of the web comic "Explosm".

I like the last version better, with the text on the oven door. But you'll need to minimize the image in order to fit the door on the actual shirt.

8 colors is enough more than enough. Shading isn't really necessary in this case.



Just think about composition. Consider how recognizable this image is from a distance.



The lead singer should be in front, the drummer is hidden behind the drums and I don't see any drum sticks.



the elipses and squares are too apparently stock. The perspective is incorrect to say the least.

Okay... I made a better oven. I also changed the font. What do you guys think?

I think I'm going to bring that open oven door in some more so it's not touching the edge of the shirt.

Hahaha, love the idea! I would omit the text completely, I think the idea is funny enough in itself. Also the muffins and oven have to conflicting styles, I would make it more consistent by doing the oven in a more hand-drawn style like the muffins. Maybe a vintage-style oven? I would also like to see the oven a little smaller on the shirt with more muffin band....maybe a tambourine player? Hope this helps...



would love some feedback on mine too :)

I like it! I'd agree tho, smaller. Also, I'm not as keen on the many gradients of the stove, I kind of like the simple look from the first version. Maybe a happy medium. Very nice tho!

Hi, I like the joke but I think the design is simply too big for a shirt. I know you've put a lot of work into the oven, but I'm not sure it's necessary at all; it's kind of huge and distracts from the muffins themselves. Maybe they could be on a plate or just a blank backdrop. The text is still not integrating quite right. Possibly you could just use "The Muffin Band" and that would be enough to imply the joke. If you did that, you might be able to work the text into the illustration itself, on the drum kit.

Thanks a lot for all your feedback. I think I'm going to try what tovelet suggested and ditch the oven for a plate. I just can't seem to make the oven fit on the shirt very well. I'll upload a new version soon. Thanks for all your help guys.

I think the plate idea will really eliminate the boxiness (is that even a word) of your design. I think it's a fun idea and you should keep messing around with it.

Excellent idea. I digg the plate rather than the oven and definitely think you should remove the words. Also, maybe make the muffin's a little bit bigger and possibly give them faces? I dont know, just throwing ideas around...



If you could critique mine, that would be great:

http://www.threadless.com/critique/48529/Cat_Prism

make the design smaller and delete those words. nice design tho.

I am not sure about the oven now when it is kind of in 3D, the door of the oven is still just outlines. I don't think the door and the rest of the oven match? I prefer using just outlines, more graphic feeling, but that's me. I like the style of the illustration otherwise. cool!

I like the concept very much, but I think the words don't look very nice and needs more work.



Please check my design: http://www.threadless.com/critique/48570/City_Dream

maybe bigger muffins :)

i think the design can stand without the text :)

i would ditch the stove... and the words....

make the muffins bigger and the focus...

you could also use a play on words of "Brand Muffins" haha

good luck!

Hiii!!

I like the idea. I think it's better without text. You can put "The muffin band" on the drums.

The muffins are small, try do it bigger.

The oven, I don't know if it is really necessary. Maybe you can change the idea a little big.

Good luck!!

i like the idea....good luck!!



mind to score and comments??

It looks fine. But i guess the gradient of the oven seem too odd with the shirt color. Try lowering the gradient?



Mind commenting on mine?

I like it :) Think its a little big but you already commented on that so I wont go into that :P



I think the whole idea of a muffin band is awesome and I think you did a great job :)



If you have a sec, please check out mine:



http://www.threadless.com/critique/50710/Animals_Are_Delicious

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